Completed Career Essay Rough

draft
by Andrea Richardson

Submission date: 28-Sep-2020 11:22AM (UTC-0500)

Submission ID: 1399390207
File name: Completed_career_essay_rough_draft.pdf (89.98K)
Word count: 631
Character count: 3331
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Completed Career Essay Rough draft
ORIGINALITY REPORT

13 %
SIMILARITY INDEX
13%
INTERNET SOURCES
3%
PUBLICATIONS
12%
STUDENT PAPERS

PRIMARY SOURCES

1
Submitted to Wynne High School
Student Paper 6%
2
agxw.prolocosansalvo.it
Internet Source 3%
3
www.healthpro-heritage.com
Internet Source 3%
4
ztrassa.ru
Internet Source 1%

Exclude quotes Off Exclude matches Off

Exclude bibliography Off
Completed Career Essay Rough draft
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

/100 Instructor

PAGE 1

QM PFI3
Please follow instructions.
Additional Comment

From the assignment page: “You must use two or three of the following sources for your paper [see
list on assignment paqge], and the sources must be documented through correctly formatted MLA
parenthetical citations and works cited entries.”

QM PFI3
Please follow instructions.
Additional Comment

From the assignment page: “You must use two or three of the following sources for your paper [see
list on assignment paqge], and the sources must be documented through correctly formatted MLA
parenthetical citations and works cited entries.”

QM file format unacceptable

Do not submit your file as a .pdf, .html, or .txt file. Submit a .doc, .docx, or .rtf file.

QM no wc
no works cited

QM file name
Please use the assigned naming format when you save your file.

QM Review Word Count

Your word count:

Minimum required: 850

Maximum: 1200

Additional Comment

604
QM spacing
You must double space your papers. Make sure that your spacing is set in the format that was
assigned in class so that extra space is not inserted between paragraphs.

QM Length c
This paper does not come close to meeting the minimum length requirement of the assignment.

QM head
improper heading format--See the "How to Set Up a Word Document in MLA Format" handout in the
Instructions with Screen Shots folder in the Information area of Blackboard.

QM PFI3
Please follow instructions.
Additional Comment

This assignment is an academic essay. You MUST write in third person. Eliminate all forms of “I,”
“we,” and “you” from your essay.

QM 3
Your title needs to reflect the main idea of your thesis more directly.

Comment 1
You must follow the instructions on the yellow cards.

QM no pc
no parenthetical citations
Additional Comment

If you do not document the sources of your information, you are plagiarizing.

QM focus
You have drifted away from the assigned focus.

QM thesis in
inadequate thesis
Additional Comment

logic

QM ts
The topic sentence is either missing or unsuitable.
Additional Comment

You must follow the instructions on the Blue Card for Body Paragraph 1.
 QM 28+
improper quote introduction format--See the "Quotations and Paraphrases" handout, which is in the
Research folder in the Information & Books area of the Blackboard class.
Additional Comment

Check all of your introductions to quotations to make sure you use complete sentences (independent
clauses) and colons as required.

QM 26
Improper quoting form
Additional Comment

Check to make sure that all of your quotations are formatted as assigned.

QM not cited in paper

You cannot include references on your works cited page that are not cited in the paper.

Comment 2
You must follow the instructions on the Blue Card for Body Paragraph 1.

QM ts
The topic sentence is either missing or unsuitable.
Additional Comment

You must follow the instructions on the Blue Card for Body Paragraph 2.

QM not cited in paper

You cannot include references on your works cited page that are not cited in the paper.

QM focus
You have drifted away from the assigned focus.
Additional Comment

You must follow the instructions on the Blue Card for Body Paragraph 1.

QM plag
plagiarized

PAGE 2

QM marg
Use 1-inch margins on all sides.

QM ts
The topic sentence is either missing or unsuitable.
Additional Comment
 You must follow the instructions on the Blue Card for Body Paragraph 3.

Comment 3
You MUST eliminate the plagiarism in your paper.

QM no pc
no parenthetical citations

Comment 4
You must follow the instructions on the Blue Card for Body Paragraph 3.

Comment 5
I have not marked grammar and sentence structure errors. Make sure to eliminate the errors listed
below: (Look for other errors as well; all errors count against you in the final draft.

QM sv5
subject-verb agreement, Section S-5, Subject-Verb Agreement, pp. 273-276 and Grammar Unit III on
Blackboard

QM ss5
faulty sentence structure (rephrase & Section S-1, Elements of a Sentence, pp. 252-255)

QM frag5
fragment, Section S-2, Fragments, pp. 256-257 and Grammar Unit III on Blackboard

QM fused5
fused sentence, Section S-3, Comma Splices, Fused Sentences, pp. 258-259 and Grammar Unit III
on Blackboard

QM cs5
comma splice, Section S-3, Comma Splices, Fused Sentences, pp. 258-259 and Grammar Unit III
on Blackboard