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C1 3
General Comments: The candidate has made a good attempt to correct the errors though he needs to pay attention to accuracy. He does need to provide an
annotated version as well. There is an attempt at some correction though this needed to be organized into two sections and he needs to focus on specific
language with rationales for why he corrected. In fact organization is quite a serious issue here. Moreover, he needs to state how he corrected along with a
rationale.
Overall recommended grade for Task 3. Circle as appropriate.
Distinction Merit Pass Not to standard
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IN-SERVICE CERTIFICATE IN ENGLISH
LANGUAGE TEACHING
COMPONENT 1
Language Task 3
Focus on the Learner’s Written Language
Return date:
COURSE TUTORS:
Orlando
and
Ricardo
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IN-SERVICE CERTIFÍCATE IN ENGLISH LANGUAGE TEACHING
COMPONENT 1 - LANGUAGE FOR TEACHERS
TASK 3- Focus on the learner's written language
Task outline
You are required to identify and correct the errors ¡n a sample of written work from
two learners who are at different levels and provide appropriate feedback for the
learners
Guidelines
1. On one copy identify and correct all the errors (the corrected version)
2. Correct and annotate the other for the learner; include a brief summarizing
comment written to the learner (the annotated version)
3. Write a brief rationale for the choices made in the annotated version explaining
why some errors have been corrected and some not.
NOTE:
1. One of the samples must be written by a learner of at least intermediate level
and be of around two hundred words in length
2. Before starting work on the assignment you should label the work, indicating
learner level and age if appropriate. You should then make two copies of both
samples
3. The rationale should give justification for such areas as: the style of feedback
(e.g. error code, full correction); any type of errors consistently left uncorrected; the
style and content of the summarizing comment to the learner
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General Assessment Criteria PASS level assignments will
show that the candidate can:
Accuracy
Audience Awareness
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Table of Contents:
Introduction 6
Student A
Profile 6
Rationale 7
Style of Feedback 7
Main Feedback 7
Student B:
Profile 8
Rationale 8
Style of Feedback 9
Main Feedback 9
Conclusion 9
Bibliography 10
Appendices:
Appendix 1: Student A – Original Work 11
Appendix 2: Student A – Corrected Version 12
Appendix 3: Student A – Annotated Version 14
Appendix 4: Student B – Original Work 19
Appendix 5: Student B – Corrected Version 27
Appendix 6: Student B – Annotated Version 30
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Introduction:
This assignment may work as a simple case in regards to how to feedback writing
assignments of students, my focus will not be in error correction, neither I intend to
develop a master piece correcting every possible aspect of the writting samples; it
will rather be developmental feedback prioritizing attention to the key features that
would to take the Ss further.
“Errors are evidence of learner development and are made for a variety of
reasons...”
Lizzie Pinard (2013,)
so we have to rather be able understand mistakes and errors as evidence of the
degree and stage of develpment of an student.
A systematic and friendly way to “mark” the corrections on behalf of the Ss.
A piece of of written feedback coaching Ss towards academic topics
and, delivering positive feedback.
Student A: B2 Level
Profile:
Rommina is an adult student (in her middle 50’s) targeted between B2 and C1, her
spoken expression is mostly fluent and her reading comprehension skills are
outstanding; she has faced difficulties regarding her listening skills and, her
writting is probably her weakest skill.
She has spoken basic English since she was a child, she often displays many
fossilized mistakes;
her main motivation to study English formally is to gain self-confidence and to be
portrayed as the educated person that she is, as she would eventually need to
speak English in business situations.
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Rommina is a brilliant physician who speaks Portuguese as her 1 st language and
she is a semi-native speaker of Spanish so, she may often have some “interference”
of her 1st and 2nd languages.
She has admitted that she is not longer used to writting, for many years, since the
time when she graduted, she has written nothing but prescriptions.
Rationale:
Provided her personal profile and being familiar with her writting work I know that
she would barely make mistakes that compromise meaning. She expects me to
rather correct the most urgent features that may compromise appropriacy.
There will be some feedback regarding content and style to help the student to
achieve her communication goals more effectively.
Style of Feedback:
Main feedback:
Considering the interests of the student the marks on her text were mostly in
regards to appropriacy.
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There was a reference and a recommendation to review the rules for
“definite articles” Vs. “indefinite articles” from a certain book that the student keeps
as a PDF file.
Profile:
Oswaldo is a student of the 8th grade.
