1.

Subtitle shouldn’t be in bulk

2. Dedication:

a. Grammatical mistakes: 

“A second father for me” should be “second father to me”

“My all brothers” should be “all my brothers”

b. Punctuation: “… parents, whose love …” should be “… parents whose love”

3. Abstract:

a. Grammar: “the needs…. In learning English” >> “the needs… to learn”

b. Style: “to improve the teaching/learning of English for Specific Purposes at this

department” >> “to improve the teaching/learning experience in this department”

c. Content: it was stated in the title that this is an investigation of the students’ needs

for a designed ESP lesson model; however, in the abstract it was stated that a

lesson model is going to be proposed (this needs further analysis of the research

aims)

not getting directly into the research aim, it’s true that the movement of the

abstract include an introduction yet this introduction is too general, I think it could

have been handled better, for example: “this research is driven by the need to find

insights about the state of the English language in the economics department case

of second -year students of Management Science at L’Arbi Ben M’hidi

University” though I find it unnecessary because it’s mentioned in the title.

d. Redundancy: “The data obtained were analysed in terms of frequencies and

percentages. The analysis of data has revealed…” >> should’ve directly said “ the

analysis of data has revealed…”

“Based on the findings of this research, this study indicates that an ESP course,
 which takes into consideration the students’ needs should be developed …” >>

“after the analysis, it is found that an ESP course should be designed to fit

students’ needs.”

e. Keywords: target situation analysis wasn’t really mentioned in the abstract

(methodology needs to be checked)

4. Statement of the problem should’ve been background of the study which is mentioned in

the first paragraph and it’s too short for such a research.

a. Semantic problems “what is language and how to be learnt” it should instead be

replaced with “ what language is and how it is learnt”

b. Citations are wrong “communicative competence notion: Hymes 1972” it would

be better if she said: as Hymes (1972) put it in his communicative competence

notion.

5. Second paragraph is the statement of the problem.

a. Gram “was put” instead of “put” ; “in the hands of ESP teachers” instead of

“between hands of ESP teachers”

b. Punctuation and style: “no operative syllabus put into use between hands of ESP

teachers that made teaching process problematic and with no significant progress

in learners’ outcomes.” Should be: “no operative syllabus was put in the hands of

ESP teachers in order to be used as a guide. This resulted in problems which lead

to leaners showing no significant progress.” And I think that this is a claim that

should be supported with evidence.

6. Content
 a. This claim, mentioned in the statement of the problem subsection, is ,according to

the research title, the endeavor of the research i.e. this what this investigation is

trying to prove. (More analysis of the methodology section needed).

b. “There are no institutionally produced materials designed for ESP courses.” She’s

mentioning designed materials as a problem

c. “Suggest a blueprint model for ESP teachers to rely on when designing further

lessons that meet their students’ needs.” This is the aim of the study and not the

research problem, and this aim is inconsistent with the title

7. Aim of the study:

a. Re-mentioning the aim again which is designing a lesson model through

conducting a needs analysis which is not consistent with the title

8. Research questions are well stated

9. Research methodology:

a. Using a questionnaire isn’t really appropriate in this situation. As I remember

needs analysis is based on learners’ lacks, needs and wants; while the last two can

be somewhat apparent to the learners, they are almost always unaware of their

lacks. Thus, the questionnaire doesn’t go hand in hand with the research aims (but

it is suitable for the title)

10. There is no research hypothesis, and I couldn’t really suggest one because the title and

the research method and aim isn’t compatible

11. Page numeration was on top while it’s supposed to be on the bottom of the page

12. While in the methodology there is no inferential statistics, only descriptive statistics

13.

14.
The present study aims at identifying the needs of second-year students of Management Science

to learn English with the intention to improve the teaching/learning of English for Specific

Purposes at this department, and by extension the other departments all over Algeria through

proposing a lesson model for the targeted sample.