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** Johannesburg, Informally known as Jozi, Joburg or "the city of gold", is the largest city in South
Africa and one of the 50 largest urban areas in the world. It is the provincial capital and largest city
of Gauteng, which is the wealthiest province in South Africa. Johannesburg is the seat of the
Constitutional Court. The city is located in the mineral-rich Witwatersrand range of hills and is the
centre of large-scale gold and diamond trade. It was one of the host cities of the official tournament
of the 2010 FIFA World Cup. “Copied and pasted from: wikipedia”
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Johannesburg

** A unique trip, in the heart of the culture, for a total immersion in South Africa >> look for the
right preposition >> at the heart

** 22.05 pm >> please check the use of pm.

** Shuttle pick you up to the hotel The Backpacker’s Ritz and night. >> please change the verb

** Free morning to rest from the flight >> please use another preposition

** Afternoon Market Theatre area accessible from the highway and Mandela Bridge and very fun;
here you will find live music venues and bars too: >> “copied and pasted from:
https://wikitravel.org/en/Johannesburg

** Afternoon Market Theatre area accessible from the highway >> a bit ambiguous, you need to put
a comma.

** Get a panoramic view of the city from the top of Africa's tallest building.>> “copied and pasted
from: https://digimarconafrica.com/johannesburg/

** The South African Museum of Rock Art a museum in Africa for the people of the world. An
excellent multimedia display of the rock art and the origins of humankind. Good curio shop, book
shop and coffee shop. >> “copied and pasted from: https://digimarconafrica.com/johannesburg/

** Johannesburg Art Gallery the biggest gallery on the African continent with a good collection of
local and international work on display >> “copied and pasted from:
https://digimarconafrica.com/johannesburg/

** Evening, go to Pretoria the administrative capital of South Africa by train Sleep >>> improve
punctuation and use prepositions and check vocabulary

** The National Zoo, Aquarium, reptile park and all the larger mammals including koalas. One can
also camp within the zoo on Friday and Saturday nights
The Union Building, The location of the South African presidency.

The building was designed by Sir Herbert Baker in 1908.The Union Building, The location of the
South African presidency. The building was designed by Sir Herbert Baker in 1908. >>> copied and
pasted from: https://www.triposo.com/loc/Pretoria/sightseeing/background

** Voortrekker monument, It is a unique Monument which commemorates the Pioneer history of

Southern Africa and the history of the Afrikaner and is situated in a beautiful setting. The
Monument was inaugurated in 1949. It was designed by architect Gerard Moerdijk. >>> copied and
pasted from: https://lavenderquilting.com/2018/08/23/this-is-south-africa-a-quilters-creation/
https://www.touristlink.com/user/harleysafaris/deals/pretoria-historic-day-tour.html

** Freedom Park, situated on Salvokop, it includes a memorial with a list of the names of those
killed in the South African Wars, WWI, WWII as well during the apartheid era. >>> copied and
pasted from: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Freedom_Park_(South_Africa)

** Hector Pietersen Museum, a large museum two blocks away from where Hector Pieterson was
shot and killed 16 June 1976. The museum is named in his honor, and covers the events of the anti-
apartheid Soweto Uprising, where more than 170 protesting school children were killed.
>>>> copied and pasted from: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hector_Pieterson_Museum
https://virtualglobetrotting.com/map/hector-pieterson-museum/view/google/

** There are personal effects, this is the place where he used to sleep, a very important museum. >>
used other type of punctuation