Name: Renee
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; ​little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional
explanatory​ sentence is
unrelated​ ​to​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional ​explanatory​ sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; ​elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence​; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
12
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct,​ with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
effectively​ explains​ topic
sentence ​further​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; ​concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing;​ not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal;​ uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; ​clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Jazz
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene​;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; ​additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings​;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
10
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct, with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing​; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal​; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; ​clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Mark
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; ​little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene​;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; ​additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
11
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct,​ with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and ​appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states,​ and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Lisa
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; ​elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; ​with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence;​ elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
12
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct,​ with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing​; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; ​clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Weie
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; ​word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; ​with variable ratios​;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
12
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct,​ with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; ​Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; ​concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Tanujaa
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; ​word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; ​with variable ratios​;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence;​ elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
12
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct,​ with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; ​Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; ​elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: David
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; ​word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; ​with variable ratios​;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
12
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct​, with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal;​ uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Aman
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; ​word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; ​with variable ratios​;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings​;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
12
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct,​ with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing;​ not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal​; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; ​clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Aarnav
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; ​little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; ​elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene​;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; ​additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence​; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
11
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct​, with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states​, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal​; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Amin
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
Elaboration and evaluation is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
incomplete elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence​; elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene​;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
10
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct, with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing​; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; ​clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Thevindu
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; ​little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; ​elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings​;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct​; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence​; elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
11
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct, with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing​; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal​; uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; ​clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback
Name: Warren
Language & Literacy Level 8
Indicators
Text structure: Not all stages or phases are
stages/phases and their included; ​little attention given to
ratios ratios; word count not included
Body paragraph structure Topic sentences ​don’t always
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is
ineffectively described and
appraised​; additional sentence
is ​unrelated​ topic sentence;
elaboration ​only briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
ineffective
Text connectives linking Little used, basic, illogical and
(ideas) sentences and inappropriate to contex
paragraphs
Foregrounding of important Ideas are ineffectively
ideas foregrounded
Level 10
All stages included but phases
sometimes unclear; with
inaccurate ratios; word count
included
Topic sentences ​vaguely
identify fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​partly
described and appraised​;
additional sentence
ineffectively​ explains topic
sentence; ​elaboration ​briefly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is
attempted
Sometimes logical and
appropriate to context but
not strictly intentional
Some demonstration; not strictly
intentional
Level 12
All stages and phases clear and
distinct; with variable ratios;
word count included
Topic sentences identify
fight-or-flight behaviour
according to chapter and scene;
Barbara’s reaction and reason
for this behaviour is ​mostly
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains ​topic
sentence; ​elaboration ​mostly
explains and explores
personal thoughts and feelings;
concluding valuation about
Barbara’s behaviour is ​relevant
Usually logical and intentionally
purposeful
Good intentional and purposeful
demonstration
11
Level 14
All stages and phases clear and
distinct, ​with highly accurate
ratios; word count included
Topic sentences ​accurately
identify a fight-or-flight
behaviour according to chapter
and scene; Barbara’s reaction
and reason for this behaviour is
accurately described and
appraised​; additional sentence
further explains​ topic sentence
effectively​; elaboration
precisely explains and
explores​ personal thoughts and
feelings; concluding valuation
about Barbara’s behaviour is
insightful
Always logical and intentionally
purposeful
Excellent intentional
demonstration for effect
Appraisal (Judgement) of
Barbara’s behaviour and
mental states, and appraisal
of your related personal
thoughts and feelings about
those behaviours/mental
states (Affect)
Judgement:​ to express
judgement of people and their
behaviours/mental states
Affect:​ to express personal
feelings/emotions
Nominal groups describe
things and carry appraisal
Noun + adjectives
Verb groups and
circumstances to describe
and carry appraisal
Verb​ + ​adverbs
Tense movement between
events in the text (present)
and expressing personal
feelings about those events
(past)
Evidence of editing for
improvement after explicit
teaching, self-assessment
and direct teacher feedback
on a draft
Basic appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Basic, unexpanded; minimal
appraisal
Basic action, saying and
sensing verbs; limited adverbs
of place, time, manner and
cause; resulting in minimal
appraisal
Mixed, often incorrect and more
than one type of error
Little to no evidence of editing;
not picking up or correcting
simple errors of punctuation,
spelling, character names, text
title, and writer/illustrator
Some developed appraisal of
Barbara’s behaviour/mental
states, and appraisal of your
related personal feelings and
emotions
Little intentional expansion or
appraisal
Begins to use more nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Sometimes correct; mistakes
made that should be picked up
in self-editing
Some evidence of editing; not
particularly habitual or
intentional effect; simple errors
of punctuation, spelling,
character names, text title, and
writer/illustrator persist
Effective appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Some thoughtful expansion to
create effective appraisal
Intentionally uses nuanced
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning and carry effective
appraisal; ​uses a wider range of
adverbs to explain place, time,
manner and cause
Usually correct, some minor
mistakes with complex tense
changes
Clear evidence of editing;
intentional and for effect; clear
implementation of teacher
written feedback
Nuanced appraisal of Barbara’s
behaviour/mental states, and
appraisal of your related
personal feelings and emotions
Carefully and intentionally
expanded, highly descriptive,
resulting in nuanced appraisal
Always intentionally makes
delicate, nuanced choices of
action, saying and sensing
verbs to express shades of
meaning in order to carry
sophisticated appraisal; uses an
extensive range of adverbs to
explain place, time, manner and
cause
Precise
Clear evidence of editing; very
clearly intentional and for effect;
actively seeks clarification about
teacher written feedback