Dear my lovely sister

For almost a weeks, it’s been given you so much improvement.

This academic writing is set to make you understand how to write an
academic assay properly.
Therefore, as the matter of fact, you english gain some advancement
especially about the vocabulary.
If you hardly write an essay in english directly, you can write, at first,
in Indonesia and you can translate it then.
And If you still got any problem from evaluating my correction, you
can ask me furthermore.

Your sincerely
MFRozi, MD

Nutrition for Infants

I want to tell about the Nutrition for Infant (It seems that you can formally write “I
would like to tell you about nutrition for Infant”). Infants are included in 0 to 11 months of
age. The infant need to any nutrients in growth and development of their body (The infant
need various kind of nutrients for growth and development of their body). The nutrient are
included energy, proteins, fats, carbohydrates, and the other micronutrients. A general
indicator that it used to determine whether an infant get adequate number of kilocalories per
day for consumsing is growth in length, weight, and head circumference. Infants can organize
of regulating their intake of food to consume in certain kilocalories they need (What is the
emaning of this sentences?).
Infants should be exclusively breastfeed for 6 months in the first year of life, thus they
got a optimal health. It has all which need by their body as vitamins or minerals (Breastmilk
has all substance or component what infants need as well as vitamins and minerals).
Meanwhile according to WHO, infants should get to breastfeed until 2 years old.
Breastfeeding can also help protect to againts from some short-long term illness and disease
for infants as well as their mother (Breastfeeding can also help infants to protect against some
short/long term illness and disease). Infants are usually starting to eat solid food for up 6
months which it likes complementary food of the breastfeed (Infants usually start eating solid
food at the age of sixth months). It can introduce a taste or type of various foods, so the
infants have started habbit with taste it. In the first year, many physiological changes occur
that may be infant consumsed the foods of varying composition and texture.
Many children are getting a problem of nutrient caused by the lack of food for
consumption, so that they might be suffering of various diseases (suggestion; If you want to
use any conjunction please use therefore or etc instead of saying “if”). The parental behaviour
or health service can also be reason from it (Behavior of parents or health service can also
become one of the reason for the condition). Therefore, it really need to attention of the
various side (Correction: this sentence is positive with grammar error, you have to put ‘S’
after singular subject She, he, it and you can write it really needs attention without adding to
because attention is noun, therefore it is okay if you can continue without putting ‘to’ before
attention). That’s why nutrition is so important. Malnutrion is one of disease which often
suffered by the children. This malnutrition is worst health condition run into dificiency of
nutrient for a long time (I preferably write ‘Malnutrition is bad health condition associated
with inadequacy of nutrient intake for a long time). The other causes are spesific deseases
that cause disruption of the food disgestion process or absortion of the nutrient. It’s
necessary for their body (It seems that this sentence doesnt have any significant meaning).
Malnutrition have 3 clinical forms such as, Marasmus, Kwashiorkor, and Marasmus-
Kwashiorkor (Malnutrition is categorized into three different forms such as....). Many
families that it has the status of low economic, and it becomes a difficult something to get
enough nutritious foods like fresh fruit or vegetables, legumes, meat, and milk (You can say ‘
Many families from low socioeconomic background will hardly acquire enough nutritious
foods for instance fres fruits or vegetables, legumes, meat and milk).
Risk of the malnutrition is increasing in chronic diseases especially intestinal tract,
kidney, and livers (Risk of getting malnutrition increases at the same time if a person also has
chronic diseases, particularly if the disease involves gastrointestinal tract, kidney, and livers).
The diseases could be lose weight rapidly and become susceptible to undernourishment,
because they cannot absorb valuable vitamins, calories, and iron. Moreover, It can also cause
the death of infants. Losing 10 pounds or more may be a sympton of malnutrition. Infants
who are malnourished may be skinny or bloated. They have also pale, thick, and dry skin. As
additional (In addition), the other causes are thin hair, joints ache, tender bones and gums
bleed easily (It means the symptoms???, you must write ‘ the other symptoms are thin
hair...........). Normalizing nutritional status begin with a nutritional assesment (It seems not
aggreable, there is no relevancy from the sentence before and after, what do you mean?). This
manner enables a clinical nutrition to confirm the presence of malnutrition, assess the effect
of disorder which appear by causing it (what is the meaning of the sentence?), and formulate
diets to restore adequate nutrition. Infants who cannot or will not be eating or unable to
absorb nutrients through mouth, if it may be fed intravenously (parenteral nutrition), or a tube
inserted into the gastrointestinal. The procedure hooked by a thin tube through the nose and
along the throat until it reaches the stomach or small intestine. If it used to long-termed, so
the tube could be placed directly into the stomach through a dissection in the abdomen.
To be continued again ya jikk.. I have done it seriously. But i dont know how with your marking.
Thanks.