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Robbiel Essay5121977
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There are good explanations below. For instance, you wrote, “Nancy’s coined term, “Just
say no to drugs” led to a refocus on the war on drugs and in 1986 congress passed the Anti-
Drug Abuse Act that among many of other things made a mandatory amount of prison time
for certain drug offenses; those offenses included a mandatory amount of 5 years in prison
without parole for possession of 5 grams of crack, in comparison to that of 500 grams of
powder cocaine. This was the cause for a lot of poor, black people to be incarcerated
because “crack” was a cheaper, less potent form of the drug, that many African-American
drug users abused. These policies caused a series of arrests that placed many people,
especially those of color, in prison.” With these, it’s clear how the Anti-Drug Abuse Act
contributed to the increase in African American parental incarceration rates. Nice one!
Main Idea/Thesis
First, for a more effective overview of the essay, I suggest that you be more specific in the
thesis statement. For example, a part of the thesis statement states, “Then, we will look at
the most impactful proposals given in solution to our parental incarceration crisis. After
examining these solutions, I will then decide which solution will be more impactful for the
black community and is more fiscally appropriate.”
Applying my suggestion here, what are the most impactful proposals given in solution to our
parental incarceration crisis, which you explained below? Note these. Also, which solution is
more impactful for the black community and is more fiscally appropriate? Why? Add these,
too. To help you frame these ideas, here is revision model you could use:
Then, we will look at the most impactful proposals given in solution to our parental
incarceration crisis, which include ________. After examining these solutions,
_______ appeared to be more impactful for the black community and is more fiscally
appropriate because _______.
Reflecting the essay below, what would best complete the revision? Read Developing a
Thesis (Chapter 2: Section 4, Lesson 2) for more help.
Moreover, the ___ contributed to the African American parental incarceration crisis.
What would best fill the blank? For more help, read Clear Topic Sentences (Chapter 3:
Lesson 3).
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Mechanics:
In summation, the “war on drugs” and tough on crime rhetoric in America is the
main reason why so many African American parents are in prison today.
The subject above is plural: the “war on drugs” and tough on crime rhetoric in America.
However, you used the singular verb “is.” Also, you used the singular noun “main reason.”
To ensure number consistency, I would suggest using the plural form of “is,” which is “are”
as well as the plural form of “main reason” by adding an “s” at the end of the word
“reason.” Follow this example:
In summary, the standardized tests and the emphasis on STEM subjects in America
are the main causes why so many students feel discourage in pursuing arts.
Learn more about this by reading Subject-Verb Agreement (Chapter 5: Section 2, Lesson 6)
and Sentence Unity and Clarity (Chapter 5: Section 4, Lesson 9).
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Help End the African American Parental Incarceration Crisis in The U.S.
Robbie Young
Today in America there are 2.7 million children with a parent in prison or jail. African-
American children, in particular, has one in four chances of having a parent who is in prison, that
correlates closely to the fact that one in three black men in America will be incarcerated at some
point in their lifetime. Parental incarceration is a very troubling phenomenon that is plaguing the
black community because 40 percent of the 2 million prisoners in America are black, which is
why I will be focusing on this crisis specifically. First, we will explore the professional sources I
am using for my research. Next, we will go through how we, as Americans got to this point of
mass incarceration. Then, we will look at the most impactful proposals given in solution to our
parental incarceration crisis. After examining these solutions, I will then decide which solution
will be more impactful for the black community and is more fiscally appropriate. Finally, I will
discuss why Christians and people of faith should care about such problems and what you can do
to help.
For this report, I focused on a small group of professional sources to study and research
the African American parental incarceration crisis. To focus on the history of this crisis I will be
using an article written by Daniel Patten, who has a master’s degree in Sociology from Old
crime, who is currently working on his doctoral degree in criminology from Western Michigan
University. Craig Haney, a psychologist and professor at UC Santa Cruz, is a source I will be
referencing more than once. Haney is widely renowned for his work in the study of the
psychological affects of solitary confinement and isolation on prisoners. I will also be using an
article by Lorna Collier who researched this topic extensively. She is a freelance writer from
Chicago whose articles have appeared in the Center for Digital Education/Center for Digital
will also be using an article by David Murphey, Ph.D. and P. Mae Cooper. Murphey is a senior
research scientist at Child Trends. Cooper, who has a bachelor’s in Art’s is also an author for
Child Trends who specializes in social policy and quantitative social research. The other
statistics I will be using will be from publicized news articles from major companies such as the
prison fellowship organization’s website, the NAACP’s website, and the California courts
website.
