To: Miss Paula

From: Sebastian Fuentes

Subject: Tapperton sport club

INTRODUCTION
Throught this midle comunícate that i was in contact with members of
the tapperton club to discover whether they are satisfied with the facilities. What
I discovered was what follows.
STATE OF THE FOOTBALL PICH
I had the opportunity to speak with the members of the club and they told
me that the state of the courts is not the best, what the president responds is
that there is not enough money for this but in time it will be solved.
COLLEGE FEES
Other members of the club disagreed that the monthly fee is very high, to
which the president replied that this is an issue that cannot be lowered due to
the economy.
Recomendation (in capital letter maybe?)
My recommendation is that the club members are willing to pay a
bonus to fix the field. And with the quota it is an issue that the president has to
think about.
 Hello Seba!
I’m glad you are working hard in all the classes, that’s a really good
thing! :)
I’ve written possible corrections below. This is your 1ST DRAFT. Please, send
me your 2ND DRAFT with the corrections. Don’t delete this one, remember that
these are gradual assignments to improve your English and writings.
Looking forward to your corrections
Best,
Paula

- Throught this midle comunícate that i was in contact with: what do you
mean by this phrase? Can you think of a better way to say it?
Remember the difference between through and thought. Middle with
double d, communicate with double m and without accent mark. Personal
pronoun I always goes with capital letter.
- Tapperton should be with capital letter as well.
- Pitch with a T
- Punctuation?
- responds is: Is it the Present Simple which you wanted to use in this
case? Think of a better verb to say “respond”
- disagreed that the monthly fee is very high: do they disagree with that?
Check the sentence. The verb disagree can be followed by a preposition
(with someone, on/about something)
- lowered: reduced would be more suitable.
- My recommendation is that the club members are willing to pay a bonus
to fix the field. And with the quota it is an issue that the president has to
think about.: in this paragraph you are making a conclusion of what is
written above. What recommendations/solutions would you give to the
club?