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2 EXAMPLES – 2 IDEAS -
WRITTEN BY PHAN QUYNH
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1/ specific
2/ imagine (one person/
3/ personal (rare)
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THẦY
DAVID LANG
At the present time, the population of some countries
includes a relatively large number of young adults,
compared with the number of older people. Do the
advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
The average age of the population for many nations
around the world has been in decline in recent decades
creating a situation where young people have become the
world’s largest demographic, particularly in developing
nations. Although there are decided drawbacks to this
phenomenon related to expertise in the workforce, it is
still a positive development because it will lead to
booming economies in the coming years.
The most frequently cited drawback to having a predominately

lack of skilled
young population is the

workers in many important

industries. A great example of this can be seen in
Vietnam, which has one of the youngest
populations in the world. Vietnam currently has very few leaders
in important areas like engineering and technology. When it

came time for Ho Chi Minh city to build a

subway system , there were not enough
skilled engineers to accomplish the feat. They had to hire a huge
number of specialists from Japan and Thailand to ensure the
quality of the project. The potential engineers for this project are
still in school in Vietnam or studying abroad and it may be
another decade before they are ready to design and execute
large, complex infrastructure. It
is not uncommon for
developing countries with young
populations to require outside assistance for
national projects to the detriment of their
own workers.

1 idea -> 1 example =>

result
Despite this drawback, the advantage of a young
population is that it brings many future benefits to a country and
is a key indicator of future economic

prosperity . Japan famously has

one of the oldest populations in the world and this has led them
into a deep economic recession over the last 20 years as it
becomes increasingly apparent that the nation will have to
assume responsibilities related to healthcare and a dwindling
workforce. Contrast this with the so-called ‘Tiger
Economies’ of Southeast Asia that
include Thailand, Vietnam, Indonesia
and Singapore. These countries have some of the youngest
populations in the world, which, coupled with a growing middle
class and better education, means that they will enjoy upward
economic growth for decades to come. The middle class will
expand because well-educated graduates will be able to get good
jobs and this middle class will become a consumer class that
feeds the economy. Overall, this is why having a young
population is desirable for any nation.

1 IDEA -> 1 EXAMPLE – 1 RESULT

In conclusion, I fully believe that a younger population indicates
a country is going to be successful in the future. The key
element for all young populations is education and governments
should focus on this in order to fully exploit the benefits of their
demographics.
Introduction: (2 câu)
Body 1:
Câu 1. Topic sentence (bất lợi)
Câu 2. Ý chính 1. Since chủ ngữ + động từ, chủ ngữ động từ.

Câu 3. For example, chủ ngữ + động từ.

Câu 4. This means that (chủ ngữ + động từ), which (kết quả
của ví dụ)
Câu 5. Kết quả cả đoạn.

Body 2
Câu 1. Topic sentence
Câu 2. Ý chính 2. By + ving, chủ ngữ+ động từ.
Câu 3. For example, chủ ngữ + động từ.
Câu 4. In fact (chủ ngữ + động từ), which (kết quả của ví dụ)
Câu 5. Kết quả cả đoạn.

Conclusion. (2 câu – 3 câu)

The benefits of using
facebook. (style 6.5 sau đó
nâng lên 7.0+)
There are a lot of = a number of = benefits of using facebook.
There are some = a handful of benefits of using facebook.

Body 1

Câu 1. There are some = a handful of

benefits of using facebook.
.

Câu 2. (Ý CHÍNH ) FIRSTLY, Since facebook

offers users may = a wide range of
communication platforms, they can = are
able to keep in touch with everyone
comfortably= at ease.
Câu 3. (VÍ DỤ) For example, many applications
of facebook, such as
Messenger or
Conference call, allow people to have a
chat with their family members, friends or
relatives every day.

Câu 4. (GIẢI THÍCH VÍ DỤ) This means

that they could communicate and
catch up with each other without
travelling to have a face-to-face
conversation, regardless of
turn
geographical barriers, which in

tightens their social

bond.
Câu 5. (KẾT LUẬN)This way, therefore,
promotes social behavior and
enhance social interaction
as people are much engaged in talking and
sharing with others.
Body 2.

Câu 1 Another obvious benefit of

using facebook could be analysed below.

Câu 2. By effectively using facebook, a

vast number of users are able to

do online
business and earn money
without having much investments in
facilities and infrastructures.
Câu 3. For instance, a businessman could

offer his
products to
buyers by running online
advertising or doing indirect transactions
via Messenger without hiring premises,
or making decorations for their office.

Câu 4. In fact, online buyers can place

orders through facebook at ease, and

online sellers will

deliver ordered
items through door – to – door

which will
services,

save them
investment
money and help
them earn the
maximum
profits
Câu 5. Doing online
business through
facebook has become
convenient than ever,
and businessmen can
reap monetary
benefits from this
service.
…………….
Introduction

There are a handful of benefits of using facebook. Since facebook offers

users a wide range of communication platforms, they are able to keep in
touch with everyone comfortably. For example, many applications of
facebook, such as Messenger or Conference call, allow people to have a
chat with their family members, friends or relatives every day. This
means that they could communicate and catch up with each other
without travelling to have a face-to-face conversation, regardless of
geographical barriers, which in turn tightens their social bond. This way,
therefore, promotes social behavior and enhance social interaction as
people are much engaged in talking and sharing with others.

Another obvious benefit of using facebook could be analysed below. By

effectively using facebook, a vast number of users are able to do online
business and earn money without having much investments in facilities
and infrastructures. For instance, a facebook businessman could offer his
products to buyers by running online advertising or doing indirect
transactions via Messenger without hiring premises, or making
decorations for their office. In fact, online buyers can place orders
through facebook at ease, and online sellers will deliver ordered items
through door – to – door services, which will save them investment
money and help them earn the maximum profits. As a result, doing
online business through facebook has become more convenient than
ever, and businessmen can reap monetary benefits from this service.

Conclusion