L4 Writing Workshop 1 PDF

UNIVERSIDAD DE LA SABANA
DEPARTMENT OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES AND CULTURES

LEVEL 4, 2019-2
Name: _____________________________________ Group: _____________ Code: ____________
STORY TELLING COMPOSITION
Objectives: To get familiar with the storytelling composition structure and its components.
To write a story telling composition about other people’s holidays experiences.
Activity 1 (AT HOME)
Watch the CPS video – Week 2 and complete the following mind map
Paragraph 1
A Holiday Story Telling
Composition
Paragraph 2
Paragraph 3
Copyright © 2019. Universidad de La Sabana, Department of Foreign Languages and Cultures. Created by Fernandez, S. (2019) Edited by Suárez, Y. (2019) All Rights
Reserved. No part of this material shall be reproduced, transmitted, distributed or commercially exploited, except with express written permission from the copyright
holders. Enquiries for permission to reproduced all or parts of this material should be directed to fld@unisabana.edu.co
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 After completing the mind map, in the video you will find information about how to write a good topic sentence,
complete the following chart based on the CPS video:
HOW TO WRITE A GOOD TOPIC SENTENCE
State your main idea

clearly
Balance between specific

and general ideas
Hook your reader
Keep it short
Read the following story telling composition; highlight with colors its parts
Have you ever had a terrible experience when travelling? Mary Parker lived an awful situation at a
Paragraph 1
country named Andorra. She was at this place for the first time in her life. It had sounded amazing in
the brochure: “Enjoy seven days in one of the most beautiful and unknown countries in the world
while staying at a luxury hotel” so she decided to get the holiday package right away. However, it
ended up into something very different and unexpected. (80 words)
As soon as she got to the hotel, her nightmare started. Before that, she had been excited about the
Paragraph 2
trip, but when she got there, she was not so sure. She had waited at the reception for fifteen minutes
before someone checked her in. Then, when she got to the room, she noticed it was small and dark,
with a window looking over a car park. She tried to be positive and unpacked her bags, so she
wanted to have a shower before going sightseeing. Nevertheless, the shower was not working, so
she called the hotel reception very upset for all the problems she had had. (106 words)
Although she had tried to have a positive attitude, the plumber arrived an hour later. He hit the pipes
a few times and said ‘Sorry, but I cannot fix it today, maybe tomorrow.’ Then, he held out his hand.
Paragraph 3
He wanted a tip for nothing! She was furious, when suddenly she had a thought. She could solve the
problem by talking to the manager. Finally, she went to the reception desk and explained to the hotel
manager that she had given a very large tip to that man. After all, she moved into room 405, which
was much better and felt happier. Despite the difficulties, Mary had the time of her life in Andorra.
(114 words)
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Paragraph 1 Topic Sentence Yellow

Holiday Context Blue
Closing sentence Brown
Paragraph 2 Opening Sentence Red

Description of the problem Purple
Closing sentence Brown
Paragraph 3 Opening sentence Orange

Description of the solution Green
Concluding sentence Grey
 Research: Look for a blogger (A person who usually writes about his/her experiences in a blog) who focuses on
travelling and find information about a negative travelling experience. These are some websites where you can find
examples to do your research (Please do not use these sources):
 https://www.wheressharon.com/discussion/worst-travelling-experiences/
 https://adventures-in-middle-aged-travel.com/worst-travel-experiences/
Possible References  _________________________________________________________

 _________________________________________________________
 _________________________________________________________
 Read the information provided in your references and make a final decision *(Remember this is the information you
will use to create your composition).
Write below your final reference:
_________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Activity 4 (IN CLASS)
Taking into account the text in activity 2, complete the following outline – (Only sentences):
Paragraph 1
 Have you ever had a terrible experience when travelling?
 Topic Sentence
 Holiday Context  _________________________________________________________________________
 Closing Sentence
 _________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2
 Opening Sentence  _________________________________________________________________________

 Description of the
 _________________________________________________________________________
problem
 Nevertheless, the shower was not working, so she called the hotel reception very
upset for all the problems she had had.
Paragraph 3
 Opening Sentence  _________________________________________________________________________

 She knew that by talking to the manager she could fix the problem.
solution
 Concluding Sentence
 _________________________________________________________________________
Activity 5 (IN CLASS)
Writing my Outline: By using the information about the chosen blogger (Activity 3) create your outline, please bear in
mind the following:
 Do not write complete paragraphs, only sentences.

