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College Application Narrative Final Draft
College Application Narrative Final Draft
College Application Narrative Final Draft
Evan Stewart
Mrs. Cramer
18 September 2020
no return. At this point, I would need to have a spinal fusion. In a way, I was ecstatic to hear this
news. I was absolutely drained from wearing the same constrictive back brace day in and day out
for the last two years. In time, I realized the process of going through this surgery would be
grueling and would physically handicap me for the rest of my life. Despite this, I had no worries.
As the days drew nearer to my surgery date, my nerves did not grow. I felt like losing
mobility would have no impact on my life. I wasn’t athletic, and I had no interest in participating
in any sports. I vividly remember the day of my surgery, sitting in a vacant room in the hospital,
changing into my light blue hospital gown. The nurses soon came, and I was wheeled away on a
stretcher to be sedated. The last thing I remember was the freezing anesthetic being pumped in
my hand before I was put to sleep for the next five hours. When I woke up, I was three inches
taller and wired to seemingly thousands of tubes. For the next four days, I was stuck in the same
room, waiting to go home as I recovered from the surgery. While the pain was intense, especially
the first time I sat up, it did not phase me. I was glad to finally be relieved of the long-term pain
What I didn’t realize at the time was that something I had been looking forward to for the
last two years had been taken away from me – marching band. While not the most physical of
activities, my newly rearranged body needed time to recover. Instead of being able to march my
instrument of choice – trumpet, I was forced to be in the front ensemble. Unlike the last two
years, where I had been helping the high school band with props, I felt no excitement when I
arrived at the annual two-week band camp. Instead of being a part of the section I had grown to
love throughout middle school, I would be pressing buttons on an iPad. This greatly infringed on
Luckily, I was to be fully cleared for all physical activity by the next season. Once I
realized this, I was determined to keep pushing myself through the grueling summer. After
talking to my band director, I was given permission to play trumpet in the stands, and in the
much less physically demanding parades. I finally felt like I was able to be a part of the group I
always wanted to be. Not only did my abilities on my instrument improve greatly, but so did my
social anxiety. I began to feel more comfortable talking to people, and I finally began to feel
socially welcomed. The following year, I was on the lead part for our show, and I continued to
involve myself in any way I possibly could with my high school’s music program, taking every
possible opportunity to improve myself. This drive also translated to my academics, where I
began to excel.
I used my newfound skills to my advantage and applied for Brass Captain my senior year.
While I was writing my application essay, I was asked to reflect on my past experiences. This
perseverance. This perseverance allowed me to blossom from being socially awkward and
“playing” an iPad to becoming Brass Captain and socially confident. This shaped me into the
person I am today.