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Devin Caroen

Ms.Cyr

English 11

21 Oct 2019

This is water analysis

In the essay “This Is Water,” David Foster Wallace asserts that there are many other Commented [1]: Essay needs a thematic,
argumentative title. Try to make your case with pizzazz.
ways to consider and perceive certain situations and different ways to act during these Commented [2]: Rhetorical devices used in the essay
are not noted in the comments. Grade will be lowered
situations. People that are more centered and worried about themselves have a natural default by 10% without them.
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setting that is so easy and automatic that people don't even have to choose to think like this. quotation mark, no exceptions
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Wallace supports his claims by giving examples of day in and day out adult life that can an education is to know what to think.
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frustrating and giving examples of other ways to think. Wallace also uses stories to appeal to

certain people and give an idea of what he's saying through imagery. On this default setting Commented [6]: Excellent analysis.

people think you are the center of everything and all these frustrating situations are about you.

But if you stop and think of all the possibilities that people lives are also going on and stuff is

happening in their life, if you consider those possibilities it doesn't seem so bad and you will be

more open minded about everything. David Wallace’s purpose is to inform people of their

default setting and to get people to think differently.The audience are all adults that are in this

situation and students, teachers,and parents.

In Wallace’s essay, “This Is Water” he uses emotion and logic to portray the importance Commented [7]: Really strong analysis here. You
have articulated it well, Devin.
of critical thinking. Wallace uses the word “conscious” to signify people that think critical, while Commented [8]: Rhetorical device

those who do not think critically are referred to as “unconscious.” Wallace’s main argument is

that a person has the choice to think critically and should do so every day. He also says to be “a

little less arrogant” because being arrogant can cause your thoughts to be deluded and wrong,

and wallace says he “learned this the hard way.” Commented [9]: periods and commas go inside
quotation mark, no exceptions
David Wallace reminds the audience that different people can have different views of Commented [10]: good use of vivid verbs

reality. Wallace uses logical reasoning to show that people can change their perspectives.
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Wallace uses negative emotional words and the story of the college graduate who goes grocery Commented [11]: Try to vary sentence beginnings.
Three sentences in a row start with the word,
shopping to give off a negative emotional responses to people who think “unconsciously”, Which "Wallace."
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is an emotional appeal. Throughout the essay, Wallace stresses the tediousness day in and day
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out life, using negative emotions such as “tired, hurried,” “stressed,” and “pissed and miserable.” Commented [14]: typo

Through these negative words and more, Wallace shows how awful life is for unconscious

people. Instead of getting stuck in the “constant monologue inside your own head” you can learn

how to think , to be conscious and aware of what you think about, to choose what you pay

attention too. Overall david wallace uses many persuasive elements that inform the audience of Commented [15]: Finish the essay with a final thought
about the overall purpose of the piece and how
his main claim. Wallace achieved it.

Prewriting
There are many other ways to consider and perceive certain situations and how we act
during these situations.People that act like things are more about them have a natural default
setting that is so easy and automatic that people don't even have to choose to think like this.On
this default setting you are the center of everything and all these frustrating situations are about
you.But if you stop and think of all the possibilities that people lives are also going on and stuff
is happening in their life, if you consider those possibilities it doesn't seem so bad and you won't
be as frustrated.

Main claims:One of the main claims that the author gives is that day in and day out adult life can
be frustrating which is peoples default setting to look at it their perspective in a annoyed
frustrated view.

Persuasive elements-
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