 Do not use punctuation marks.
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Paragraph 1
 ___________________________________________________________________
 Topic Sentence
 Holiday Context  ___________________________________________________________________
 ___________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2
 Opening Sentence  ___________________________________________________________________

problem  ___________________________________________________________________
 ___________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 3
 Opening Sentence  ___________________________________________________________________

problem  ___________________________________________________________________
 Concluding Sentence
 ___________________________________________________________________
You will listen to your teacher’s feedback in a forum available in Virtual Sabana, so please make sure you listen to it and
take into account his/her comments to make the corresponding corrections:
Formative Feedback:
__________________________________________________________________________________________________
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__________________________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________
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LEVEL 4 2019-02 EXCELLENT SUFFICIENT ACCEPTABLE INSUFICIENT POOR
FIRST DRAFT TASK 0.75 0.6 0.45 0.3 0.15

NAME ____________________________________ GRADE INFO RELEVA. 0.5 0.4 0.3 0.2 0.1
GROUP ____________________________________ COHERENCE 1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
CODE ____________________________________ GRAMMAR 1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
VOCABULARY 1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
Activity 6 (IN CLASS) First Draft. (300 words). 1 HOUR. MECHANICS 0.75 0.6 0.45 0.3 0.15
For this assignment, you will use your corrected version of your outline and write the complete
composition using punctuation marks and connectors.
TITLE: ___________________________________________________ TEACHER´S COMMENTS
PARAGRAPH 1
PARAGRAPH 2
Copyright © 2019. Universidad de La Sabana, Department of Foreign Languages and Cultures. Created by Fernandez, S. (2019) Edited by Suárez, Y. (2019) All Rights Reserved. No part of this material shall be reproduced,
transmitted, distributed or commercially exploited, except with express written permission from the copyright holders. Enquiries for permission to reproduced all or parts of this material should be directed to
fld@unisabana.edu.co
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TEACHER’S COMMENTS
PARAGRAPH 3
Reference:
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _____________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ _____________
Before handing it in make sure:

1. You complied with the word number requirement 300 words.
2. Highlight the sentences using these colors suggested in activity 2.
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 Contrast and Sequence Connectors – Punctuation Marks: Get familiar with the connectors and correct use of the
punctuation marks.
Answer the following questions:
1. What do the red-color circles represent? _________________________________________________

2. What do the blue-color lines represent? __________________________________________________
3. How do you use punctuation marks with these connectors?
__________________________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________
 Let’s check your answers now!
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 Use the contrast connectors from the list above to combine the following groups of ideas. Use correct punctuation.
1. Marjorie is turning fifty this weekend. She says that she feels like a twenty-one year old.
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2. Jimmy and Kevin spend most of their time playing hockey. They are terrible students.
_________________________________________________________________________________
3. My father could drive you. He does not know where he left the car keys.
_________________________________________________________________________________
4. The garden tools should not be left outside. They will rust.
_________________________________________________________________________________
 Complete the following blog entry with the sequencing connectors:
Gina’s Blog
Yesterday, it was my birthday and it did not start well. I went to the park to meet my friends, but they were not there. I
decided to look for them. _______________, I went to the shopping center opposite to the park, but they were not there
either. ________________, so I was very sad. Finally, I decided to go back home and when I got there my friends were
waiting for me with a birthday cake, ice cream, music and games.
CHECK OUT MORE CONNECTORS TO INCREASE YOUR VOCABULARY
CONTRAST SEQUENCING
 In contrast  But  At first  First of all
 Nevertheless  However  Later  Firstly, Secondly
 Nonetheless  Although  Next  Afterwards
 On the contrary  In spite of  Simultaneously  In the end
 Otherwise  On the other hand  Then
 yet
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LEGEND MEANING MISTAKE (examples) CORRECTION (examples)
SS Sentence Structure I want that you open the door (ss) I want you to open the door.
He said me hello. (ss) He said hello to me.
SP Spelling Beatifull (sp) beautiful
^ Missing Word ^ Is important. It is important.
The only ^ was to work. The only important thing was to work.
WP Wrong Pronoun important
María is my sister. He (wp) is 20 years old. María is my sister. She is 20 years old.
SVA Subject Verb He walk (sva) to school everyday. He walks to school every day.
Agreement Colombian people is (sva) nice. Colombian people are nice.
WPR Wrong Preposition In (wpr) the other hand… On the other hand…
He was in (wpr) the beach. He was at the beach.
WC Wrong Connector She is tall. However, (WC) she is intelligent. She is tall and intelligent.
or^C insert
?? Nonsense Idea Comment: The teacher is not able to understand what the student is trying to communicate.
Isolated Idea Mary had an excellent time in NY. //The traffic signals are easy to handle in NY\\. There she Mary had an excellent time in NY. There she visited a lot of tourist places.
//…// visited a lot of tourist places.
VF Verb Form She has been wait (vf) for 2 hours. She has been waiting (vf) for 2 hours.
This is a way to protect herself and to avoid show (vf) what she really feels. This is a way to protect herself and to avoid showing what she really feels.
WV Wrong Verb I have (wv) 20 years old. I am 20 years old.

