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Reasearch Assm., Reviewed
Reasearch Assm., Reviewed
Hi, Jessica,
I’m Casey, your tutor for today’s session.
Summary:
This is a research paper on the career you’d like to pursue and how adult learning theories will
help you as you pursue this goal.
Content:
a) Thesis/Main Idea:
Most research papers include a main idea or thesis statement early on in the paper that
identifies the writer’s purpose in writing. Your paper seems to lack such a statement, and as a
result the reader may be confused about why you’re writing and may have trouble following
your ideas. This statement is generally:
placed at the end of the first paragraph or early in the essay after an introduction
However, it doesn’t come at the end of the paragraph, and you don’t organize your discussion
by these topics. This first part of your essay is difficult to follow because you move from talking
about marketing to merchandising, and it’s not clear if these are parts of the field you are
interested in or if these are skills you need or what logic is guiding this discussion.
The first step to organizing your discussion would be writing a thesis statement that reflects
your main idea, your purpose for writing this essay. Such a thesis statement might look
something like this, as I draw on some of your statement that is already there:
My degree in fashion marketing and design will allow me to reach my goals of working
for a major fashion magazine as a fashion editor also to be a buyer for a company and
working on fashion runways. There are a handful of skills that I will need in this field,
including marketing, merchandising, and XYZ. Understanding adult learning theories
will help me be successful because XYZ.
This is just one example. Write a thesis statement that reflects the elements you will discuss in
your body paragraphs. Place it at the end of the first paragraph. The XYZ are placeholders for
whatever ideas you think fit there best /however you want to direct your discussion.
Organization:
Once you write a thesis statement, use it as a guide to organize and structure your body
paragraphs.
I also notice that you seem to have placed your title page and abstract after the text of your
paper, rather than before it, where they are generally placed. The abstract’s purpose is to
prepare the reader for the content of the paper, as a type of “preview,” so it makes sense that
it comes before. You will want to move the title page and the abstract to come before the text
of your paper.
Use of Resources:
APA format requires a “references” page at the end of your essay that lists the sources you
used. You don’t seem to include one. You also don’t seem to be using correct conventions of
APA style that help your reader understand whether you are quoting, paraphrasing, or citing a
source and what material comes from the source.
Please see the tip sheet on using APA for this assignment. This tip sheet has been pasted to the
end of your document. For more help with APA style and for specific questions, please talk to
your facilitator or refer to the style manual or other resources recommended by your
facilitator.
Action Plan:
1) Write a main idea/thesis statement and place it at the end of the first paragraph.
2) Revise your body paragraphs to reflect the topics in that main idea statement.
3) Move your abstract and title page before the text of your paper.
4) Be sure all of your sources are relevant to your discussion, introduced, explained, and
properly cited. Review the APA tip sheet.
5) Proofread and spell check the essay before resubmitting it to Pearson Tutor Services
or posting it to your professor.
10/25/210
Research Assignment
The career that I'm going to pursue is Fashion Marketing and design. This fast
pace environment is something I look ford to doing. The fashion industry is the type of
career where you learn more than just fashion. A few goals i would like to per sure while
working in this Field is working for a major fashion magazine as a fashion editor also to
be a buyer for a company and working on fashion runways. [Do you discuss being a
fashion editor at any point throughout the essay? If you mention it, you should develop that
idea.] There is different Fields in fashion, but there are a handful of skills that you will
need for this career. [Which fields would you like to pursue?] Marketing is a very important
skill you will need to track sales data, know what the costumer want in the future so you
can work with the designers. Marketers are responsible for helping the fashion
producers target customers. You must know the wholesale and retail levels, also to
know where and when to sell the products. Marketing also involves adverting to the
seems like a new idea the way it’s phrased. Can you connect it to your main idea?] It
attempts improve sales and includes the costumers to buy the products like
marketing, with merchandising you must know when, where and why you’re
selling the right costumers. Fashion merchandisers must inform the marketers
about what the costumers and the next fashion trends. Without fashion shows
the fashion industry would not be the same. These are primary and at fashion
journalists and buyers for department stores whole sales and other markets. You
must know of every fashion show, and market producers. Present outfits that
Fashion designers play a major role in the fashion world and a great skill
everyone should have. Designers promote and make their clothes to buyers, journalist,
retailers and costumers. Helping out with fashion shows and magazines being in
fashion merchandising is something I want to be. Working in the fashion industry you
must know more that your degree in fashion marketing and design will prepare me in
this field. In marketing it have so many position and design to have twice are more it
There are many ways to explain the adults learning theory. Children threw out
their hole elementary through high school you’ve been thought to learn a certain way.
