RC 1000

Peer Review Worksheet: Annotated Bibliography

Writer:_______Kincade Stalun________________________
Reviewer:_____CJ Ward____________________________

For the writer:

1. Briefly identify your ​topic, focus​, and ​thesis question/statement​ for the research project.
My topic is the freshman 15 and weight gain in college. The focus will be how first-year weight gain
affects college students and what factors play an important role for it all to be possible. My thesis
statement/question is why do freshmen gain a substantial amount of weight when they get to college?

2. What in particular do you want your peer reviewer to check? I want the reviewer to check over my
grammar, sentence structure and the flow of the paragraphs I wrote.

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For the reviewer:

1. Is there proposal that briefly explains ​the topic, focus, thesis question, and at least a few research
questions for the researched argument? If so, is it clear and thorough enough? How might it be
improved?

Yes, the topic of this proposal is how the freshman 15 tends to be an issue for incoming freshman in
college. He looks to investigate students at Appalachian State University and see how it affects them. He
hopes to see how students can avoid the issue to help with the national obesity problem in the United
States. The questions are clear and easy to understand.

2. Are the citations themselves​ properly formatted using MLA style?​ Point out any problems you
notice on the draft itself (e.g. not alphabetical, or all caps, or not properly formatted for Web sources).

Yes

3. Do the sources look ​relevant, recent, reputable​, and ​varied ​enough (that is, not all Web sites or all
scholarly journals)? You might need to discuss the sources with the writer a bit to determine the
relevance & variety issue.
Yes, they look credible and accurate.

4. Does each ​annotation include all three sections​: summary, evaluation of the source’s credibility and
quality, and a brief explanation of how the source will fit into the writer’s research? Point out on the draft
itself any annotations that are missing pieces.
Yes, all parts are included in the summaries.
5. Is there at least one source that represents an ​alternative view​? That is, if most of the sources are
pro-GMO, is there at least one to address the drawbacks? Remember, awareness of counterargument is
essential when doing effective rhetorical work; otherwise, it’s just another ‘stacked deck,’ which is a
logical fallacy that intellectually-based, academic work should seek to avoid.
Yes, he has an article explaining how most freshmen don’t usually gain 15 pounds.

6. ​Plagiarism check​: from what you can tell, are the annotations in the student’s own words, or are there
any parts that sound incompletely paraphrased? Note on the draft any passages that might sound
problematic.
No, it seems that he did a good job paraphrasing and not plagiarizing his sources.

7. What did you find most interesting or impressive about this draft?
That he got good sources that will support his argument.

8. How might the proposal be improved or strengthened?

Nothing much, just make sure you use all of your sources.

9. What kinds of sources or evidence should the writer include in the remaining citations? What would
help flesh out this argument and make a rock-solid thesis—both in terms of argument or claims as well as
types of sources?

Maybe try and get some statistics to help get solid facts to your argument.;