Reviewer: Jaylyn Thrower

Reviewed: Victoria Tristan

Criterion Undocument Minimal 1 Basic 2 Proficient  Advanced  Comments
ed 0 Unacceptabl Acceptable 3 4
Unacceptable e Acceptabl Acceptable
e
Idea Development The The Statement Using Using 4- Tristan
statement statement logically generally sound did a great
does not expresses develops sound assumptio job
address the author’s the author’s assumptio ns and
the author’s views about views about ns and arguments,
developin
views about the the arguments the g her main
the purposes purposes of purposes of , based on statement points
of education, education, education, practical logically regarding
guiding guiding guiding experience develops the pillars
educational educational educational , the the of life that
principles, principles, principles, statement author’s make for a
understandin understandi understandi logically views
meaningfu
g of learning, ng of ng of develops about the
and/or the learning, learning, the purposes
l teaching
most and/or the and/or the author’s of philosoph
appropriate most most views education, y.
strategies for appropriate appropriate about the guiding
teaching. The strategies strategies purposes educationa
statement is for teaching, for of l principles,
incoherent or but is teaching. education, understand
extremely ambiguous However, guiding ing of
brief or or not the educationa learning,
contains connected. statement l and/or the
major logical is not principles, most
inconsistenci always understan appropriat
es. consistent ding of e
and/or learning, strategies
convincing. and/or the for
most teaching.
appropriat The
e statement
strategies includes
for sound
teaching. ethical or
psychologi
cal
arguments
and not
just
practical
ones.
Illustrative Exa No Supporting Examples in Supporting Specific 4- Not
mples illustrative examples support of examples examples only did
examples are points are from the from the Tristan
are inadequate relevant but writer’s writer’s
included. or of unclear general or experience personal
talk about
relevance. not based are experience her own
inexperienc specific , academic experience
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Reviewed: Victoria Tristan
e. and work, or helping
pertinent. field children
experience and how
illustrate
points in a
while in
vivid or the
memorable military,
way. but she
listed
ways
educators
could
apply the
pillars
explained
in her
philosoph
y to their
every day
lives such
as health:
eating
well,
resting;
providersh
ip- seeing
to it that
the
classroom
envrionme
nt is safe
and
welcoming
. She gave
examples
for each
pillar.
Quality of The The The The In addition 4- Overall,
Writing statement is statement, statement statement to being the writing
very though is is clear, clear, well is very
difficult to comprehens understand well organized,
read ible, has able plus organized, free from
well
because of obvious two of the free from errors of organized
its style, problems in following: errors of mechanics with
usage, two of the 1) organize mechanics and usage, descriptive
mechanics, following d, and usage, and details and
or areas: style, 2) free from and written in clear
organizatio usage, and errors of written in an explanatio
n. mechanics, mechanic an appropriat
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Reviewed: Victoria Tristan
or s and appropriat e academic ns that ties
organization usage, e style, the back to
. 3) in an academic statement: what she
appropria style. 1) has a
te single,
believes.
academic unifying
style. theme
and
2) is
strongly
suggestiv
e of the
writer’s
voice.
Tristan,
I enjoyed reading your philosophy and getting to
Additional
Comments know you through your own mini story of how you Total: 12/12
wanted to become an educator. I think your thoughts
were very well put together. Great job!!
Reviewee: Victoria Tristan Date: 10/12/20

Evaluator: Jaylyn Thrower Date: 10/12/20