Exercise 13.

1 Wordiness

Each of these paragraphs or sentences contains far too

many words. Edit them so that they use fewer words but
still retain the same information and meaning.

1. Thorough knowledge of the academic regulations and

policies of the University and its academic divisions is
essential for all students. Each student is expected to
become familiar with the University of Westmedia
undergraduate catalog and to consult with the academic
advisers provided by the student's division.

2. She donated $25,000 of her own money to the cause.

3. The company makes labels for a wide variety of

products found in retail stores and outlets.

4. Revenue reductions for the state will amount to $500

million if the programs are eliminated.

5. People in Asian countries have been eating jellyfish

as a delicacy for hundreds of years.
 

6. As you carefully read what you have written to improve

your wording and catch small errors of spelling,
punctuation, and so on, the thing to do before you do
anything else is to try to see where sequences of
subjects and verbs could replace the same ideas expressed
in nouns rather than verbs.

7. The committee made the decision to wait until they had

more information that would help them in making a final
determination.

8. They entered into an agreement to take all the

necessary steps to complete the task in a timely manner.