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Paper 1 Reflection
Paper 1 Reflection
Emily Millsaps
Mrs. Litle
ENG121001
28 February 2021
Paper 1 Reflection
1. I think I did a good job describing my dad and where he came from. I also think I did a
good job describing his personality and how it made him so important. I am proud I was
able to put that in my paper, so people got a general feel of who he was.
2. A major issue that I saw you pointed out was that my statements were unclear, and I’m
not surprised a bit. When I try to collect my thoughts to put them on paper my mind is all
over the place and its hard for me to focus on one specific part of my paper, so I end up
forgetting to add important information in. I think I could work on this by working little
by little on my future papers so that I do not get confused and mixed up in the process of
writing.
3. I think if I did not have as many distractions and my mind would slow down a bit that I
would have done much better on my paper. Also, if I would have slowed down and went
over it a few times I may have been able to catch my mistakes. I will make sure for future
1. I rushed my paragraphs and split one topic into two. They might be problematic because
whoever is reading my paper may get confused from my jumping back and forth. I think I
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could have avoided that problem by listing what I wanted to talk about before I wrote the
2. Describing how my dad was significant was another problem I had. I know he was
significant but bringing the words from my head to paper seem to be where I struggle. If I
really put thought into how I was going to word it, it might have come out better in the
end.
3. My introduction needed to be more developed. I think the introduction is the hardest part
of the paper for me. That and the thesis statement. I think maybe if I asked for help more
1. I used a semi colon (connects two sentences) for my title when I should have just used a
colon. Rewritten the correct way it would be Darrell: Small Town Appalachian Man.
2. Sentence Fragment- the expression of a full thought is lacking because the subject or verb
is missing. Eight pounds two ounces and a full head of hair was my original sentence. I
should have said something like Darrell was born at eight pounds two ounces and had a
3. Comma Splice- Joining two complete sentences with a comma without an appropriate
word joining them. He was the greatest man Ive ever known, he was my dad was the
sentence I had with a comma splice. I think the fixed version of this sentence would be as
follows. He was the greatest man Ive ever known; he was my dad.
4. I used the word you a few times throughout my paper. The ways I could have changed
the sentences without the use of the word you are below.
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North Carolina. It is a small town in Western North Carolina, so small you can
North Carolina. It is a small town in Western North Carolina, so small its barely
seen on a map.
Using you- My question to you is are you willing to risk anything to help
someone whether you know them or not, to be the kind of person that not many
want to be?
Correction- My questions to everyone would be, are you willing to risk anything
to help someone whether you know them or not, to be the kind of person that not