Saeedeh Nosrati

Professor Batty
English 101
28 May 2019
Reflection

Essay 1 which is chosen for revise is about the importance of using visual element such as slides

in class by professors. I have started by changing title and made it more creative. I have a little

changed in thesis and made it more specific. I lose some grade in developing and the professor

comment to add explanation in my words. For this, I have developed 3rd paragraph and also 4th

paragraph, and try to explain them in my own words. Then I add some information and

explanation in 6th paragraph to make it more clear and understandable. I have combined 7th and

8th paragraphs because they were short and 8th paragraph was rebuttal for 7th paragraph, so I

combined them by adding however between them.

There was some new information in my conclusion so I have moved them to 2nd paragraph as

supporting information and reorganized my conclusion. The other issue in my essay was

grammar and spelling mistakes I went to writing center and fix most of them, so there are some

change in grammar, worlds choosing and spelling in my whole essay. Finally, I have checked

and corrected the MLA format. There were some mistakes in citation and some in format. So I

have corrected them as well.