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Cristina Annotated Bibliography - Enny Edit
Cristina Annotated Bibliography - Enny Edit
Annotated Bibliography
Cristina Cortes
UWRT 1104
In this article Gregory Mone discusses how new models in cosmetics can eventually
replace animal testing. These new models will be capable of predicting the toxicity of Commented [OT4]: Maybe change to “would be able”?
chemicals in humans without the use of experimentation on animals. Gregory Mone also
explains the vast difference between humans and mice and many of the products tested
on these animals can limit the validity of the results. Tests based off animals take entirely
too long and are more expensive than tests that don’t require the use of animals (In vitro
& In silico). The article explains how even though cosmetics sit on the skin and are not Commented [OT5]: Maybe explain/define these so the
reader fully understands
put through the body like a drug, there are still ways certain products like lotions that
contain lipophilic, can still seep into the skin traveling pass the upper layer and into the
blood stream. To prevent the SEURAT, scientist will eventually make models that Commented [OT6]: What does this stand for/mean?
interweave each of the systems that ingredients can reach. For example, the skin, heart,
lungs, and more. , , Cosmetics Europe, the industry group funding the research, has
protested that “it was too soon to eliminate animal testing as the alternatives were not yet
robust enough”. Even though the model is still in its early stages, scientist have shown
how far it has already gone by showing how the liver would respond when exposed to
certain chemicals. The new model successfully compared the toxic compound with the
laboratory test which shows how precise the new model already is.
magazine writer he has covered physics, biology, and artificial intelligence. This
academic source explains how new models can replace experimenting on animals. The
purpose of the article is to show companies that still test on animals, how far science has
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come and the new alternatives that can replace animals is just as reliable and safe. This
source is different because as opposed to only documenting the pros and cons of animal
testing, it explains how advanced science has gone to create systems and models that can
stop animal experimentation all together. The article was very helpful because it showed
not only are we improving technology to higher standards but the level of awareness for Commented [OT7]: I would suggest that you rephrase this
sentence, because it is hard to read.
animal testing has increased significantly over the years. Reading this article has inspired
me to want to perform research to learn more about the technology behind animal testing
and what can be done in the future with these models for cosmetic or medical purposes.
This source will be in my project so I can show the technology side behind the argument. Commented [OT8]: technological
Ella Holden, "The True Cost of Beauty? Wilful Ignorance.” 17 February 2018 Mr. Campbell has an example of the correct format for
annotated bibliographies.
that is circulating around animal testing unlike articles I’ve read before. As I mentioned
before, consumer consciousness over animal testing has dramatically increased, and will
only continue to do so. With a one-hundred percent increase in the number of ‘vegan’
claims in the year of 2017, this is only becoming more and more evident. High-end Commented [OT11]: Quote your source
beauty company NARS announced in the past year that it would be broadening its range Commented [OT12]: I would suggest you provide a brief
introduction to the NARS company and describe what they
do.
of global cliental to the country of China. Despite the increase in uproar and protests
This way, when you give information about them, the
surrounding the concept of animal testing for produces, NARS ignored this. This is so reader will have context as to what the company stands for.
significant because in China it’s required as a law that all beauty and skin products be
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tested on animals, before being used by the population. Other rival companies such as
MAC took the same route despite the commotion they would receive.
This article places an emphasis not only on the ethical standpoint in which these beauty
companies carry themselves, but also to remind you the “true cost of beauty”. After
reading the final paragraph of the album it’s evident that the author wants you to Commented [OT13]: Album?
contemplate what these products are really costing. The author even mentions that fact Commented [OT14]: the
that a company like MAC even started branding themselves as a “Ethical Brand” with the Commented [OT15]: an
company’s foundation being inclusivity. The company MAC also raised approximately
$400 million dollars in the benefit of AIDS. This shows you despite all the great ethical Commented [OT16]: say this part out loud. I think it can be
rephrased with a “that” or “how”
standpoints a beauty company can have, there is still a huge cost in terms of customer
satisfaction and an overall ethical standing, with the testing of products on animals still
being a factor.