I like to see (wv) TV. I like to watch TV.
WT Wrong Tense Yesterday I go (wt) to the movies. Yesterday I went to the movies.
In her written journal, she argued that Joe become (wt) ill with cancer. In her written journal, she argued that Joe became ill with cancer.
WO Word Order She has eyes blue. (wo) She has blue eyes.
In the afternoon tomorrow (wo) he will travel to Israel. He will travel to Israel tomorrow afternoon.
XYZ Unnecessary Word His happy birthday is on January 15. His birthday is on January 15.
… when somebody called to Alejandro… … when somebody called Alejandro…
WW Wrong Word The Nile River is the largest (ww) river in the world. The Nile River is the longest in the world.
The city of Bogotá has (ww) the District Capital. The city of Bogotá is the District Capital.
WA Wrong Article The (WA) France is having a rough winter. France is having a rough winter.
Sue had a (WA) excellent final exam. Sue had an excellent final exam.
AF Adjective Form The Eiffel Tower is more tall (AF) than the Taj Mahal The Eiffel Tower is taller than the Taj Mahal
The Nile River is the larger (AF) river in the world. The Nile River is the largest river in the world.
S/P Singular-Plural form My child (p/s) were playing in the street when they saw the accident. My children were playing in the street when they saw the accident.
Rep Repetition Marvel’s new film is very interesting (Rep) because it has an interesting (Rep) starring and a very Marvel’s new film is very interesting because it has a great starring and script.
interesting (Rep) script.
Cap Capitalization Many people visit madrid (Cap) every year. it (Cap) has become the driving force of the(Cap) Many people visit Madrid every year. It has become the driving force of the Spanish
spanish economy nowadays. economy nowadays.
PUN Punctuation Crepes staff are helpful (pun) friendly and polite (pun) Crepes staff are helpful, friendly and polite.
FCG False Cognate Actually (fcg) I am assisting (fcg) English classes. Currently I am attending English classes.
WExp Wrong Expression I could care less (WExp) if you bought a car. I couldn’t care less if you bought a car.
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Criteria EXCELLENT GOOD FAIR NEEDS WORK INSUFFICIENT
Grade: 5.0 Grade: 4.0 Grade: 3.0 Grade: 2.0 Grade: 1.0
TASK FULFILMENT  The three paragraphs contain their  The three paragraphs contain their three  The three paragraphs have some of the  The three paragraphs have a few of the  The three paragraphs do not have the
15% three corresponding elements corresponding elements appropriately. required elements for the task. requirements, or they are not related to required elements; there is not enough
outstandingly.  The last paragraph contains an  The last paragraph has the concluding the topic, and the information provided information to accomplish the task.
A Holiday  The last paragraph contains an appropriate concluding sentence. sentence; however, it is not well which is either unrelated or lacking or  There is evidence of plagiarism in one or
Storytelling outstanding concluding sentence.  Word number is mostly reached. elaborated. there are important sections missing. more paragraphs; therefore, the grade is
Composition  Word number is outstandingly  Word number is fairly reached.  The last paragraph is incomplete or has 0.0.
reached. many inconsistencies
Holiday context  Word number is poorly reached.
Problem
Solution 0.75 0.6 0.45 0.3 0.15
 The text shows relevant and reliable  The text shows evidence of information  The text includes some helpful information  There is no evidence of information  There is no evidence of information
INFORMATION information about the topic. search and information is topic related. about the topic but data is not entirely search, the text shows some vague search.
RELEVANCE  The ideas presented show evidence of  The ideas presented show appropriate reliable. information about the topic.  The text does not evidence reliable
the research done. evidence of the research done.  The ideas presented are somehow  The ideas presented lack relevance and research or preparation.
10%  The information is taken from the  Most of the information included comes relevant but do not show evidence of the there is no research evidence.
reference given in the workshop. from the reference in the workshop research done.
 There is no reference mentioned in the
0.5 0.4 workshop. 0.3 0.2 0.1
 Focuses on clear aspects being  Focuses on clear aspects being narrated  The aspects being narrated are  The aspects being narrated are  The aspects narrated are almost
narrated along the text with along the text with good organization. understandable but not very elaborated or confusing and not well-organized. impossible to understand.
COHERENCE AND outstanding organization.  Some ideas are linked with sequencing organized.  Ideas are poorly linked.  Ideas are not linked.
COHESION  sequencing and contrast cohesive and contrast cohesive devices.  Ideas are linked with a few cohesive devices.
20% devices as recommended in the
workshop.
1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
 There is highly effective use of basic  Expresses ideas with an appropriate  There is misuse of some grammar  There is substantial misuse of complex  The grammar structures used are
GRAMMAR and complex grammar structures. sentence structure. structures, including some basic grammar and basic grammar structures. noticeably incorrect.
20%  Uses past simple and past perfect  Uses past simple and past perfect with mistakes.  The ideas in the paragraphs are not  There are serious and frequent mistakes
outstandingly. minor mistakes.  Some of the past tenses used are done in written with the tenses required for this in sentence structure.
a faulty way. task.
1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
 A wide range of holiday vocabulary  A good range of holiday vocabulary  Holiday vocabulary and collocations are  Vocabulary is repetitive and poorly  Vocabulary is extremely basic, repetitive
VOCABULARY and collocations are used and they and collocations vocabulary are used somehow related to the topic, but they are related to the topic along the text. and/or imprecise.
20% are highly related to the topic. and they are related to the topic. repetitive on occasions.  The vocabulary used is too basic and/or
 The choice of the words seems  Word choice is occasionally used  The paragraphs have some imprecise word imprecise.
accurate, natural and not forced. inaccurately. usage that may distort the text content. 0.4 0.2
1.0 0.8 0.6
MECHANICS  There are minimal or no errors in  There are some errors; however, they do  There are some errors which somehow  There are errors that distract the reader  There are serious errors that interfere with
(Capitalization, spelling, capitalization and punctuation. not interfere with the message. interfere with the message. and interfere with the message. the message.
Spelling,  Paragraphing is skillfully used.  Paragraphing is used but not always  There is very little control of
Punctuation) 0.75 0.6 appropriately. 0.45 organizational features. 0.15
15% 0.3

