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Task 1.7 Da Chua
Task 1.7 Da Chua
The bar chart gives information about the number of people imprisoned in five different nations
from 1930 to 1980.=> Em có thể tham khảo thêm cách diễn đạt sau em nhé: The bar chart
illustrates how many people were imprisoned in five different countries over a period of 50
years.
It is clear that the quantities of individuals who were imprisoned in the US and Canada were
higher than other countries. Additionally, while the numbers of prisoners in the UK and the US
all increased, there were decreases in the figures for Australia, New Zealand and Canada.
In 1930, the number of detainees in Canada was highest, at exactly 120 thousands, while the
quantities for the US and New Zealand were slight lower=> SLIGHTLY LOWER, at 100
thousands. MEANWHILE, there were approximately 70 thousand people imprisoned in
Australia. At the same time, only around 30 thousand citizens in England were imprisoned.
In 1980, the number of inmates in the US sharply went up to less than 140 thousands and
became the highest figure in the chart. LIKEWISE, there was a significant increase to about 82
thousands prisoners in the UK. In contrast, the quantity of detainees in Australia gradually went
down to just over 50 thousands. Meanwhile, the figures for prisoners in New Zealand and
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Grade
- Introduction: Đã paraphrase được câu hỏi của đề bài nhưng chưa được
tốt cho lắm
- Overview: đã nêu được 2 đặc điểm nổi bật của biểu đồ nhưng còn khá
vụng, các đặc điểm được nêu chính xác
- Body:
+ Đã nêu số liệu cụ thể của các đặc điểm, các số được nêu chính xác
Vocabulary 6.5 - Từ khóa trong bài được paraphrase khá đa dạng phong phú.
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