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C1-3 Resubmission
C1-3 Resubmission
General Comments: The candidate has made a good attempt to correct the errors though he needs to pay attention to accuracy in his command of language.
He has been thorough with both versions however the analysis was rather weak in the body with very limited rationales and limited terminology. There is
enough evidence to pass although this is a very weak assignment
COMPONENT 1
Language Task 3
Focus on the Learner’s Written Language
Date Set:
Return date:
COURSE TUTORS:
Orlando
and
Ricardo
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Task outline
You are required to identify and correct the errors ¡n a sample of written work from two
learners who are at different levels and provide appropriate feedback for the learners
Guidelines
1. On one copy identify and correct all the errors (the corrected version)
2. Correct and annotate the other for the learner; include a brief
summarizing comment written to the learner (the annotated version)
3. Write a brief rationale for the choices made in the annotated version
explaining why some errors have been corrected and some not.
NOTE:
1. One of the samples must be written by a learner of at least intermediate level and
be of around two hundred words in length.
2. Before starting work on the assignment you should label the work, indicating
learner level and age if appropriate. You should then make two copies of both samples.
3. The rationale should give justification for such areas as: the style of feedback (e.g.
error code, full correction); any type of errors consistently left uncorrected; the style and
content of the summarizing comment to the learner.
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Accuracy
Audience Awareness
Table of Contents
Introduction ................... 6
Student A ...................... 6
Rationale ....................... 7
Style of Feedback........... 7
Student B........................ 8
Rationale ....................... 8
Style of Feedback .......... 9
Conclusions ................... 9
Bibliography ................. 10
Appendices:
Introduction
I hope this report could be of help for teachers, just as a case of praxis; considering that
rehearsal and feedback are key to Ss’ development; I’ll be assigning suitable writing tasks to
two Ss with different profile, latter on I’ll be providing them careful developmental feedback; my
focus will be in:
For ethical resons I will avoid to mark directly on my Ss’ works, I shall rather use digitized
pictures or transcriptions for annotated feedbacks.
Provided that “errors are evidence of learner development...” Lizzie Pinard (2013,)
I consider handmade (red) marks and proofreaders’ codes antipedagogical, obsolete and
disrespectful.
I’ll be also providing plenty of positive feedback as a way to reinforce Ss’ progress
because I consider this as the most important feedback feature.
Student A, C1 Level:
Rommina is in her middle 50s, her spoken expression is mostly fluent and her reading
comprehension skills are outstanding; she has faced difficulties regarding her listening skills
and, her writting is probably her weakest skill.
She has spoken basic English since she was a child, she often displays many fossilized
mistakes; her main motivation to study English formally is to lower anxiety when writing letters
and reports for professional purposes.
Rommina is a brilliant physician who speaks Portuguese as her 1 st language and she is a
seminative speaker of Spanish so, she may often displays interference of her 1 st and 2nd
languages.
She has admitted that she is not longer used to write, for many years, since the time when she
graduted, she’s written nothing else but prescriptions.
We spoke about suitable writing tasks for her and we agreed that she’ll be practicing with
miscelaneous topics related to her professional field.
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Rommina also expects suggestions about one language topic to work out in a further
assignment.
Rationale
I reactively decided to correct:
puntuation; provided it allows some flexibility and the student is very familiar with punctuation
rules, errors will be marked but NO feedback will be necessary;
Style of Feedback
We’d agreed upon correction of the most urgent features that may compromise meaning or her
professional image. I’ll be marking her work on a partial transcription using different fonts and
colors and, there will be an additional note delivering general feedback.
Rommina is very open to error correction so, my feedback will be straightforward and concise;
I will simply rewrite any words or sentences to show the right spellings,
and, options for word choice
and, options to rebuild sentences in a way that could help to convey their meaning more
proficiently.
Student B, B1 level:
His oral production is below average in both L1 and L2, he displays introversion and hesitation
issues.
His performance about receptive skills is low; paraphrasing his teachers I would say that
“Oswaldo has difficulties to keep his attention focused on one task for more than two minutes,”
his attention goes back and forth; this is reflected on his writing works as a lack of coherence or
continuity. So far we have combined writing and drawing alternatively to help him to cope with
his mental shifting.
