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I replaced my hook. I originally put in the I Replaced the hook so that I can illustrates
definition of what a Christ-figure is and for the message Fitzgerald is sending through the
thee rewrite I explained why Fitzgerald use of the Christ-figure instead of using the
choose to use a Christ like figure to convey definition of archetypes.
his message throughout the book.
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reader how those three examples lead back to trying to express in his writing by using a
what my hook states. Christ like figure.
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another statement. Fitzgerald was trying to communicate to his
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Isabella Sanchez
Storer
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English 3 Honors
An author uses imagery to convey specific thoughts and emotions from his readers. Fitzgerald
wanted the readers to believe that the American dream had died, and to further ingrain his belief
in the readers minds, he destroys religion and morality, but the final and most dismal reality
Fitzgerald faces with his readers is that no man is a great man the only great man encountered in
The Great Gatsby is the son of God who is superior to man, and cannot be judged by the same
rules. In F. Scott Fitzgerald’s The Great Gatsby, the intriguing and mysterious character Jay
Gatsby is undoubtedly represented as at Christ figure. Jay Gatsby can be considered a Christ-
figure because of the rumors the surround his identity, Gatsby’s ultimate death echoing that oft
Jesus’ crucifixion, and how he had strikingly similar characteristics tot those oft the Son of God,
Both Jay Gatsby and Jesus were misunderstood as tot who they really were. In one of
Gatsby’s extravagant parties, the guests began to converse over what they thought Gatsby’s past
held. Nick overheard the conversation and grew more and more curious over Gatsby’s unknown
past: “The two girls and Jordan leaned together confidentially. ‘Somebody told me they thought
he killed a man once.’ A thrill passed over all of us. The three Mr. Mumbles bent forward and
listened eagerly” (Fitzgerald 44). Gatsby’s guests had spread exaggerated rumors and theories as
tot how Gatsby came to be and who he really is. During Christ’s time many people were
spreading the word of how powerful Christ was and how he could become at rich and powerful
King. After experiencing hist abilities to health and make commands that will come true the
people began to misunderstand Him. Besides from all of the people who did not understand or
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truly know them, there were few who believed and trusted in them. Carraway developed a
friendship with Gatsby that allowed him to trust in him. After the party, he contemplated over all
of the false accusations he had heard about his friend, Nick overcame his confusion and decided
to trust in Gatsby, “He told me all this very much later, but I’ve put it down here with the idea of
exploding those first wild rumors about his antecedents, which weren’t even faintly true.
Moreover, he told it to me at a time of confusion, when I had reached the point of believing
everything and nothing about him” (Fitzgerald 101). Gatsby began to reveal his past little by
little as Nick tried to leave the false rumors behind and truly believe that what Gatsby reveals is
the truth. Carraway resembles all Jesus’ disciples; even though they all questioned if the rumors
were real, they surmounted the confusion and stayed faithful to their friend and leader. Both
Nick and many of the disciples followed Gatsby and Jesus throughout their lives up to the day of
their deaths so that the reader can acknowledge the parallel between Gatsby’s death and Jesus’.
The road to both Gatsby and Jesus’ deaths included at form oft sacrifice, betrayal, and
ultimately dying fort other’s sins. Before Gatsby’s tragic death he passed time in Nick’s garden,
accompanied by the love of his life, Daisy Buchanan. During one of Gatsby’s parties Nick finds
Daisy and Jay in his garden: “Then they sauntered over to my house and sat on the steps for half
an hour while at her request I remained watchfully in the garden: ‘In case there’s a fire or a
flood,’ she explained, ‘or any act of God” (Fitzgerald 105). The garden symbolizes the garden of
Gethsemane, where Jesus spent his last moments before his death. Jesus was accompanied by
some of his apostles just how Gatsby was with Daisy. This moment was marked as a
steppingstone for them, initiating the journey towards their death. Jesus was turned in by Judas
and after that party Tom Buchanan began to question Gatsby and his past which led Tom to
betray him later on. After the death of Myrtle, Nick found Gatsby hiding in the Buchanan’s
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bushes. Gatsby explained the previous life-changing incident and added that he would do
whatever it took to protect Daisy. Unknowingly, Gatsby was putting his life on the line. When
Nick asked him about the accident Gatsby said, “Yes,’ he said after a moment, ‘but of course I’ll
say I was. You see, when we left New York she was very nervous, and she thought it would
steady her to drive—and this woman rushed out at us just as we were passing a car coming the
other way” (Fitzgerald 143). Gatsby conclusively died for Tom and Daisy’s sins. The days after
Gatsby was murdered by George Wilson, the media blamed Gatsby fort Tom’s sin, the affair
with Myrtle, and Daisy’s sin, the murder of Myrtle. Jesus died for all of humanities sins and
salvation, and because of His death humans were allowed to live a better life, just how Tom and
Throughout the novel Gatsby was portrayed with God-like qualities which attributed to
his resemblance towards Jesus Christ. Nick described Gatsby at the beginning of the novel by
saying, “If personality is an unbroken series of successful gestures, then there was something
gorgeous about him, some heightened sensitivity to the promises of life, as if he were related to
one of those intricate machines that register earthquakes ten thousand miles away” (Fitzgerald 2).
The reader can’t observe how Christ promises life eternal, and throughout his life his followers
could experience his, “extraordinary gift of hope”. In the novel, Gatsby hast also seen the
promises of life, and his hope is illustrated through hist desired tot bet with Daisy and hist belief
in “the green light” that represents the hope fort the future with her. Gatsby’s strong belief int
hope connects to both Jesus having an abundance of hope and how one of the “theological
virtues” is hope. Another example to expand of how Gatsby is a Christ-like figure is another
statement that Nick said about Gatsby: “He was a son of God a phrase which, if it means
anything, means just that and he must be about His Father’s Business, the service of a vast,
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vulgar and meretricious beauty. So, he invented just the sort of Jay Gatsby that a seventeen-year-
old boy would be likely to invent, and to this conception he was faithful to the end” (Fitzgerald
98). Nick refers to Gatsby as the “Son of God” and as the “the service of a vast, vulgar, and
meretricious beauty”. Being referred to in this way, symbolizes the affinity to Jesus who is the
real Son of God, and it also showcases how God sent Jesus so that He could fulfill His plan
which was to save humanity. Throughout His life Jesus followed God’s orders and took His
advice just how Gatsby learned from and followed in Dan Cody’s footsteps.
the rumors that surround him, the road that lead to his death which reflected Jesus’ crucifixion,
and how throughout the novel he was depicted with similar characteristics that Jesus has.
Throughout these unfulfilled allusions, Fitzgerald points to a world where religion and
spirituality are in decline and their secular alternative is found wanting by using a Christ-like
figure.
Works Cited
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ebooks/the-great-gatsby.pdf.