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Question: Some People Think That Social Skills Are As Important As Academic Qualifications. To What Extent Do You Agree or Disagree?
Question: Some People Think That Social Skills Are As Important As Academic Qualifications. To What Extent Do You Agree or Disagree?
careers, and now some people suggest that social skills also have an equal significant Commented [AB1]: ‘equally significant’ –add +ly (like an
adverb) onto the first adjective.
role to play. I, therefore, completely agree with this idea and I also believe that
developing social skills could have far more benefits for students.
enter a prestigious multinational company with a decent income. But one fact needs to Commented [AB2]: ‘assist students in entering’ – ‘assist / help
in doing something’.
e.g.
be mentioned is that social skills are just equally significant as academic He assisted in editing the movie.
qualifications. When ones acquire good skills to interact and communicate with Commented [AB3]: I don’t think you need to repeat all of this
as you said this in the introduction –
‘However, social skills are just as important’
Commented [AB4]: You could combine these sentences as
others, these people are able to express their feelings and thoughts well so that they the previous can be shortened –
‘‘However, social skills are just as important and when ones
acquire good ……. ’
are more likely to have good relationships with colleagues and supervisors. In this
case, they are more likely to have job satisfaction in the workplace, leading an Commented [AB5]: ‘leading to an …….’
Lead to something.
e.g.
-A diet that is high in fat can lead to obesity.
-The first chapter describes the strange sequence of events that
enjoyable working life. lead to his death.
explicates how much knowledge students have obtained from universities, social Commented [AB6]: A very rare word – use ‘represents,
embodies, symbolizes’ here.
skills then exhibit practical skills that are useful in our daily life. People who possess Commented [AB7]: Better and clearer words here are
‘transfer into / translate into’ here.
a good interpersonal communication skill, for example, are able to convey others' Commented [AB8]: ‘a good interpersonal communication skills’
– this is always written in plural -‘communication skills’.
thoughts. So they can efficiently finish their work when they negotiate with others. Commented [AB9]: ‘finish their work efficiently’ For adverbs
of manner, they normally go in the end position.
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/grammar/british-
grammar/about-adjectives-and-adverbs/adverbs-and-adverb-
Besides, most employees value this type of employers so that they are more likely to phrases-position
In conclusion, I totally agree that both social skills and academic qualifications have
Comments:
This is a 7.5. A superb answer with relevant ideas and good grammar. A really good
attempt.