Essay Revision Reflection

Conference with Professor

Date: Dec 12, 2019

What major revisions did the instructor recommend?

1.Thesis Statement

2.More focusing on simile by removing metaphor

3.More focusing on Shakespeare

Revision Reflection

How did you address the instructor’s feedback for the items you listed above? What changes did
you make to improve your essay? Do you think those changes were successful? (Write a
paragraph of approximately 7-10 sentences addressing these questions).

First of all, I strengthened the thesis statement as solid. I tried to state my thesis clearly based on
my supporting evidence. Second, I removed the comparision of simile with metaphor. The
instructor recommaned to be more foucsed on simile, not on metaphor which is not my main
literary device to discuss. Lastly, rather than writing broadly about simile, I decided to focuse on
how Shakesqeare used simile. By chagning what the intructor addressed, I think that my writing
is improved than the last one. I feel very successful with my revison writing. Thank you for your
advises.