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Joshua Toyer - This I Believe Statement Peer Edit 2021
Joshua Toyer - This I Believe Statement Peer Edit 2021
Your responsibility as Editor is to read and respond to your Partner’s Paper. Please use the
scale of 1 (worst) through 5 (best) to identify quality of writing. Also, please make comments to
provide writer with a valid edit for their use in a strong revision. Do your best! Please type in a
red or blue font for your person.
Writer: Use as your guide in writing Editor: Use for comments on edit
Introduction: Is it engaging? 4
Suggestion: The intro is good, but I would
highly recommend some imagery here so that
we get a better picture. You have about 90
more words to work with, so try to put some
imagery in if you can.
Interest: Does the piece keep you interested, 4
even if you do not agree with the writer? Cite Example of Where: After the introduction
gets done. Again, I took points off for lacking
imagery, but if you can put that in, it will not
be an issue.
Editors Only:
Favorite Part: What is yours? Summarize: My favorite part has to be at the end, where you
describe how working hard has impacted people. I always love to see how others influence
others, and I feel that you described that quite well at the end of your essay.
What are two things overall you thought this writer did well:
(1) Good job tying your stories into your personal beliefs.
(2) Your diction and grammar are very good. I barely had to correct grammar mistakes, so
thank you for that.
(2) I would double space the essay. There are also minor formatting errors, but it is
nothing too major.