The author is a student at the University of Oxford who cites many reliable sources
throughout her article. Oxford is a prestigious university and these papers must be peer
reviewed before being published. This source is surely an Academic one. The purpose of Commented [OT17]: Does it follow the qualifications to be
an academic article?
this article is to inform those that buy products from companies such as NARS and MAC Mr. Campbell has an outline on what qualifies as each of the
required articles we need to have.
about the animal-testing done behind the scenes. The author does a good job at
maintaining an objective point of view. For example, MAC raising over $400 million for
their ‘MAC AIDS Fund’ is highlighted along with the criticism of expanding their brand
Commented [OT18]: I really like how you gave an example
here on how they maintained an objective point of view.
into the Chinese market. I thought this resource was helpful because it connected the
This allowed me, as the reader, to not only trust the author
actions of the companies directly to the backlash from the consumer, and it did so in a of that article, but to view you as a reliable source.
Commented [OT19]: Will you use this article in your
balanced objective way. I didn’t get the impression that the author was being overly research?
Commented [OT20]: I feel like there is a more condensed
biased or dogmatic about any specific position. way that you can state that the author of this article was
objective.
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“Should Animals Be Used for Scientific or Commercial Testing?” November 2nd 2017 Commented [OT22]: I keep noticing that your MLA format
is different for each source.
This website talks about the many pros and cons of animal testing, the first argument Commented [OT23]: . The
states how animal testing is cruel and inhumane while the opposite side of the argument
states how animal testing has contributed to many lifesaving cures. Throughout the article
one of the main points the sources argument is how animal testing is more expensive than Commented [OT24]: argue
alternative methods. The two alternative methods mentioned are called in vitro and the
use of synthetic livers. Empiriko, a biotechnology company created synthetic livers that
could predict the livers metabolic reaction to drugs. This process was quicker, cheaper,
and more accurate than testing on animals. Another point made was how animals do not
have rights and therefor experimenting on them should be allowed, while the other side Commented [OT25]: therefore
of the argument states, “A 2017 study found further flaws in animal studies including
absent) control groups, selective data reporting”. Meaning the lives of these animals were Commented [OT26]: Split this into two sentences, each
one explaining the two separate points. If you want to
include that quote, it should be a separate sentence.
being sacrificed for poor studies and research being done.
Commented [OT27]: Instead of “meaning,” try “this would
mean.” I would suggest to avoid beginning a sentence that
ProCon.org is a nonprofit nonpartisan public charity that provides professionally- ends in -ing.
researched pro, con, on more than 50 argumentative issues. Issues from the death penalty
and gun control to medical marijuana and gay marriage. This is an academic source that
teaches millions new facts and think critically about important issues that should be
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discussed. The purpose of this argument is to show both sides and opinions of the
controversial issue of animal testing. The audience is for those who are concerned by
animal testing and what goes on behind the making of the product being bought. This
source compared to the others explains both sides of the argument rather than just one
and also covers many of the points that aren’t discussed with animal testing. For example, Commented [OT28]: Loving these follow up examples!
how 95% of the animals used are not protected under the Animal Welfare Act or how
This source was very helpful and showed many points of the arguments that usually Commented [OT29]: Because
aren’t discussed when researching about animal testing. This source provided useful,
credible, and important information that will help with my research paper. This source
gave me valuable information that will make my research stronger and more useful. I will
use this source for my research paper and intend to search more of the credible sites given
throughout the page. Commented [OT30]: This can all be condensed to one
sentence.
After reading this paper I can really tell how passionate you are about animal testing! You were
really good at not inserting personal bias and looking for sources that supported both sides of the
controversial topic.
I would suggest you thoroughly read through your bibliography for grammatical mistakes. I
pointed out a few but at times due to your grammatical mistakes, it didn’t allow your paper to
flow well. Also, I would suggest looking at Mr. Campbell’s annotated bibliography stuff on his
Canvas page. There is a template and instructions on what articles you need to get a good grade
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on this assignment.
(https://uncc.instructure.com/courses/76829/files/2819143/download?download_frd=1)
You are also missing a source. On that canvas page it says that we need at least four sources
Overall, really interesting topic and I am very excited to see where you go with this!