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Paragraph coherence is achieved by focusing on one subject and making sure each
sentence leads logically and gracefully into the next. Using transitional words and
phrases also helps, but these have to be used correctly. Each paragraph also should lead
into the next so that the whole essay holds together and supports the thesis.
Now use your knowledge to identify problems in the following paragraphs and
suggest what might make them better.
2. [Student response to two essays on fathers]. Both stories are a little different. The
father in “Little Gorilla” had no physical contact with his son. Whereas in “Arm
Wrestling with My Father” that’s all his son ever had: a “strong hug” (130) or a “warm
hug” (293). Fathers are always viewed differently than mothers, but both are usually
looked up to by the child. Do children’s books really have an effect on the way children
look at their parents? The author of “Not All Men Are Sly Foxes” states that the fathers
are usually the character that is mentioned the least and mothers are mentioned the most.