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Name Luu Hai Yen
Student Numbers:
3914562
Class Code S52104D
FOOD AND SCIENCE

  People have known how to make fires and explore new things since

prehistoric times. Along with scientific advancements, the way people eat and

drink is evolving and innovating. Everyone wants to live a healthy life and have

nutritious meals. So humans learned about how science could improve the

nutritional quality of their meals. This essay will demonstrate two advantages of

science in food.

The first, one of the most current research on food science is genetically

modified food. These are foods produced and harvested from genetically modified

plants and animals, commonly known as GM foods or biotech foods. Scientists

have added a variety of compounds to the seeds, such as vitamins and minerals,

to increase the nutritional worth of the product. It will provide a rich nutritional value

to individuals who consume them. Genetically modified foods are popular not just

for nutritional worth, but also because it provides customers with a variety of tasty

fruits with new and more appealing flavors. Chili pepper can be hotter or sweeter,

It offering various benefits to people, more convenient for eating.

Secondly, scientists have shown that this method can solve various farming

problems. GM foods are resistant to illnesses and pests. Instead of vaccines,

genetic modification, as well as a vaccine for animals and plants, is encoded into

the genetic structure. Moreover, genetic modification helps plants in adapting to

local climate and soil conditions, thus resolving agricultural issues. This creates

the conditions for mass production products in agriculture. It also reduces shipping

expenses as well as the number of chemicals required for plant growth. Moreover,
It can help to lower the expense of agricultural chemicals while also reducing the

chemicals released into the environment. Besides that, if production costs are low,

farms, processing facilities, and food retail outlets will earn more. Similarly, low

production costs will result in lower selling prices in supermarkets. Consumers can

save money while also not having to worry about product quality.

To conclude, food science has brought many positives to people's lives. Every

day, people's quality of life tends to improve, and their life expectancy rises. Many

people have begun to use scientific foods to meet their nutritional needs. Food

science products will be extensively accepted in everyone's meals in the future.

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