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stood as Washington’s secretary of state. Benjamin Banneker, a scholar, and son to former
slaves, boldly wrote to Jefferson. In his letter to Thomas Jefferson in 1791, Benjamin Banneker
attempts to persuade him to reconnect with his previous belief of the injustice of slavery.
Banneker uses the idea of hypocrisy, pathos, and God-like diction to convey the unconstitutional
aspect of slavery.
Banneker employs the idea of hypocrisy to remind Jefferson of his former anti-slavery
morals. He argues that after revolting from British rule they were “so fully convinced of the
benevolence of the Father of mankind and of his equal and impartial distribution of those rights
and privileges” (32) however, the country is now to “be found guilty of that most criminal act”
(39). Banneker is implying that as one of this nation’s founders, Jefferson is liable for these
wrongful actions towards slavery. Banneker is comparing the United States government
(Jefferson) to the British rule and slavery to the colonies. Banneker is, therefore, conveying that
he believes slavery is wrong and everyone should be free. In addition to this, Banneker reminds
Jefferson that after winning independence, there “was a time in which [he] clearly saw into the
injustice of a state of slavery” (15). It is highly noticeable that Banneker is accusing Jefferson of
being a hypocrite. Jefferson undoubtedly believed that slavery was discriminatory, most
specifically when writing “that all men are created equal” (Declaration of Independence). This
document, in which this nation was founded upon, shows evident deception. Therefore,
Banneker implicates that Jefferson is acting as a hypocrite when writing of that equality, then
acting on a contrasting viewpoint. It also conveys Banneker’s beliefs that slavery should be
sympathize with the slaves. Banneker asks Jefferson to recall “the variety of dangers to which
[he was] exposed; reflect on that time in which every human aid appeared unavailable” (5). This
request made to Jefferson develops a humanizing of the slaves and proves their right to live like
everyone else. This example was meant to spark a relatable aspect for Jefferson when connecting
slavery to the lack of representation the colonies had not long ago under British rule. Banneker
uses this example to emotionally link Jefferson to the slaves and express that this lack of hope is
what the slaves constantly feel. Also, Banneker encourages Jefferson to “put [his soul] in their
souls” so his heart “will be enlarged with kindness and benevolence toward them” (49) when
alluding to the Bible. This is intended to give Jefferson empathy and build perspective towards
the slaves. In can be inferred that Banneker believes that if people look through the eyes of the
slaves they can ultimately become more involved in lifting the slaves from their captivity. Due to
that fact that Jefferson is a highly esteemed figure in America he can assist in bringing that
about.
Additionally, Banneker includes justified, biblical diction to argue that slavery is unjust
and unchristian. As Banneker discusses to Jefferson why he helps abolish slavery he explains the
“blessing of Heaven” that Jefferson has “mercifully received” (13). This aids to disclose
Banneker’s feelings that slavery is unholy in the sight of God. In using this biblical diction,
Banneker hopes to show Jefferson, a religious man, that God gave him mercy so he should do
the same to the slaves. Furthermore, Banneker questions how Jefferson fully believed in “the
benevolence of the Father of mankind” and his “equal and impartial distribution[s]” (32) to all
people. Banneker uses this diction and example to demonstrate that Jefferson is not only a
hypocrite but is also untrue to his religious beliefs. Knowing of Jefferson’s religious beliefs and
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the strength of his point, Banneker repeatedly uses the God-like diction throughout his argument
to constantly remind Jefferson of this assertion. Besides being an argument against Jefferson, this
diction also acknowledges that Banneker believes that slavery is against God as well.
Overall, Banneker’s usage of rhetorical strategies, hypocrisy, pathos, and biblical diction
to craft an argument against Jefferson and beliefs. Banneker hopes to push Jefferson back into
the anti-slavery viewpoint he once had. This also elicits Banneker’s hate and disapproval of
Original Essay
Hailey Ryan
AP Lang / p.2
Ms. McKiddy
28 September
Banneker Essay
In his letter to Thomas Jefferson in 1791, son of former slaves, Benjamin Bannekar
attempts to persuade him to reconnect with his previous belief of the injustice of slavery.
Banneker uses rhetorical appeals logos and pathos to convey the unconstitutional and inhumane
truth of slavery.
Benneker relies on logos to show Jefferson why slavery should be abolished. He argues
that after revolting from British rule they were “so fully convinced of the benevolence of the
father of mankind and of his equal and impartial distribution of those rights and privileges.” (32)
However, the country is now to “be found guilty of that most criminal act.” (39) Banneker is
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using this hypocritism to show they are acting in a similar manner to that of the British tyrant.
Banneker attempts to persuade Jefferson that he is portraying the same cruelty he fled from
before. In addition to this Benneker alludes to the BIble when stating that “ Job proposed to his
friends, ‘put your souls in their souls instead’ thus shall your heaths be enlarged with kindness
and benevolence towards them.”(48) This statement compares to the popular saying “put
yourself in their shoes” and that if Jefferson and many others will look through the slaves’
perspective he will be able to so clearly see the horrid condition they are oppressed to live
through. All in all, Banneker utilizes these logical examples to convince Jefferson.
Benneker additionally relies on the rhetorical appeal, pathos, to get his point across. He
makes a connection to JEfferson and the slaves when reminding Jefferson to remember “the
variety of dangers to which you were exposed” and to “reflect on that time in which every
human aid appeared unavailable” (4) Benneker’s purpose is to allow Jefferson to remember the
injustice he once felt and cause him to lift the slaves from this same feeling. Banneker also
Rhetorical apparel logos and pathos aid to push Jefferson back into the anti-slavery
Revision Analysis
In my revision, I dramatically altered the essay, basically rewriting the entire thing. My
foundation and arguments were weak so I decided to use the idea of hypocrisy, pathos, and
diction instead of logos and pathos to strengthen my understanding of the passage. I also
lengthened the essay quite a bit because it barely filled one page. I also used an elevated
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vocabulary in order to avoid repetition and tried using more elaborate writing to avoid a cookie
cutter essay structure. I added more advanced analysis and often connected it back to the main
idea and thesis. I also tried to avoid lengthy quotes to insert more of my own words and less of a
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