With the increased global demand in oil and gas,

undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to

access more resources.

To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

One of the things to notice about this essay is that it has a very short
introduction and conclusion. It retains all of the elements of a good
introduction (paraphrase question, give opinion and outline main ideas) and
conclusion (summarise main ideas and give opinion again), but does so with
fewer words. This allows you to spend more time on your main body
paragraphs; where most of the marks are won and lost. However, this is a very
advanced technique because it requires a very high level of English to say lots
of things with fewer words. This is a skill you should try to master if you want to
get one of the higher band scores. 

This essay disagrees that untapped resources should be explored because of

the environmental risks and the fact that there are renewable options
available.

Many argue that energy companies should be granted access to previously

unexplored areas, but this would be a huge mistake because of the potential
for environmental damage. Drilling for non-renewable energy resources is
incredibly damaging to the local ecosystem and these areas are often in
sensitive places, such as the Arctic or National Parks in the United States and
Canada. The Deep Water Horizon disaster demonstrated just how disastrous
an oil spill can be for the animals and plant life in the local vicinity. Therefore,
damaging these untouched areas is too much of a risk and oil companies
should be banned from doing business there.
Taking these risks becomes pointless when you consider that there are plenty
of viable alternative energy sources available. Solar, wind and tidal energy
could replace our reliance on oil and gas completely within just 15 years if the
industries were given enough funding. CEO of Solar City and Tesla, Elon Musk,
recently demonstrated this by drawing a very small square on a map of the
United States and stating confidently that small area could power the whole of
the country if covered with solar panels. He also stated that we could further
reduce our need for oil by building electric cars rather than those with
combustion engines.

In conclusion, sensitive areas should not be made available to fossil fuel

companies because of the environmental risks and the fact that our future
energy needs can be met by renewable energy.