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Week 10
Week 10
Week 10
(WEEK 10)
Conciseness
Using active sentences in oral presentation
SEMESTER 2, 2019/2020
In an academic presentation, it is important to ensure that the language used allows audience
greater understanding and involvement with the presentation. Nevertheless, the presenter must
also ensure that the language fits the academic nature of the presentation. This can be
achieved through conciseness and the use of active sentences
In an academic presentation, it is important to ensure that the language used allows audience
greater understanding and involvement with the presentation. Nevertheless, the presenter must
also ensure that the language fits the academic nature of the presentation. This can be
achieved through conciseness and the use of active sentences.
Conciseness
Choosing words that capture the meaning that you want to convey to the audience can be
challenging. In order to make your audience understand your message easily, you have to be
selective on the choice of words in your presentation.
Conciseness allows you to express your message in fewest words possible. Concise words are
brief but comprehensive. They help your audience to understand the information quickly, thus,
enable them to maintain their attention to your presentation.
Example:
Example:
compulsory.
compulsory.
Wordy – Many uneducated citizens who have not attended school continue to
Concise – Many uneducated citizens continue to urge for better school facilities.
Example:
interlocutors to collaborate.
For example:
Auxiliary verb – There are three reasons that cause teenagers to have a sedentary
lifestyle.
For example:
Negative – You are not able to protect the future generation if you do not vaccinate
your children.
Negative – The event becomes uninteresting if famous speakers are not invited.
Activity 1
Example:
Original sentence In the eventuality of a fire, it is imperative that all persons evacuate
:
the building without undue delay.
Revised sentence In case of a fire, it is important that everybody leaves the building
:
at once.
He was really late to his English class due to the fact that he had
Original sentence :
to finish his Science test.
_he was late to the class because he had to finish his science
Revised sentence : test
Example:
Active sentence: We should donate blood because it can save lives of many
Passive sentence: Blood should be donated because it can save lives of many
An active sentence sounds more responsible and credible in the above example as the doer
(We) performed the action (should donate) on an object (blood). As for the example of passive
sentence, it sounds weak, as if you are not taking responsibility for the problem because the
focus is on the object (blood).
An active sentence also creates better emotions as it provides a clearer visual in the mind of the
audience. Using active sentences in presentation also can evoke the audience’s emotion.
Example:
Active sentence: Many volunteers all around the world were helping the tsunami
victims.
Passive sentence: The tsunami victims were being helped by many volunteers
ACTIVE PASSIVE
Simple present Alia reads two articles every Two articles are read by Alia
day. every day.
Simple past Finn submitted the writing The writing assignment was
assignment yesterday. submitted by Finn yesterday.
Present continuous The students are revising their The writing drafts are being
writing drafts. revised by the students.
Past continuous The teacher was giving Feedbacks were being given
feedbacks on her students’ by the teacher on her students’
presentations. presentations.
Future The faculty will offer many Many new programmes will be
new programmes next year. offered by the college next
year.
Present perfect Gary has completed his work. The work has been completed
by Gary.
Past perfect They had won the choral The choral speaking
speaking competition. competition had been won by
them.
Future perfect The manager will have The new programmes will
reviewed the new programmes have been reviewed by the
by the end of this year. manager by the end of this
year.
Modal You must finish the outline by The outline must be finished
tomorrow. by tomorrow.
You should have finished the The report should have been
reports three weeks ago. finished three weeks ago.
Activity 2
2. Several steps have been taken by the employees to correct the errors found in the self-audit
reports.
__the employees take several step to correct the erros found in the self-audit report
3. The participants were greeted by Rita Chong, and the keynote speaker was introduced by
her.
____rita chong greet the participant and she introduce the keynote speaker
5. The current status report has been attached, and I have highlighted the important figures.
__i have highlighted the important figures and also attached the current status report