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Folio – Parallel Construction

Zion Williamson. It’s a name you might not be familiar with, but it’s a name that will one day
be universally recognised. On paper, Zion Williamson is a 19-year-old NBA athlete, but he is
more special than that simple title. He’s been called unstoppable, aggressive, generous,
giving and relentlessly powerful. However, more than anything, Zion Williamson is a
competitor.

He was born July 2000 in North Carolina but move to South Carolina after just two years.
When Williamson was 5 years old, he first began playing basketball, and he claims it was
then that he knew basketball was the sport for him.

However, during his adolescence Williamson played many sports such as soccer and football
alongside basketball. This meant that when entering High School, Zion had to choose
between pursuing either basketball or football. Having chosen the former, he would go onto
average 25 points per game, at the age of 14, playing against 18-year olds. Williamson also
developed his ability to dunk at this young age which meant that via social media he quickly
gained popularity and national attention. In January 2016, Williamson had amassed 12,000
Instagram followers, for his dunking and unparalleled athleticism. He was so dominant at
such a young age, USA Today said Williamson must be “terrifying to play against.”

As Zion got older and grew to 200cm, his online following grew as well. By the beginning of
2017 Williamson had 125,000 Instagram followers, which sprung to 1.1 million a year later
and now totals 5 million. Although Williamson was so clearly dominant in High School, he
was subject to criticism, as ESPN analysists claimed he was not competing against adequate
competition. This meant he was ranked as the 3rd overall High Schooler in the country,
before committing to Duke University, where he would establish himself as a freak of
nature.

Zion lead his team as a freshman, becoming the second player in Duke’s history to record at
least 25 points, 15rebound and 5 blocks in a single game. Williamson also became the third
player to ever record 500 points, 50 steals and 50 blocks in a season, joining Anthony Davis
and Kevin Durant as the only athletes to achieve this.

After a dominant season and tournament in his freshman year of college, Williamson had to
decide what his next move would be. He had enormous talent, a huge online following and
the praise of the all NBA executives. Williamson had to decide if he should remain at Duke
for a second year or declare for the NBA draft. After much deliberation and discussion with
his family, Williamson declared for the NBA draft
Zion was selected first overall by the New Orleans Pelicans and signed a contract of
$40million USD over 4 years. Before debuting, Zion suffered a meniscus tear, meaning he
would miss half the 2019/20 NBA season.
After rehabbing, Williamson debuted on the 25th of January 2020, scoring 22 points and
proving to all critics that he was capable of succeeding in the highest level of competition.
Zion Williamson. It’s a name that means many things. Suitable adjectives include strength,
power and dominance. However, the best word to describe Williamson is ‘competitor,’
because the 19-year-old is set to become the greatest player of all time.

Word Count: 541

Bibliography:

Michael Smith, February 20 2020, Duke Zion Williamson Seeing Steep Growth in Social
Media Followers, Sports Business Daily, viewed 2 May 2020,
https://www.sportsbusinessdaily.com/Daily/Issues/2019/02/20/Media/Duke-Zion.aspx

TheFamousPeople, July 9th 2019, Zion Williamson Biography, The Famous People, viewed
May 2 2020, https://www.thefamouspeople.com/profiles/zion-williamson-46472.php

FOLIO 5

 Parallel Construction

You are to write 500 words (480 to 550 words) of FICTION or NON-FICTION
demonstrating the use of parallel construction as shown in McKenzie, pp. 142–146. You
must have at least three lists in your piece (can be run-on lists or bulleted lists or a
combination of both). Please don't copy sentences straight from McKenzie. You need to
demonstrate parallel construction in more than just lists.

This MAY form part of your folio.

Invent your own topic. The form of the writing is up to you. If you think it may not be
suitable for assessment, please check with your teacher.

Criteria for allocating marks for this folio:

 Accuracy in grammar, punctuation and clarity of expression (4 marks)

 Appropriate and effective use of relevant elements (parallel construction)  (4
marks) NOTE: Highlight sentences that demonstrate parallel construction in a
variety of sentences, not just the lists (run-on or bulleted)
 Piece must be interesting (non-fiction) or engaging (fiction) (2 marks)

Comments:
Folio 2 Hyphen’s

Always hyphenated
Sometimes hyphenated

Due to the current outbreak of COVID-19, I have decided to research and compile a
historical list of well-known pandemics for my portfolio. I will provide information about the
Athenian Plague, Antonine Plague, Bubonic Plague and HIV/AIDS.