The 70’s in my opinion, is the perfect place to begin to explain this phenomenon. The
parental incarceration crisis in the U.S. didn’t just happen overnight; there’s been a series of
events starting from the 70’s that contributed to the incarceration of over 2 million people. In
1970, President Richard Nixon passed the Controlled Substances Act (CSA). The CSA
categorized drugs by their likelihood of addiction compared to its medical benefits. Then, in
1971, president Nixon declared a “war on drugs” after an increase of crime and rebellion took
place in the 1960’s, causing public distress and the government to start to pay closer attention to
the “most dangerous” drugs in America. This increase of government policies and organizations
to criminalize drug use has been questioned to be a racially and socially biased political move,
especially after Nixon’s domestic policy chief, John Ehrlichman stated, “We knew we couldn’t
make it illegal to be either against the war or black, but by getting the public to associate the
hippies with marijuana and blacks with heroin, and then criminalizing both heavily, we could
disrupt those communities. We could arrest their leaders, raid their homes, break up their
meetings, and vilify them night after night on the evening news. Did we know we were lying
about the drugs? Of course, we did.” [How would you explain this quote? How does this
contribute to your discussion of how the policies were part of a racially and socially biased
political move? In what ways does this support the point that 70’s perfectly explains the
In 1981, when president Ronald Reagan was elected into office, he expanded on Nixon’s
efforts to criminalize and penalize drug users and distributors using a “no tolerance” drug policy.
Closely following Reagan’s election, the first lady, Nancy Reagan publicized her anti-drug
campaign. Nancy’s coined term, “Just say no to drugs” led to a refocus on the war on drugs and
in 1986 congress passed the Anti-Drug Abuse Act that among many of other things made a
mandatory amount of prison time for certain drug offenses; those offenses included a mandatory
amount of 5 years in prison without parole for possession of 5 grams of crack, in comparison to
that of 500 grams of powder cocaine. This was the cause for a lot of poor, black people to be
incarcerated because “crack” was a cheaper, less potent form of the drug, that many African-
American drug users abused. These policies caused a series of arrests that placed many people,
especially those of color, in prison. Haney, C. (2001) stated that because of the war on drugs, 94
percent of individuals entering the prison system were incarcerated for non-violent, drug related
crimes. In 2002, blacks constituted more than 80 percent of the people sentenced under the
federal crack cocaine laws and served substantially more time in prison than did Whites, even
though more than 2 out of 3 cocaine users were Whites and Hispanics. This is the main cause for
health crisis. Some scholars argue that placing these non-violent offenders in a prison
environment can be very detrimental. Haney (2001) also noted that he witnessed cases where
inmates entered prison with no signs of mental illness and left completely changed. Haney
(2001) also stated that the negative psychological consequences of long-term solitary-like
dysfunction (confusion, memory loss, ruminations); irritability, anger, aggression, and/or rage;
other-directed violence, such as stabbings, attacks on staff, property destruction, and collective
suicidal ideation, impulses, and behavior; anxiety and panic attacks; emotional breakdowns;
and/or loss of control; hallucinations, psychosis and/or paranoia; overall deterioration of mental
and physical health. [A semicolon is used to connect sentences. Since you are presenting a list
here and not sentences, please use commas to separate the items.] Donald Clemmer, who was
one of the first to study and document the psychological affects prison life had on inmates, wrote
“The Prison Community” in 1940 and stated the cause of mental deterioration for inmates is
prisonization. Clemmer wrote and describes prisonization as the process of new inmates learning
to adapt to the harsh realities of prison culture and following an unwritten set of guidelines on
how to behave while in prison. These guidelines include having to hide emotions to maintain a
“tough guy” image and encourages inmates to participate in other illegal activities while in
prison to gain status. The main reason why inmates are reportedly mentally unstable is because
prisons across the country have implemented a practice called solitary confinement; which is
when prisoners are forced to remain in their cells for 23 hours at a time to avoid any violent
outbursts. This practice was also a direct effect of the overcrowding of prisons nation-wide. With
little to no programming or meaningful social interactions, including calls home to their families,
being subjected to such practices may be the reason why 64 percent of jail inmates, 54 percent of
state prisoners, and 45 percent of federal prisoners report mental health concerns and receive
little to no treatment regarding those concerns before they are released back into their
In summation, the “war on drugs” and tough on crime rhetoric in America is the main
reason why so many African American parents are in prison today. The lack of mental health
reform in the prison system is another, very important, reason why so many parents are in prison,
and continue to return to prison. I will use this information to argue the fact that there needs to be
new laws in place that prohibits capital punishment for petty, drug related crimes, and programs
that focus on the mental health of prisoners that are going to be released back into society. I will
examine these solutions and determine which solutions are the most impactful and beneficial to
imprisoned parents and their children, and improving the settings for visits would aide these
children in maintaining an emotional connection with their parents and may also help improve
the mental health of these children, and develop strategies on how to help improve their chances
of academic success. There are many studies that show that children who grow up with parents
in prison face many other challenges, including living in unsafe environments and growing up in
foster care. Unfortunately, in addition to these struggles, parents who are released from a long-
term prison sentence often have a difficult time connecting with their children on an
interpersonal level. As stated by Haney, C (2001), “Prisoners learn to find safety in social
into themselves, trust virtually no one, and adjust to prison stress by leading isolated lives of
quiet desperation.” This description is of someone who is mentally unstable and ultimately unfit
to be in the same home as a child. As a result, more than half of the children who have
experienced parental incarceration have also had to live with someone who has a substance abuse
problem. In addition, more than a third of these children have also witnessed violence between
their parents or guardians, and have witnessed or experienced violence in their neighborhoods.
