The student wrote a report summarizing their class's experience on a week-long work experience program at a Cambridge Upcycling company. The report discussed key observations from spending time in the workshop and IT department, noting that 90% of students expressed interest in learning more about upcycling. It suggested that future programs allow for more student participation in the upcycling process itself and making souvenirs. To further student understanding, the class proposed holding informational seminars and an upcycling competition at their school.
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The student wrote a report summarizing their class's experience on a week-long work experience program at a Cambridge Upcycling company. The report discussed key observations from spending time in the workshop and IT department, noting that 90% of students expressed interest in learning more about upcycling. It suggested that future programs allow for more student participation in the upcycling process itself and making souvenirs. To further student understanding, the class proposed holding informational seminars and an upcycling competition at their school.
The student wrote a report summarizing their class's experience on a week-long work experience program at a Cambridge Upcycling company. The report discussed key observations from spending time in the workshop and IT department, noting that 90% of students expressed interest in learning more about upcycling. It suggested that future programs allow for more student participation in the upcycling process itself and making souvenirs. To further student understanding, the class proposed holding informational seminars and an upcycling competition at their school.
Your school recently organised a ‘work experience week’,
when each student spent one week . In your report, say what you and your classmates learned during the week, and suggest how the experience could be improved if it is repeated next year. Write a report for your teacher, giving your views.The comments above may give you some ideas, and you can also use some ideas of your own.Your report should be between 150 and 200 words long.You will receive up to 8 marks for the content of your report, and up to 8 marks for the language used.
Subject: Cambridge Upcycling company
My report which purports to highlight the key takeaways from our class seven days working experience in Cambridge Upcycling company. It is amongst our school’s many steps taken towards mentoring the students the practicalities of life coupled with the chance of aspiring careers in different businesses. Situated in the countryside, among the lush green trees the infrastructure of the workshop was marvelous. As we stepped in, we flocked to the area where waste of different types is transformed to eye catching environment friendly objects which piqued the interest of all students ;some were selected for this task. Later on , we headed to the IT department wherein we acquired the art of how employees had been working selling the upcycled furniture to people and companies. Watching them working, many could not resist and were enthusiastic enough to jump on screens. The observations displayed that almost 90% of students inquiring further about upcycling ;manifesting that youth is not reckless about earth’s environment. Moreover, IT department rendered good results with students engaging with employees unceasingly learning a lot. Notwithstanding the boons was disappointing, majorly because of the well restricted participation in upcycling. In addition, had the students been allowed to create upcycled objects as souvenirs it would have been more influential. Blending all together, upcycling is fairly new idea ;so our class with school’s assistance has decided to hold seminars with then conducting an upcycling competition to get most out of the experience. My comment: I would say you have used complex and sophisticated language. The only improvement I would suggest is punctuation, I mean in a report there is often a variation of punctuations such as colons, semi colons, commas etc. Vary your sentence lengths and use brackets if possible. Great use of the statistic ‘90%’. Other than that I like your writing style and you would get 7 out of 8 if I was marking, only coz I’m not that lenient! 😊