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Name: Nguyen Pham Thien An number:
L9941892
24thFebuary
S52012A Ciara
Class: Teachers: Date: ,2021
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Name : Nguyen pham
thien an
Student Number :
L9941892
Class Code : S52012A

Nutrient ingredients and preservation technologies

In recent years, scientist's research contributed to the development of society.

There are several positive effects that science brings to food. Food technology can

be apply to create high-quality products to improve human life. Moreover, people

can have a good healthy life with a well-balanced diet. Food technology is one of

the greatest inventions that food science has created successfully with the large

consumption and preservation technologies that can keep food for a long time.

Firstly, science on food is helping the economy’s social development by adding

plenty of nutrients and appeal to food. According to science, the human body can

imbibe nutrients that have a good influence on their routine life, people will

increase their energy level and improve human health. One of the particular

examples is the smoothie beverages made with nutrient-rich seeds. These seeds

to create delicious smoothie drinks include vitamin that help people have smooth

skin, hair and fiber that is good for the digestive system. Furthermore, scientists

produce artificial food colouring to make palatable food with various colours and

many savoury flavours of food that make the eaters feel hungry and buy these

products for the first time. Obviously, tasty cakes that add several colours and

sugary ingredients will attract customer's eyes. For these reasons, the evolution of

science on food will leads to the expansion of the food processing industry with
technical analyses in the future.

Secondly, food can keep fresh for a long time due to created preservation

technologies. Many years ago, people put food, such as vegetables or cooked

food outside the air environment for three to five days with peculiar phenomenons,

such as mildew and stale of food due to microorganism and bacteria invasion in

food. To deal with these situations, scientists created preservation technologies,

such as canned food and the freezing method. Moreover, it is easy to find canned

food in the market and supermarket. Additionally, many household families can

warm food and use time effectively. While the freezing method used to keep food

fresh for a long time to prevent bacteria, people can be apply it in real life as sell

frozen fruit in the supermarket and the buyer can mix milk with fruit to create a

smoothie with full nutrition

In conclusion, today is different from the past days that thanks to the intervention

of science, there are many useful methods to preserve food as well as without

losing nutrient and the contributions of science to research about food science that

create food with beautiful colours and nutrients that help human have a good life

and healthy diet

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