Haney (2001) suggests that no prisoner should be released directly out of supermax or solitary
confinement and back into the free world without first spending an extended amount of time
decompressing. One program that has been very effective in providing parents with this time of
decompression is the National Fatherhood Initiative’s (NFI), Inside Out Dad program that also
offers a program for mothers in prison as well. It is widely believed that parents who have a
strong support system and motivation to become positive role models in their children lives;
which is provided by the NFI’s programs, stay out of prison. Programs like the Inside Out dad
program can help inmates overcome prisonization and go through the extensive mental reform
that is necessary for becoming positive figures in their children’s lives once released, and can
strive to become productive members of their communities. These programs address and counsel
inmates on child abuse and neglect, marital abuse, and how to have positive relationships within
their families. Prisons must provide inmates with the ability to cope and be treated for the
adverse effects of long term isolation. I agree with Craig Haney and Lorna Collier that more
needs to be done, regarding mental health, before inmates are released back to their former
incarceration crisis by reducing prison time for federal inmates who were imprisoned for certain
non-violent, drug related charges. According to Collier (2014) Congress was also considering the
Recidivism Reduction and Public Safety Act, which would provide more drug treatment and job
training and would allow inmates who complete such programs to reduce their sentences.
California actually passed proposition 47 in 2014, that changed the penalty requirements of
certain low-level crimes. Crimes such as drug possession, petty theft, and shoplifting can
potentially be reduced from felony offenses to misdemeanor offenses. Proposition 47 is using the
saved incarceration costs to fund mental health, drug treatment, and community based prevention
programs. In the 2016-2017 fiscal year, proposition 47 saved taxpayers and facilities 68 million
dollars. This money, as promised, is going directly to programs that also include trauma recovery
services for victims of crime and truancy and dropout prevention classes for at-risk youth. The
money saved by proposition 47 and other laws like it will make programs like the Inside Out
Dad program more widespread, and ultimately help get parents who commit low-level crimes out
of prison and keep them in their homes as supportive members in their families. This proposition
was supported by the District Attorney for the city and county of San Francisco, George Gascon.
In support of Proposition 47, was also William Lansdowne, the former chief of police for San
Diego, San Jose and Richmond. The American Civil Liberties Union also gave over 3 million
Prop 47 and the Public Safety Act focus on funding prison-based programs that help
inmates return home as positively effective parents. Programs like the Inside Out Dad program
are aimed at teaching inmates how to become emotionally responsible when they return home,
and in turn, help recidivism rates which means these parents are staying out of prison once
released. Before these types of programs were introduced, two out of three prisoners were
rearrested within three years following their release, fortunately through the NFI’s Inside Out
dad programs, recidivism has reduced by 37 percent at those facilities. The Inside Out dad
program reportedly can reduce the amount of money taxpayers and facilities spend on
incarceration as well. The Inside Out Dad program only costs 600 dollars for the first 10 parents
to enroll and 10 dollars for every parent that enrolls thereafter, in comparison to the 29,000
On the other hand, a lot of law enforcement leaders and advocates for victims of crime
highly disagree with this type of solution, among this list of supporters is California’s District
Attorney Association, California’s Peace Officers Association, and California’s State Sheriff
Association. The argument is that laws like proposition 47 made it possible for addicts to roam
the streets and get away with crime. They argue that the proposition was completely unnecessary
and that first-time drug offenders were already being sent to diversion programs. California’s
Retail Association also argued that reducing penalties for theft, forgery, and receiving stolen
What those supporters fail to realize is that implementing laws like proposition 47 and
funding programs like those ran through the NFI are better ways to get black parents back in
their homes and keep them out of prison vs. relying on the laws that are already in place to help
end this crisis. We need both: new programs and new laws to fund them. One solution is not
better than the other. We must implement new laws that help recidivism rates and provide the
resources needed for mental health programs. Not only are laws like proposition 47 the right
thing to do, but they also have the potential to save the country millions of dollars if more states
passed laws like them. The saved money from these laws could go directly to country-wide
programs that focus on mental health, parenting, and drug and abuse classes for inmates and the
African American families that are affected by parental incarceration. Implementing new laws
that fund mental health programs is not only fiscally responsible, but it’s simply the right thing to
do. We must support the children in our country, for they are the next world leaders.