The Athenian Plague is one of the few well recorded pre-Christian era outbreaks and took
place in Athens in 430 BCE and overtook the Mediterranean until 426BCE. The outbreak was
extremely destructive, causing the deaths of one-quarter of the population. The plague
caused so many deaths as Athens had locked down, (building walls around the inner-city
and not allowing people in or out of the city-state) in preparation for an attack by The
Peloponnesian League. This meant when the plague arrived by boat, people were in close
quarters and it spread fervently, even killing the democratically elected leader Pericles,
unlike the previously ‘self-employed’ tyrants of Athens like Pisistratus. Greek Historian
Thucydides reports symptoms including ‘violent heats in the head, redness and
inflammation of the eyes’ (History of the Peloponnesian War, 2.49 – 2.50) alongside a
variety of other illnesses.

The Antonine Plague appeared in 165CE, when Rome was at the tip-top of its power and
lasted 15 years. Historians believe it may be linked to the beginning of the collapse of the
Roman Empire. Symptoms of this disease included thirstiness, swollen throat diarrhea and
dark-coloured vomiting among others. Due to the symptoms and using the knowledge from
this-day-and-age, it is believed that it may have been an outbreak of Smallpox.

The Bubonic Plague, or The Black Death, ravaged Europe and Asian in the 1300’s, killing
between 75 and 200 million people. The plague arrived in Europe in 1347, where ships
arrived containing crew members who were covered in sickly grey-coloured boils or dead.
These ships were dubbed ‘death-ships’ and the ill crew and rats aboard with them began
the spread the of the plague. In the next 5 years, around one-third of Europe’s population
was killed; almost 20 million people. The plague gave its victims swellings on the groin or
under the armpits and affected “both men-and-women alike” as Italian poet Giovanni
Boccaccio wrote. Boccaccio also claimed it was spread by “the mere touching of clothes”
and victims may also go to bed healthy one night and be dead by morning.

The HIV/AIDS pandemic began in Democratic Republic of The Congo and peaked from 2005–
2012, killing 36 million-odd people since 1981. There are currently more than 31 million
people living with HIV, mostly in Sub-Saharan Africa, with an average death toll of 770,000
(World Health Organisation). There has been a 33% decrease in mortality rates from 2010,
which is due to developments in technology and medicine, allowing many people to succes-
sfully manage the condition. Sometimes people believe HIV/AIDS is only transmitted by
same-sex men via intercourse but there are a variety of reasons for it. It has killed many
famous people as well, such as singer-songwriters Freddy Mercury and Eric (Easy-E) Wright.
WORD COUNT: 489

Bibliography

Staff of Master of Public Health 2020, Outbreak: 10 of the worst pandemics in history, MPH,
viewed 30th March 2020, https://www.mphonline.org/worst-pandemics-in-history/

Josh Horgan 2019, Antonine Plague, Ancient History Encyclopedia, viewed 30 th March 2020,
https://www.ancient.eu/Antonine_Plague/

Josh Horgan 2016, The Plague At Athens, Ancient History Encyclopedia, viewed 30 th March
2020, https://www.ancient.eu/article/939/the-plague-at-athens-430-427-bce/

History.com Editors 2010, History.com, Black Death, viewed 30 th March 2020,

https://www.history.com/topics/middle-ages/black-death

World Heath Organisation, Global Heath Observatory Data HIV/AIDS, World Health
Organisation, viewed 30th March 2020,
https://www.who.int/gho/hiv/epidemic_status/deaths_text/en/

FOLIO 2

 Using hyphenated words

You are to write 500 words (480 to 550 words) of FICTION or NON-FICTION
demonstrating the use of hyphenated words as shown in McKenzie, pp. 177–180 and in
Canvas material, and demonstrating good style.

This MAY form part of your folio.

Invent your own topic. The form of the writing is up to you. If you think it may not be
suitable for assessment, please check with your teacher.

You need to showcase a range of always-hyphenated words as shown in the McKenzie

text. You also need to show some sometimes-hyphenated words (only hyphenated
because of their grammatical position in the sentence). Please check all of your
hyphenated words in the online dictionary mentioned below (even McKenzie’s) to see if
they are still ‘current’ as always-hyphenated or sometimes-hyphenated words.
Remember that words change over time, so we need to use the latest dictionaries to
check spelling and hyphenation etc.

You need to use The Macquarie English Dictionary online (latest) from the Swinburne
library collection to check whether a word is an always-hyphenated word, i.e. not just
hyphenated because of its attributive position before the noun.

