FEEDBACK MONIKA AND MAEL

** *Price per person. Includes return flight Paris - Nairobi, all the tranferts by a
privat coach and flights from Mount Kenya to Masaï Mara and to Nairobi. Does
not include visas, insurance or private shopping. >>> Good, but please verify your spelling. You can
use the passive voice. “visas, insurance or private shopping (are) not included in the price / package

** The East African country of Kenya is a pearl in sub-Saharan Africa. From Nairobi to majestic
Mount Kenya or to the Masaï Mara wild life, Kenya is a very beautiful country with lots of scenic
features. >> Please check spelling / please use a verb or change the structure the country boasts
spectacular landscapes

** Arival to Nairobi from Paris in the evening, transfert to Eka Hotel. The city is known as the
safari capital of Africa. This cosmopolitan city and enconomic centre of Kenya is the most
vivrant in the East African region. >> please check spelling, is known as called the../ vibrant city /
rewrite your sentence This cosmopolitan city is the economic center of Kenya and the most vibrany
in East Africa

** After breakfast, departure for Hell's Gate, remarkable quarter of the Great Rift Valley.
Spectacular scenery including the towering cliffs, water gouded gorges...Hell's Gate is an ideal
venue for a day trip. Picnic at noon. Diner and night at Naiburta Campsite. >> copied and pasted
from: https://activities.marriott.com/things-to-do/V28Hi3E0g07pL-full-day-tour-to-hell-s-gate-and-
lake-naivasha-from-nairobi
The last two sentence: rewrite them and use link words Have dinner at Naiburta Campsite and stay
there for the rest of evening

** Lake Nakuru is home to the famous pink flamingoes attracted by lake's abudnace of algae. >>
Please improve spelling and punctuation. You’d better make two sentences.

** Other birds can bee seen in the area as do warthogs, baboons and other large animals. >> check
spelling and check your auxilairy verbs and the whole structure

** Diner and night at Lodge. >> a bit odd. Please improve your sentence. At night you can have
diner at the Lodge.

** Masaï Mara is a National reserve bellonging to the Masaï people and it is one of the best known
and the most popular reserves in Africa. You will spend the day observing the BIg Five and visiting
local village. Picnic at noon. Dinner and night in Ashnil Mara Camp. >>> please check spelling and
pay attention to articles and your vocabulary.

** Departure after breakfast from Masaï Mara to Nairobi Wilson. Transfert to Jomo Kemyatta
International Airport. Flight to Paris. >> Please check spelling