In Hebrews 13:3 (The New King James Version), it states, “Continue to remember those
in prison as if you were together with them in prison, and those who are mistreated as if you
yourselves were suffering.” [This verse is essentially an illustration. To strongly start the
paragraph, begin with your point. What is this paragraph all about that the verse helps to
explain? Note this here, Robbie. ] How can we, as Christians allow such a travesty to go on?
Although we may not all be personally affected by the African American parental incarceration
crisis, we should attain the compassion to care about those who are affected. One thing we can
do as Christians, to show compassion, would be to take some time to reflect on how we would
feel if our own families were placed in the same predicaments of so many African American
families in the U.S. The Bible actually talks about caring for those in prison specifically, because
as Christians, we do not have the right to judge others, even those who have committed crimes.
We must still show them mercy just as God would, and advocate for their freedom.
I have faith that we can all come together to help end this crisis. As I stated before,
supporting laws like proposition 47 is the right way to go. Proposition 47 advocates for releasing
non-violent prisoners and funding mental health reform in the prison system. Again, laws like
Prop 47 will continue to reduce recidivism rates and allow not only African American parents,
but all American parents to try to become active members of their families and communities.
Luke 4:18-19 says, “The spirit of the lord is on me, because He has anointed me to proclaim
good news to the poor. He has sent me to proclaim freedom for the prisoners and recovery of
sight for the blind, to set the oppressed free, to proclaim the year of the Lord’s favor.” This Bible
passage always gives me a sense of hope that God can work through each of us to incite a spark
of revolutionary action. We can’t allow laws to incriminate people because they’re drug addicts,
We can trust in the Lord that he will help us find a way to end the suffering of these
people, but we must be brave. We must get out there and vote on revising the laws that are
unjust. We can also begin to start conversations about the parental incarceration crisis with the
people around us. I use social media every day and I recently began posting statistics on the
matter and asking my friends how they feel about the information. By posting these topics I have
begun some effective discussions. Not all of people agree with what I feel, and that’s more than
okay, at least I’m starting to get these problems talked about. I received a lot of comments stating
that they had never even heard of this phenomenon, which is why we must start talking about it.
For those readers who feel compelled to do something, start small, like with a Facebook post,
and get the conversation started. We can’t begin to make real change unless we make more
Americans aware of the African American parental incarceration crisis. Feel free to visit some of
the websites I have listed in my reference page and share them with your family, friends, and co-
workers.
References
About proposition 47. My prop 47. Retrieved from: http://myprop47.org/about
Aiken, J. (2017). Era of mass expansion: Why state officials should fight jail growth. Prison
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why- and offers recommendations for fixing the system. Monitor on Psychology.
Golding, S. (2015). Children of promise, nyc aims to restore relationships between children and
https://www.vibe.com/2015/10/children-of-promise-nyc/
adjustment. Office of the assistant secretary for planning and evaluation. Retrieved from:
https://aspe.hhs.gov/basic-report/psychological-impact-incarceration-implications-post-
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Murphy, D. & Cooper, P. M. (2015). Parents behind bars: What happens to their children? News
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Nellis, Ashley. (2016). The color of justice: Racial and ethnic disparity in state prisons. The
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Patten, D. (2016). The mass incarceration of nations and the global war on drugs: Comparing the
United States’ domestic and foreign drug policies. Social Justice. Retrieved from
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Sanders, R. (2014). Fathers behind bars: The problem and solution for America’s children.
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