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Submitted review on: 7/12/2021 9:14:53 AM Topic of essay: Case Study
Reviewed by: Emily S Where are you in the writing process: I think I'm on track but ready for
feedback
Review priorities: Thesis, Organization and paragraph development,
Sentence construction, Sentence variety and clarity
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1) Thesis Statement: Clear and focused thesis
Thesis statement target feedback:
N/A
2) Developing Ideas: Welldeveloped and logical ideas
Developing ideas target feedback:
Your ideas are fairly welldeveloped in most of your paragraphs. However, your "possible recommendations" sections for both case studies would benefit
from some additional detail and information. Your first one especially needs more attention because you don't propose multiple solutions.
Developing ideas resources:
Good resource on how to develop ideas
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3) Essay Structure: Organization and paragraphing
Essay structure target feedback:
Very clear structure.
Essay structure resources:
Good resource on how to structure an essay
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4) Research/Citation: Proper use of sources
Research/Citation target feedback:
Citations looked good!
Research/Citation help resources:
Good website with information on how to do a litany of citation styles
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5) Grammar/Mechanics: Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation
Grammar/Mechanics target feedback:
Your grammar was pretty good! I would definitely go back and look at it with an eye for grammar, but I didn't notice a lot of particularly egregious grammatical
errors. I will note that your sentence structure is somewhat repetitive, though. You follow the same basic subject + verb style for most of your assignment.
Consider adding in some different sentence styles tto mix things up.
Grammar/Mechanics help resources:
Grammarly will find and correct major grammatical mistakes for you
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Suggested revisions:
I would suggest taking some time to really beef up your two "possible recommendations" sections. I think that apart from the recommendations, your paper
looks very good!