Self-Review Commentary

Name(s): Ahmad Hasbul Hadi Bin Azahar

Class: A20G
Owner of the Commentary: Muhammad Syazwan Bin Mohd Faizal

Identify and fill in the items below

No. Items Yes/No.

Sentence(s) from the commentary.

1. Is there a selected IA prompt? Please state. Yes (How does the way we organize
or classify knowledge affect what we
know)

2. Is there any unpacking/discussion of the IA Yes (Questions about the importance

prompt? Is the unpacking/discussion
relevant to the context of the object?
of arranging the knowledge in words
or any platform that we want to
share. Nobody is perfect enough to
be an expert on every knowledge in
this world. Everyone will always
make the wrong idea about
knowledge and sometimes can lead
to a different perspective about the
knowledge). The unpacking is
relevant to the context of the object.

Suggestion(s) for improvement Maybe can rephrase the sentence to

make it shorter and more accurate
thus give the opportunity to explain
more about other points in
commentary

3. What is the IA prompt The commentary explores about the

questioning/challenging? What aspect of
knowledge does it explore?
perspective of certain society
towards knowledge under the theme
of knowledge and knower. (The
theory knowledge theme, which is
Knowledge and Knower explains
how the knower perspective
individually about the knowledge
when the interpretation is not
organized enough)

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4. Is there an object? Is it a generic object or
have a specific real-world context?
5. The link between the object and IA prompt
is clearly explained and justified
Suggestion(s) for improvement
6. Strong justification on the choice of object
and effectively link to the IA prompt
Suggestion(s) for improvement
7. The justification is done within the context
of the core theme, or one of the optional
theme
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Good and precise word
Yes. The object is a compilation of
screenshot of twitter thread post
from the official twitter account of
Dr. Mahathir Mohamad, ex-prime
minister of Malaysia thus it is
considered as a spesific real-world
context
Yes there is a link and justified but it
is not really clear
Make it more clear by focusing on
the amount of sentence explaining
about the connection between the
IA and the object rather than
explaining the object itself.
Strong justification since the student
focusing on explaining on the
perspective between only two
groups of people which are the
muslims and the non-muslims and
how they receive information
differently.
Maybe can use more precise word
such
Yes. It is within the context of the
core theme since it is about the
difference between how different
community of knower have different
understanding about some
information in this commentary it is
about does Muslim really have the
right to kill the French.
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8. All points are well supported by evidence
9. Use of relevant core concepts and
effectively discuss the link between the
object and IA prompt
Suggestion(s) for improvement
10. Concise wording technique is applied in
the writing
11. TOK concepts and tools used are explained
implicitly in the writing
12. Summarize and very briefly synthesize
what the object have shown is the answer
(or are the answers) to the IA prompt
question.
13. Use the object to comment on the Prompt
question and to talk about how Theory of
Knowledge manifests in the world around
us.
Marks: 7/10
Overall Comment: The commentary is well written and easy to understand. Concise word must be used
to explain in more detailed way and can use to strengthen the points used in the commentary. The
object is well chosen and have a strong connection with the IA prompt.
Well justified with the core theme
Yes but some of the points need
stronger evidence to prove it.
The usage of core concepts such as
Perspective and Interpretation is
effectively used.
Can add some few more concepts
and could be elaborated more to
make this commentary more info
and close to the TOK approach.
Good wording technique because I
can well understand about the
message of this commentary try to
deliver.
The cognitive tools (reason) is
explained implicitly in the
commentary
Yes (As a result, organizing or
classifying knowledge can affect the
way we know from interpretation and
perspectives)
Probably since I cannot find the
literal connection on the
commentary but in this commentary
it really prove that the object
represents the real world situation
and have relations to the question
prompt.