WRITING MY DRAFT IN CLASS

NAME:_____DANIEL OSUNA________________________________________________ GROUP:

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● Write complete paragraphs.

● Use different colors for each component of the essay.
● Do not exceed the word limit 90 - 100 words each paragraph.
● Use appropriate connectors and punctuation.
● Use complex grammar and vocabulary.

Introduction Did you know that pollution on air has exceed the number of 30% all around the world and is
affecting people’s health and comfort? Carelessness towards the environment of companies and
also people are producing toxic chemicals that affect society health. Besides, percentages have
shown that in the most industrial cities people are dying contaminated and the ozone layer is
weakening. Having this in mind, this essay seeks to analyze the effects of pollution in the air that is
affecting people around the word, regarding emission of harmful chemicals in the atmosphere and
the respiratory problems people are experiencing, in each case a solution will be proposed.

Body Paragraph 1 First, one of the problems that people are facing is the Emission of harmful chemicals on the
atmosphere. In many cities, companies tend work with some unfriendly materials with the
environment that make these chemicals spread in air. A clear example and statistic of these bad
uses is that every second, 310 kg of chemicals are hanging around in air and the consequence is that
10 million tons of chemicals are in the environment each year. To improve this situation, both
companies and the World Health Organization could try to look for a friendly power source, use
electricity in an appropriate way and avoid burn trash or materials. If companies start thinking
about the environment and are forced to comply with the regulations then pollution in air will
decrease.

Body Paragraph 2 Secondly, another issue is that people are suffering respiratory problems with all this polluted air.
Even though people see that this is a serious problem and people are dying because this
contamination, People seem to don’t get conscious about the danger they would experience if they
do not take the necessary precautions with air pollution. For example, this problem is leading the
number of people dying all around the world (3 million people die every year) and 65 million people
have pulmonary disease. To solve this, World Health Organization, Government, Hospitals, Doctors
have to look for Strategies to improve and tell the people to conserve energy, reduce trips in car-
bus, etc, and avoid be close to smoke. If government, hospitals and people talk the same language
and start working on a better quality of life then there will be less and less people with this
respiratory problems.

Taking all of this in mind, the bad use of materials in companies and the consequences of the bad
Conclusion use of technology and energy are some critical situations people health and environment can
experience. This worrying problems can be eased through new strategies and reforms that force
companies to use friendly materials with the environment. This actions would require immediate
intervention of the government and the World Health Organization. As a result, companies
behaviors and people cares would improve
References:
1. __ Toxic chemicals released by industries. Worldmeter (2019). Retrieved from:
www.worldmeter.info
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2. __ Global impact of respiratory disease. World Health Organization (2020). Retrieved from:
www.who.int.org
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