A’Breya Young

Ms. Wilson
English II
2-1-2019

In ​A Dozen Key Chains, ​Ardesher’s opened a restaurant however business was very little. At a

family gather his mother scrutinized her son’s character for pooping behind the curtains at a

young age. This resulted in Ardesher feeling ashamed of his actions as a child, which

diminished his self esteem. The passage states, “ Well, what do you expect from someone who

poops behind the curtains”. This indicates that Ardesher’s bad behavior as a child is still

associated with the perception of himself toward his family members. The text then states ,” As

much as Ardesheer has suffered from his reputation, my older brother Farshid continues to

thrive on his”. This demonstrates that Ardesheer is still known for his “dirty deeds”, which is why

other family members take precaution in what they do in life in order to maintain a positive

reputation. Overall, Ardesher’s mother’s comment on her son character diminished his already

very little confidence because of his bad reputation

Proficie Earned Points

Requirements Based on Standards nt? (X) Points Possible
Produce an answer based on the proof you
x
Statement - Student collect.
makes a clear,
Restate the question stem. Mention the name of
straightforward, x 3 3
the book, story, article.
relevant claim
(Standard Wa.9.1.a) Write a specific and detailed claim that reflects the
x
proof you have collected.
Proof - Student Use direct textual proof when possible (direct
x
uses observable quotes, or paraphrase from the text)
evidence and
Choose the proofs that actually prove your
specific details to x 2 3
statement is true. The more specific, the better.
support opinion.
(Standards W.9.1.b, Cite proofs using appropriate formatting (includes
W.9.1.d) punctuation)
 Explain ​how​ your evidence proves your
Explanation - x
statement, not just ​that​ it proves your statement.
Student uses
critical thinking to Use key words from the statement to connect the 12
x
support evidence proof(s) to the statement. 12 (3 points
and connect it to Anticipate questions your reader might have and each)
the claim. x
answer them. Leave no doubt.
(Standard W.9.1.b)
Use sound reasoning in explanation x
Synthesis - Student Restate your main point(s) using different words
x
summarizes with the same meaning.
argument and, if
Remind your reader of your strongest proofs x 2 3
necessary, offers
extension. Why is your argument important to understanding
(Standard W.9.1.e) the text?
Utilize transition words/phrases to aid organization x

Transitions/Organiz Vary sentence structure (simple, compound,

x
ation/ complex)
Formatting/Style/To Use formal language to convey clear ideas (no 2 2
ne slang) Uses strong verbs and adjectives that make x
(Standards W.9.1.a, your argument clearer.
W.9.1.c, W.9.1.d)
Present an objective argument (keep your
x
emotions/ feelings out of it)
Conventions: Avoid run-ons, comma splices, and fragments x
Grammar, Spelling,
Capitalization, and 1 2
Punctuation
(Standard L.9.2) Avoid capitalization and spelling errors

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