To begin with, the topic of my essay revolves around the relevance of

adolescents’ gender identity in EFL learning. One of the strong points is the topic per

se, which is quite popular and controversial nowadays since gender identity is

beginning to occupy an important place within education. Another strong point has to

do with the subtopics and the way they are presented in each body paragraph. Also,

the text is written without many grammar or punctuation mistakes. However, some of

the weak points have to do with the organization of ideas. I was not able to organize

them neatly and effectively so that all sentences could be related to each other. I

believe cohesion is one of the weakest points of the essay. After the necessary

corrections and constructive feedback, I will definitely continue working on this issue.