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UNIVERSIDAD DE LA SABANA

DEPARTMENT OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES AND CULTURES

STORY TELLING COMPOSITION

Activity 1 (AT HOME)

HOW TO WRITE A GOOD TOPIC SENTENCE

State your main idea

Balance between specific

Hook your reader

Activity 2 (AT HOME)

Paragraph 1 Topic Sentence Yellow

Paragraph 2 Opening Sentence Red

Paragraph 3 Opening sentence Orange

Activity 3 (AT HOME)

Possible References  _________________________________________________________

Write below your final reference:

 Opening Sentence  _________________________________________________________________________

 Opening Sentence  _________________________________________________________________________

Activity 5 (IN CLASS)

 Do not write complete paragraphs, only sentences.

 Opening Sentence  ___________________________________________________________________

 Opening Sentence  ___________________________________________________________________

FIRST DRAFT TASK 0.75 0.6 0.45 0.3 0.15

Before handing it in make sure:

Answer the following questions:

1. What do the red-color circles represent? _________________________________________________

 Let’s check your answers now!

 Complete the following blog entry with the sequencing connectors:

CHECK OUT MORE CONNECTORS TO INCREASE YOUR VOCABULARY

 In contrast  But  At first  First of all

 Nevertheless  However  Later  Firstly, Secondly

 Nonetheless  Although  Next  Afterwards

 On the contrary  In spite of  Simultaneously  In the end

 Otherwise  On the other hand  Then

WV Wrong Verb I have (wv) 20 years old. I am 20 years old.

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