Rationale
Oswaldo has demonstrated an absolut neeed for creative freedom, he can produce very
interesting texts at the best of his capability when he can choose the topic so,
all I usually provide is a list of constraints like:
That way I can leave everything else up to him so, I can allow him to be very creative.
His lack of coherence is a matter of maturity that, according to specialists, will get gradually
corrected as he grows-up and gains brain maturity;
therefore I will avoid to provide correction or guidelines about any of the following:
punctuation;
cases of missing nouns, pronouns or articles;
wrong or incomplete use of transitive verbs;
mistakes due to overgeneralization;
L1 interference.
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Provided this student is so creative and fond of narrative, he has committed “natural order
errors” that demonstrate his need to learn Past Perfect so, a reference in regards will be
delivered.
I’ll be also providing feedback about the most relevant mistakes, within his scope, that could
compromise meaning:
spelling mistakes;
verb tense mistakes;
no more than one correction of an incomplete sentence.
Style of feedback
I’ll sincerely praise the Ss’ narrative skills and recent improvements.
I’ll use one of his sentences to exemplify the use of past perfect; in order to optimize the use of
his spots of attention I will only use the right version without showing the mistake.
The feedback will be delivered in a separate partial-transcription without marking his slides as
he has requested; he will correct them by himself, provided he doesn’t want them to loose
graphical value:
Such self-correction will be more beneficial for the student: “output aids learning because it
provides a domain for error correction.” Krashen, (1995:68).
Conclusions:
It is important to inform to the students (and parents when applicable) that the teachers should
not mark everything, just the most relevant features to be worked out.
1050 words.
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Bibliography
L. (2013, August 12). Delta Notes 1: Error Correction. Retrieved March 13, 2017, from
https://reflectiveteachingreflectivelearning.com/2013/08/10/delta-notes-1-error-correction/
Dr. Stephen Krashen answers questions on The Comprehension Hypothesis Extended. (n.d.).
Retrieved March 13, 2017, from http://jalt-publications.org/tlt/articles/2001-dr-stephen-krashen-
answers-questions-comprehension-hypothesis-extended
Krashen, S. D. (1995). Principles and practice in second language acquisition. New York:
Phoenix Elt.
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where he tried not to run over a poor dog who crossed the street.
A big truck did not see his car and it crashed into him.
,
the Doctor said NO but I wanted to see him well.
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nursery staff and the doctor did not provide us a satisfactory service.
a fully explain why the above happened, I really want a resolution and
Yours sincerely.
ROMMINA O
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Yours sincerely.
ROMMINA O
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Dear Romina,
To begin with, I’d like to praise your commitment and continuous efforts.
The comments that I added to your original text are mostly in regards to spelling or word-choice,
Best Regards.
Sergio
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was in disorder.
I ignore it ,
The next day, I had hotcakes with the ingredients that I bought the night before,
later in the afternoon I decided to watch the television , after a while I fell asleep
when I woke up it was 6:30, I went to the kitchen to have dinner with the hotcakes that I kept
Already in the supermarket decided to buy milk, eggs, flour and mantequilla
I decided to put a bait to catch any creature, after two hours, sleep something
classification of errors
[1] In the use of English verbs must be arranged with nouns or pronouns.
[2] Wrong or incomplete use of transitive verbs.
[3] L1 interference.
[4] Natural Order Error,
the student displays developmental errors that reflect his neet to learn
(a) past perfect to talk about an event which happened before another one in the past,
or
(b) the use "would" to mean that something was volunteered or promised for a further moment;
Vs. the use of "was going to" or "were going to" to mean that something was planned or
predicted for a further time.
[5] Overgeneralization.
[6] Spelling mistakes.
[7] The student mistook the tense of the verb.
[8] Missing the definite article.
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Already in the supermarket decided to buy milk, eggs, flour and mantequilla...
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I decided to put a bait to catch any creature, after two hours, sleep something
Dear Oswaldo,
[1] plese take a look to the list of regular verbs on the last pages of your workbook;
Sergio
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Past Perfect