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Lockie Leonard Human Torpedo
Lockie Leonard Human Torpedo
This resource assists teachers to target specific writing areas, linked to the progressions,
to help students improve their writing. The resource is designed for teachers to select the
appropriate activity for their class. For example, in the post reading activities, the teacher
would choose either the comprehension or the 3 Level Reading Guides (Here, Hidden,
Head). In the same way, select the relevant language focus task the class.
Resource outline
The following table outlines the activities in the resource with a brief description and
purpose for the activity.
Activity Description
GrA6
Sentence level
Non-finite clauses
GrA7
Participles are non-finite
Sentence level
clauses. They can also be an
crafts both compact and lengthy sentences with challenging
embedded or interrupting
structures, such as embedded/relative clauses, non-finite clause.
clauses, interrupting clauses, nominalisations, passive voice
Relative clauses
makes more sophisticated connections between ideas by
Also known as adjectival
creating complex sentence
clauses – several models are
shown from this text
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Progression identifiers and Syllabus Outcomes Links to sentence models
beginnings
Syllabus Outcomes
Variety of clause
En4-3B – uses and describes language forms, features and structures – the appositive,
and contexts
analyse and examine how effective authors control and use sentence models. The use of
interpret and analyse language choices, including sentence developing this increasing
patterns, dialogue, imagery and other language features, in sophistication.
short stories, literary essays and plays
foreground what is at the heart of subject English’ and ‘make explicit what is important to
teach and learn’. They have been designed to assist teachers to develop students’
understandings of ‘the conceptual basis of the subject’, to chart the development of
students’ understandings of important textual concepts and processes, and to differentiate
their teaching to address students’ varying levels of attainment.
Curriculum Review, page 72
He played his Van Halen tapes and stood in front of the mirror with his tennis
racquet, giving it vibrato and thrash chords and feedback to forget his troubles.
“You’re lucky you only got a disgusting one’” said Segeant Leonard coming in,
buttoning his uniform.
Lockie rolled his eyes, trying to look cool about it, but inside he wished he could
borrow a nappy from Blob.
Lockie and Phillip and Mrs Leonard walked up the hill towards school, taking turns
to push Blob in the stroller.
He took the drop loose-kneed and casual, taking out a wide, leaning, bottom turn
before hammering back up at the lip.
The wave walled up and the other kid streaked away out in front, hooting and
cutting up Lockie’s wave. Lockie dropped into a crouch, held an edge and came
powering down the line, getting speed from each hit at the wave’s lip.
He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and
better and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
As well as wetting the bed, Phillip snored and smacked his lips like he was at a
barbeque.
They got on with their breakfast as the pale grey sunlight bent in through the
window.
As he swung off the top again, he saw the big, hairy kid dropping in from the
shoulder.
When you’re twelve and three quarters and a new kid, everyone seems a bit on the
mega side.
He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and
better and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
“It’s longer than a book,” said Phillip who was lucky enough to be just Phillip
Leonard.
He really hammered that old Slazenger like it was connected to a million watts of
distortion.
Mrs Leonard put the Weetbix packet in front of the boys and hoisted the baby on
her hip.
Lockie weaved into the beach and climbed up onto the sand the moment the other
kid’s board drifted in alone.
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The sky was grey but the rain held off while they trudged.
They got on with their breakfast as the pale grey sunlight bent in through the
window. Frogs garped away in the swamp outside.
Parallel structures
Just walking down the corridors, just signing his own stupid name for the little old
Lockie’s little brother looked at him, pegging off his nose with his fingers. His baby
sister squirmed on the front seat. His dad left the motor running. His mum just
started bawling.
He didn’t have a beer gut, he didn’t beat people up, and he even went to church.
Delayed adjectives
He was a small kid, soft looking and sensitive.
Compound
The baby was called Barbara, but Lockie called her blob.
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Town ___________________________________________________
Raining ___________________________________________________
Awful ___________________________________________________
house ___________________________________________________
Crummy ___________________________________________________
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Resources:
The following research papers outline the effectiveness of this strategy (and others) on
reading comprehension. The third link provides examples of how to implement this
strategy
https://eric.ed.gov/?id=ED269743
https://ies.ed.gov/ncee/wwc/Docs/PracticeGuide/wwc_secondary_writing_110116.pdf
https://literacyprofessionaldevelopment.weebly.com/story-impressions.html
6. What can we infer about how Lockie is feeling from this passage:
Lockie rolled his eyes, trying to look cool about it, but inside he wished he could
borrow a nappy from Blob.
The sky was grey but the rain held off while they trudged.
What is implied about the journey experienced by Phillip. Lockie and his mum?
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3 level reading guide
Read the text and then look at the following statements. Respond to the statements in
each section. Tick if you agree, cross if you disagree. Discuss your responses with others.
Be prepared to share your responses.
Does the text say this? What words support your answer?
Does the text give you this idea? What words and phrases support your answer?
7. ☐ Being new in a town has similar challenges to someone who knows everyone.
