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Writer:__Jenna_Arthur______________________ Peer
editor:________Sydney_Pulido__________________

Visual Rhetorical Analysis Project Peer Editing Form

Main page/presentation statement

Does the presentation statement contain a paragraph introducing the website?

Yes
Does the presentation statement contain a link to the original source for the project?
Yes
Does the presentation statement contain a paragraph that discusses the creator’s research
process and include a list of sources (works cited)?
Yes
Does the presentation statement contain a paragraph discussing the creator’s individual creative
process?
Yes
Does the presentation statement contain a conclusion paragraph? Is it written in third person?
I do not see one
Check for and mark any grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors you can find.
I don’t see any
Has the creator avoided second person in all these paragraphs?
Yes
Does this page (on the website) contain interesting visual elements?
Only a link to a video
Has the creator followed the directions on the white cards and the green cards?
No conclusion paragraph

Introduction page

Does this page include the introduction to the visual rhetorical analysis? Is the thesis at the end
of that paragraph?
Yes
Does the thesis follow the assigned format?
Yes
Has the creator followed the directions on the yellow cards?
Yes
Has the creator avoided first and second person in the paragraph?
Yes
Check for and mark any grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors you can find.
I didn’t see any
Does this page (on the website) contain interesting visual elements?
Yes
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Subsequent pages/sections based on body paragraphs--body paragraph 1

Does this section focus on a main idea from the thesis?

Yes
Does the paragraph begin with a topic sentence that contains one of the main ideas and that
reflects the focus of the thesis?
Yes
Does this section (on the website) contain a combination of narrative and digital content,
including images, sound, and/or video?
Video and pictures
Does this section contain a sophisticated discussion of how the selected element functions in the
visual/aural text?
Yes
Has the creator followed the directions on the blue cards?
Yes
Has the creator avoided first and second person in the paragraph?
Yes
Check for and mark any grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors you can find.
I did not see any

Subsequent pages/sections based on body paragraphs--body paragraph 2

Does this section focus on a main idea from the thesis?

Yes
Does the paragraph begin with a topic sentence that contains one of the main ideas and that
reflects the focus of the thesis?
Yes
Does this section (on the website) contain a combination of narrative and digital content,
including images, sound, and/or video?
Just 1 image of the video
Does this section contain a sophisticated discussion of how the selected element functions in the
visual/aural text?
Yes
Has the creator followed the directions on the blue cards?
Yes
Has the creator avoided first and second person in the paragraph?
Yes
Check for and mark any grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors you can find.
I did not see any
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Subsequent pages/sections based on body paragraphs--body paragraph 3

Does this section focus on a main idea from the thesis?

Yes
Does the paragraph begin with a topic sentence that contains one of the main ideas and that
reflects the focus of the thesis?
Yes
Does this section (on the website) contain a combination of narrative and digital content,
including images, sound, and/or video?
There are a couple of images on the page
Does this section contain a sophisticated discussion of how the selected element functions in the
visual/aural text?
Yes
Has the creator followed the directions on the blue cards?
Yes
Has the creator avoided first and second person in the paragraph?
Yes
Check for and mark any grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors you can find.
I did not see any errors

Subsequent pages/sections based on body paragraphs--body paragraph 4

Does this section focus on a main idea from the thesis?

Yes
Does the paragraph begin with a topic sentence that contains one of the main ideas and that
reflects the focus of the thesis?
Yes
Does this section (on the website) contain a combination of narrative and digital content,
including images, sound, and/or video?
There are multiple photos on the page
Does this section contain a sophisticated discussion of how the selected element functions in the
visual/aural text?
Yes
Has the creator followed the directions on the blue cards?
Yes
Has the creator avoided first and second person in the paragraph?
Yes
Check for and mark any grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors you can find.
I do not see any errors
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Overall

Is the project well organized?

Yes
Are all sources cited with parenthetical citations?
Yes
Does each parenthetical citation match the first word(s) in a works cited entry from the list on
the presentation statement page?
Does the presentation match the assignment?
Yes
Is the presentation creative?
Not much color added to the presentation; maybe add brighter colors or decorations
What do you like about the presentation?
I like how it is organized
How can the presentation be improved?
Separate the work cited entries in the presentation statement and add conclusion
Make a note about every grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure error you can find in the
presentation.
She is very good at not showing grammatical errors
Double check to make sure that none of the writing contains any form of “you.”
I do not see second person
Make sure that the conclusion (from the presentation page) and all the subsequent pages contain
no first-person pronouns.
I do not see a conclusion