He didn’t have any background in English when he started the secundary school (1
year ago,) now he has become a very enthusiastic learner. He is been targeted as a
visual and kinesthetic learner; he has a very artistic profile and he is very fond of
drawing, painting, and creative writing.
Paraphrasing his teachers I would say that “Oswaldo has difficulties to keep his
attention focused in one task for more than two minutes,” his attention normally
goes back and forth; this is reflected on his writing works as a lack of coherence or
continuity. So far the best we have done is to combine writing and drawing
alternatively.
Oswaldo has displayed emotional problems to cope with negative feedback.
Rationale:
The feedback will be delivered in separate texts, without marking his works, giving
him opportunities to correct enhance the writting on his works without loose of
graphical value.
The feedback will mostly focus on spelling and mistakes that could compromise
meaning.
The lack of coherence or continuity is a matter of maturity that, according to the
school specialists, will get gradually corrected as the student grows up and gains
maturity; therefore I will provide general guidelines for coherence and I will mark the
corrections in a separate document.
Style of feedback
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I’ll be very careful to deliver any feedback,
since “error correction may put obstacles in students’ attempts to write” Krashen
(1984.)
Oswaldo as the very young student that he is perceives the feedback as an external
motivation and could be unable to cope with any negativity.
Most of the observations he got on his last work were in regards to verb clauses,
and appropriacy of discourse; provided h is so creative and fond of narrative he is
starting to have an authentic need for grammatical comptence in regards to Present
Perfect and Past Perfect so, hopefully he will be readly to handle it in furter lessons
by now, I don’t expect him to learn it right away from the feedback but any way I
included a comment and one example to seetle some background.
Main feedback:
I sincerely praised the Ss’ narrative skills and the fact that his spelling has recently
improved considerably.
Provided there was some lack of coherence I simply inquiered if I had gotten his
cardboard cartels complete and in the right order.
In regards to accuracy I mentioned that in English every verb should go along with a
noun or
pronoun and then I used one of his sentences before and after correction as an
example.
Conclusions:
Correcting a piece of writting could seem intimidating at first sight provided the
great amount of work that it could potentially need so it becomes very important to
let the students know that teachers would not mark everything and that there will be
a certain focus on the most relevant features to be developed.
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Not all the feedback has to be in regards to accuracy, it is very important to praise
Ss in written, that will help them to perceive their work as memorable and to remain
motivated for further tasks.
In a personal level, with this frame-work, I re-discovered the value of the written
feedback as a personalized channel of communication between the teacher and
each one of the Ss.
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Bibliography
L. (2013, August 12). Delta Notes 1: Error Correction. Retrieved March 13, 2017, from
https://reflectiveteachingreflectivelearning.com/2013/08/10/delta-notes-1-error-
correction/
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Appendix 1: Student A - Original Work
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Appendix 2: Student A - Corrected Version
(top right)
your address,
and any other personal information
that you’d like to include.
where he tried not to run over a poor dog who crossed the street.
A big truck did not see his car and it crashed into him.
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nursery staff and the doctor did not provide us a satisfactory service.
a fully explain why the above happened, I really want a resolution and
Yours sincerely.
ROMMINA O
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Appendix 3: Student A – Annotated Version
Dear Romina,
Thank you for letting me know, in advance, that the letter above is fake,
The comments that I added to your original text are mostly in regards to appropriacy
Best Regards.
Sergio
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Appendix 4: Student B – Original Work
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Appendix 5: Student B – Corrected Version
was in disorder.
I ignore it ,
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Without thinking more,
The next day, I had hotcakes with the ingredients that I bought the night before,
later in the afternoon I decided to watch the television , after a while I fell asleep
when I woke up it was 6:30 , I went to the kitchen to have dinner with the hotcakes that I kept
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Already in the supermarket decided to buy milk, eggs, flour and mantequilla
I decided to put a bait to catch any creature, after two hours, sleep something
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Appendix 6: Student B – Annotated Version
Dear Oswaldo,
At some point I got lost in the sequence of events, I wonder if I got the slides in the
wrong order or if I missed anyone of them. Could you please check it out for me?
By the way I got good news for you, your spelling has improved very much,
on your story I only marked one word in green: “raccoon.”
on the other hand I would like to tell you that in English every verb should go along
with a noun or pronoun, for instance in one of your sentnces you wrote:
In our further lesson we’ll be working out with some rules that will clarify why when
an action happened and finished before another one in the past we use expressions
like “I thought about what had seen the day before”
Sergio
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