3. Complete the sentence with an -ing phrase and then compare with the author
5. Imitate
If students do not know these concepts, use the slide deck below to explicitly teach the
concept with modelled, guided, independent activities.
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Activities
1. Find 3 examples of the participle phrase in chapter 1. There are at least 8!
a. Lockie’s little brother looked at him, pegging off his nose with his fingers.
b. He played his Van Halen tapes and stood in front of the mirror with his tennis
racquet, giving it vibrato and thrash chords and feedback to forget his troubles.
c. “You’re lucky you only got a disgusting one’” said Segeant Leonard coming in,
Discus how the participle phrase enhances the visual image of the sentence.
3. Complete the sentence with a participle phrase. When completed, share with
others in your class
c. The wave walled up and the other kid streaked away out in front,
___________________________
a. Lockie’s little brother looked at him, pegging off his nose with his fingers.
b. Lockie rolled his eyes, trying to look cool about it, but inside he wished he could
5. Imitate the model sentence and then share with the class
Models:
a. Lockie’s little brother looked at him, pegging off his nose with his fingers.
b. He played his Van Halen tapes and stood in front of the mirror with his tennis
racquet, giving it vibrato and thrash chords and feedback to forget his troubles.
c. “You’re lucky you only got a disgusting one’” said Segeant Leonard coming in,
buttoning his uniform.
d. Lockie rolled his eyes, trying to look cool about it, but inside he wished he could
borrow a nappy from Blob.
e. Lockie and Phillip and Mrs Leonard walked up the hill towards school, taking turns
to push Blob in the stroller.
g. The wave walled up and the other kid streaked away out in front, hooting and
cutting up Lockie’s wave. Lockie dropped into a crouch, held an edge and came
powering down the line, getting speed from each hit at the wave’s lip.
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Language focus: Appositives
These exercises are based on chapter 1 of Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets,
however they can be applied to any text.
Each of these activities provides an authentic opportunity for students to focus on the craft
of writing they have been learning. The variation in activities are provided as stimulus for
you to think about when writing your own activities. These are provided to demonstrate
how to explicitly and regular address these concepts with authentic texts.
Locate 2 examples of the appositive phrase in the chapter. There are at least three.
Or
He shared it with Phillip, his brother, who was ten and always wet the bed, and
some people would blame the bed wetting for the terrible pong, but the truth is, it
was always there.
He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and
better and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
Model:
He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and
better and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
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Language focus: Adjectivals
An adjectival clause works like a multiword adjective. It describes whatever is to the left of
it, usually a noun. Adjective clauses are usually introduced by relative pronouns such as
The following simple activities demonstrate how to embed this into your daily teaching.
1. Locate
2. Underline
3. Rearrange/Unscramble
4. Imitate
Adjectivals
He shared it with Phillip, his brother, who was ten and always wet the bed, and
some people would blame the bed wetting for the terrible pong, but the truth is, it
was always there.
He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and
better and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
“It’s longer than a book,” said Phillip who was lucky enough to be just Phillip
Leonard.
Find ONE example of the adjectival clause in chapter 1. There are at least 3!
a. He shared it with Phillip, his brother, who was ten and always wet the bed, and
some people would blame the bed wetting for the terrible pong, but the truth is, it
was always there.
b. He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and
better and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
c. “It’s longer than a book,” said Phillip who was lucky enough to be just Phillip
Leonard.
Discuss how the adjectival clauses enhance the visual image of the sentence.
3. Imitate
Imitate the model sentence. When finished, share your imitation with the class
Model:
He dreamt be was back in the city, in Perth, where everything seemed bigger and better
and warmer and full of friends and good memories.
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Language focus: Subordinating
conjunctions
The following are simple activities that can be used to regularly embed a focus on
language in the classroom. The activities are:
1. Unscramble
2. Rearrange
3. Locate in the text
4. Imitate
The general 'rule' is that if a sentence begins with a subordinating conjunction, it will likely
have a comma to offset it from the main sentence. If the subordinating conjunction occurs
in the middle of the sentence, generally it does not have a comma.
We are learning the 'rules' so later we can break them like an artist does!
When he eventually got up, he helped Phillip get out of his piddly PJs and went for
breakfast.
As well as wetting the bed, Phillip snored and smacked his lips like he was at a
barbeque.
They got on with their breakfast as the pale grey sunlight bent in through the
window.
As he swung off the top again, he saw the big, hairy kid dropping in from the
shoulder.
Example 1
When he eventually got up, he helped Phillip get out of his piddly PJs and went for
breakfast.
As well as wetting the bed, Phillip snored and smacked his lips like he was at a
barbeque.
They got on with their breakfast as the pale grey sunlight bent in through the
window.
As he swung off the top again, he saw the big, hairy kid dropping in from the
shoulder.
4. Imitate one of the model sentences with a sentence of your own. When finished,
share your imitation with the class.
Models:
As he swung off the top again, he saw the big, hairy kid dropping in from the
shoulder.
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Let’s write
Write about a character’s first day in a new school/town
Success Criteria
Use this rubric to self-assess your piece of writing. I will check and validate your
assessment.
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