Now the challenge is. Is one decides to contain in higher learning , there are different
learning theories too must obtain, : adults are about to chase the appropriate
synchronous learning tools are different levels of interaction using adult learning
principles, they are able to learn effectively” (murugian, 2005). In this essay explain
what adult learning theories works best for me and why it is important for others to
Cooperative learning is one of the most commonly used forms of active pedagogy. Its
takes places with ones interaction with his or hers environment and peers, cooperative
learning is largely based on the idea that students learn through social context (Adams
and Hamm 1994). When thinking about cooperative learning I believe it will help me
with the environment is what will make you successful. Interaction with others helps
makes sense of what I’m learning as I become more responsible for articulating and
discussing class issues with peers or any other life situation threw your adult life. It’s
very important that cooperative learning be a part of my very day life. In the fashion
industry, Interaction and communication is a must. Being the person I am I can see
myself doing this? My career goals are to be a buyer, work for magazines, and work on
fashion runways; this also connects with action learning. Threw action learning I will
develop a conversation and interaction with people working in that business. Action
learning is a pedagogical practice that helps participant. (Fox, 2008) [Is this a quote or a
paraphrase? Introduce it and place it in context.] in my major you are learning is for
learn and make meaning as stated in Knowles adult learning principles. First among
these theorists is, Malcolm Knowles (1980). His theory provides centered guidelines for
adults. I will state a few, Adults must recognize the necessity of learning something
before undertaking to learn it; Adults recognize responsible for their own decision for
their own lives; Adults enter an educational experience with more and different
experience that youths. All these theories are very helpful for my college career and
beyond that. Adult learning theory helps us to understand the right needs for us to learn
This tip sheet for APA has been developed by Pearson Tutor Services to help you build your
skills in using APA style documentation and document development.
With APA documentation, place the in-text citation as close to the borrowed material as possible. For
example:
2) The definitive study (Williams, 1999) established the positive impact on the
“cerebral cortex of college students, enhancing the ability to accurately identify
strong communications practices and to provide support for why those practices
would strengthen a business’s team structure” (p. 32).
In this case, the author (Williams) is not a grammatical part of the sentence. Also, the use of quotation
marks indicates that the quoted phrase has been copied word-for-word from Williams. Try to make less
than 10% of your paper actual quotes because your research is supposed to support your ideas—not to
be your entire paper! The page reference follows at the end of the sentence in which the quote is found.
When quotations are 40 words or longer, type them as inset, or “block,” without quotation marks. Place
a period at the end of the final sentence. Then place the in-text citation inside parentheses. For
example:
4) Chocolate has been known to help people before modern business found a use for
it:
Chocolate’s value as a stimulant has been known for a long time. It is only
recently that its unique properties have been used in such practical areas as
business communications. Employees who have used this relatively innocuous
cocoa product have reported amazing results, leading researchers to reflect that
chocolate’s properties are crucial to workers’ abilities to focus when addressing
especially challenging communication situations. (Brown, 2009, p. 64)
In example 4, the author of the lengthy quote was not introduced as a part of the quote introduction.
The introduction to a lengthy quote always includes a colon.
Documentation: References
In APA, the resources are:
Arranged alphabetically by the first word in the entry (usually the author’s last name)
Formatted using a “hanging indent” (use the appropriate “special” code under “indents and
spacing” in ®Word)
Double-spaced
APA Style
American Psychological Association (APA) 6th
edition
Web site Brown, J. (2000). A plan to take over the world of email.
Retrieved December 9, 2004 from
http://www.gates.com/plan.htm
Referenc References
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EFFECTS OF CHOCOLATE 1
Brittany Arnold
AIU University
EFFECTS OF CHOCOLATE 2
Abstract
Note: The running head (EFFECTS OF CHOCOLATE) is a fully capitalized and shortened version of the
paper’s title. It is created using the “header” space provided in your word processing software. It is a
“running” head because it appears on each page with the current page’s number.
Note: The Abstract is a summary of the main points of your essay. It summarizes the problems and
solutions presented, and it may cite some of the research used. The Abstract is page 2 of the report. It
does not take the place of an introduction to the report. It is helpful to write the abstract after you have
completed one or two drafts of the report.
APA Style uses a unique headings system to separate and classify paper sections. There are 5 heading
levels in APA. The 6th edition of the APA manual revises and simplifies previous heading guidelines.
Regardless of the number of levels, always use the headings in order, beginning with level 1. The format
of each level is illustrated below:
In APA Style, the Introduction section never gets a heading and headings are not indicated by letters or
numbers. Levels of headings will depend upon the length and organization of your paper. Regardless,
always begin with level one headings and proceed to level two, etc. [When the text starts, the running
title continues, as does the pagination. Below, the levels of headings are illustrated.
EFFECTS OF CHOCOLATE 3
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Scenario 1 (Level 1)
Scenario 2 (Level 1)
Problem (Level 2)
Conclusion (Level 1)
The conclusion can begin here without a level 2 subheading if there are
[When needed:]
References
Research Assignment
Jessica Grice
Fashion Marketing and design is a fast pace environment it’s something I look
forward to doing. The fashion industry is the type of career where you learn more than
just fashion, it is very hands on. Cooperative learning in the fashion industry is
interaction and communication and is a must. [The abstract should be placed before the
paper.]