Lucas Funaro

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A comment or
How this
Text from my initial WP question I
The change(s) I made to what I initially change
submission: (Note received (from
wrote: impacts my
which WP) whom/where?
paper:
)
This can be
characterized
WP2: As a result, the Allison: The as surface
genre of tweet included punctuation As a result, the genre of tweet included concern
in my translation can be should be in my translation can be described as change, with
described as inside the “conversational/colloquial Twitter no big impact
“conversational/colloqui quotation threads.” on text except
al Twitter threads”. marks for
punctuation
rules.
This change
In the process of considering the
WP2: I counted with makes the
Allison: possible genres, it was useful to revisit
Melzer’s explanation flow of the
Remember to Melzer’s text about discourse
that “Genres arise out of text much
integrate the communities, especially where the
social purposes, and better and
quotes into the author explains how “genres arise out of
they’re a form of social gave a more
grammar of social purposes, and they’re a form of
action within discourse natural
your sentence social action within discourse
communities.” feeling to the
communities.”
sentence.
Starting the
sentence with
a capitalized
Allison: is this letter makes
WP2: “(...).” meaning
a new sentence “(…).” Melzer’s words were very the reader
that, when looking for
or part of the helpful since, take a break
different tweets,
previous one? in between
sentences.
Gives better
flow.
WP2: “(…).” meaning Me: sounds “(…).” Melzer’s words were very This
that, when looking for repetitive and helpful since, when looking for different transition
different tweets, I looked could flow tweets, I was able to focus on the social from the
at the social interaction better interaction between users and what the quotation to
between users and what common purpose of the interaction was. the analysis
the common purpose of sounds
the interaction was. completer
and more
natural than
 the original
one
Inserting an
Another key component of Twitter text example of
is the use of emojis which is normally Twitter post
WP2: Another key
used to emphasize what was written or with emojis
component of Twitter Allison: could
to express the author’s emotions. The helped me to
text is the use of emojis include an
famous female rapper Saweetie posted support my
which is normally used example of
on her Twitter a great example of how original
to emphasize what was Twitter post
emojis are used to emphasize emotions: argument
written or to express the with emojis
“I’m at the dentist 🥺🥺😓😓😓😓😩😩 stated in the
author’s emotions.
😩😭😭😭😭😫😫 🤯🤯😫stressed
😫 out pray 4 beginning of
me 😥😥.” the
paragraph.
I thought it
was
important to
Me: include a The use of such expressive figures is further
reflection after widespread on Twitter and is capable analyze the
WP2: *no reflection nor the example to of adding some level of drama into the example to
example” reiterate the tweets, helping the author to transmit reinforce the
importance of their feelings more effectively to the idea that
emojis. public. emojis are an
effective way
of expressing
emotion.
WP1: Just like most
I believe that
biological articles, the
making this
argumentation heavily
sentence the
relies on the rigorous Feedback from
beginning of
application of the peer: Third
a new
scientific method as a paragraph is
paragraph
guiding principle for not too long and
*became the beginning of the fourth made the
only demonstrating have enough
paragraph* previous one
logical construction of topics to be
less
cause-and-effect broken into
exhaustive to
relationships, but also for other
read and
collecting, analyzing, paragraph(s).
ideas seem
and understanding the
more
experimental data in an
complete.
organized manner.
WP1: One example of Allison: One example of that can be seen on This change
that can be seen in examples of “Table 4”, where the raw data for the provides
“Table 4” (Weg-Remers evidence? (and PCR test results were included and more
552) where the results of change style of followed by the author’s explanation, evidence to
the PCR test were citation) stating that the “PCR analysis of the what is being
 included allowing the discussed in
polymorphic XbaI site showed that both
reader to directly see the the
variants with and without the restriction
data from where the paragraph,
site are present at the C4A and C4B loci
authors made their strengthening
of the GRC (Table 4).”
conclusions from. my argument
I decided to
change the
focus of the
original
sentence
from the
actual table to
the
Me: explain explanation
This demonstrates a common practice in
how this that the
the academic biology community in
example is author
WP1 *no reflection nor which, even though it is necessary to
relevant for the included in
evidence* include the direct results from
original the text,
experiments, some level of clarification
argument being which I
is always expected.
made. believe to be
more relevant
when
analyzing
writing
characteristic
s of each
discourse
community.
WP1: One example Allison: Fix On page 48 is possible to see an The phrasing
where we can see how the citation example of the use of primary, of the
the authors used primary style and qualitative sources (in this case an sentence got,
sources to construct their remember to interview) to construct an argument: the in my
argument is where they integrate authors state that “Celita Antunes opinion,
state that “Celita quotes into the discourse below reflects a perspective clearer and
Antunes discourse below sentence. held by most participants in the rituals more concise.
reflects a perspective that affirms the authenticity of Unnecessary
held by most participants Me: the ayahuasca as a source of the ancestral information
in the rituals that affirms original knowledge about tradition and culture was also
the authenticity of sentence (...)” followed by an excerpt from an removed (like
ayahuasca as a source of wasn’t clear, interview with Celita. the second
the ancestral knowledge and the second quotation.
about tradition and quotation was
culture (...).” (Langdon a bit confusing.
48) then including an
excerpt from an
interview with Celita
 followed by “Like
Celita, many speak about
the neglect of Guarani
tradition or ‘culture’
(...)” (Langdon 48)
which can also be
interpreted as an appeal
to the public.
WP1: It is important to It is important to remember that
note that both articles another less obvious difference, but still I reworded
have different Roommate: significant, between both articles has to the new
contributions to the this could be do with the contribution of each paper to paragraph to
collective body of another the collective body of knowledge of make it
knowledge. While the paragraph their respective disciplines, which is still clearer that
biology article makes since it feels directly related to their mechanisms of its ideas
use of its arguments and like it is argumentation as previously discussed. (about
evidence to support a randomly While the biology article makes use of contribution
new discovery on the placed at the its arguments and evidence to support a to the body of
frequency and end of new discovery on the frequency and knowledge)
distribution of genes in paragraph 6. distribution of genes in Amerindian are related to
Amerindian populations, You could populations, the anthropological article the
the anthropological express your uses its arguments to support a new mechanisms
article uses its arguments idea in a point of view on contemporary of
to support a new point of clearer way. shamanisms. argumentatio
view on contemporary n in each text.
shamanisms.
When
formatting
the Twitter
thread, I was
able to insert
WP2: The user who Me: edit the
The user who started the thread, Ethan, usernames
started the thread was names of the
was created… (Ethan),
created… thread.
which makes
the tweets
more realistic
and easier to
follow.
This is a
minor
WP2: This meant that I
change, but it
had to take into Allison: slang This meant that I had to take into
was
consideration how is not consideration how current the slang
significant
current the slangs pluralized were…
for me
were…
personally
because I
 always
thought that
slang could
be pluralized
and made this
mistake
several times.
WP1: Anthropology as a Me: “aspect”
discipline studies various should be
Anthropology as a discipline studies
aspect of human plural, but the
various features of human societies
societies including their word could be
including their culture, organization,
culture, organization, changed since
history, and development.
history, and is repetitive in
development. the paragraph.
The changes
Me: the
were too big
organization of
I changed the placement of one sentence to copy the
the conclusion
and made it part of the second sentence full text into
was not
of the conclusion paragraph. I added the revision
homogeneous
WP1: Conclusion “With regard to argumentation matrix, but
in the sense
strategies” as a way of transitioning they made the
that the ideas
between ideas. I changed the placement paragraph
didn’t flow
of other sentences as well. more
well with one
homogeneous
another.
.