Criteria for allocating marks for this folio:

  Accuracy in grammar, punctuation and clarity of expression (4 marks)
 Appropriate and effective use of relevant elements (hyphenated words) (4 marks) 
NOTE: Highlight sentences that contain hyphenated words (both types: the ones
that are always hyphenated and ones that are only hyphenated because of their
position in the sentence) Use two different highlighters for the different types of
hyphenated words and show clearly which is which: the always-hyphenated words
and the sometimes-hyphenated words because of their position in the sentence.
(For example: green is for sometimes-hyphenated words and yellow is for always-
hyphenated words.)
 Piece must be interesting (non-fiction) or engaging (fiction) (2 marks)

COMMENTS

Editorial Style Sheet Date: 30/5/20

Proofreader: Angus Delaney
Title: ‘A War of Words’ by Gary Tippet, Royal Auto, Noble, Park Victoria,
Australia, 2017, 16-21.
General
Spelling: Australian, The Macquarie Dictionary 7th edn.
Numbers:
 Guideline: One to two in words, numerals should be used from 3+
 Ordinal: One to two in words (e.g. second) and numerals used from 3+
(e.g. 8th)
 Years: written as numerals (e.g. 1916)
 Non-decimal fractions written in words and hyphenated (two-and-a-
half)
 Dates: Day as numeral then month as word then sometimes year as a
word if it has not already been established (e.g. 7 August 1915, 19 July)
 Thousands: Numbers 1000 to 9999 need to appear as numerals with no
commas or spaces after first numeral (e.g. 5533)
 Measurements:
Distance: use numerals with an unabbreviated measurement and space
separating numeral and measurement (40 yards)
  Quotation Marks: use double quotation marks for quotations form
sources (people), single quotation marks are used within double quotation
marks to highlight common phrases or colloquialisms. Pull quotes don’t
use quotation marks and use ‘capitals style.’

 Title: all ‘capitals style’

 Dashes: spaced en dash

 Job titles: use upper-case letters (e.g. Private A.W. Brain)

 Abbreviations:

Uppercase:
Acronyms: No spaces or full stops between letters (e.g. AIF, VCs).
Initials with names: uses full stops between names (e.g. A.W Brain)
however spaces aren’t used in the circumstance where one person has
multiple names or an alias (e.g. ‘HK’ are the initials for Herbert Furguson or
Herbert Kroeger).

A B C D
Adelaide Advertiser
Battalion (10th, 19th etc.) Carol, Trooper Hamlin
AIF
Bell, Private Nugget C Company

Anzacs blue-eyed colouring

Armentieres Brain, Private, A.W.

Australia bulldog-rushed (colloquial)

Australian Bullecourt

Australians

Australianism

E F G H

Egypt First World War Gallipoli HK (Herbert

entreating Flers German Keith/Hebert Kroger)

France Graham, Private T. J

Fritz

Furguson, Herbert-Keith
 I J K L

James, trooper George Horace Light Horse

Love, Major Alan

M N O P

Maitland Daily Mercury navvies Orr, Lance-Corporal W.K. Passchendaele

(newspaper) No-Man’s Land Owen, Wilfred Pozieres

mates

Matthews, Signaller Harley

Mediterranean

Q R S T

Red Cross Smith, Private John Tame, Private Arthur

Rudd, Bill South Australia The Nek

rumination South Australian The Referee

Russel’s Top Sydney (newspaper)

Turks

U V W XYZ

VCs Warnecke, George Zelling, Herbert Kroeger

Villers-Bretonneux West Australian

Western Front

Women’s Weekly (magazine)

Folio 6

Editorial Style Sheet Folio. This is a compulsory folio. MUST form part of your Folio.

Use the ‘A war of words' article in the Syllabus area of Canvas to create an Editorial Style
Sheet that mirrors what you see in the article as it is written. If there are any inconsistencies
of style, note these on the style sheet. Do not include captions of photos or advertising
material or boxed information for your style sheet. See also further ADVICE below in 'Dear
Students' letter.

Criteria for allocating marks for this folio:

Creating an Editorial Style Sheet for the article 'A war of words'
 Top and General sections of the Editorial Style Sheet (5 marks)
 Word list section of the Editorial Style Sheet (5 marks)
 There is no word range or word limit for the style sheet.
  The accuracy of spelling, capitalisation, grammar, punctuation and clarity of
expression, as well as the judging of appropriate and effective selection and use of
relevant style sheet elements, will be judged over both General/Top and Word List
sections.

COMMENTS