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Email Assignment COMM
Email Assignment COMM
Email Assignment
To: c_matthews97877@fanshaweonline.ca
Cyan,
I get that you may have been "sick" but not attending our group meeting about our project was very
selfish. Not everything is about you, especially when my grade is at stake here. Get it together and stop
making up excuses for not doing your share of the work!!! Or at lest send over the work you have done!
THANKS
Laura
Weaknesses:
The subject line comes off a little unclear because it doesn’t explain what the email is about
There is unneeded space between all the paragraphs in the email
There is a tremendous amount of anger used in the text
The overall tone of the text is very aggressive and emotional
The goodwill closing is not present
The use of capitalization is not necessary in the closing
Good copy:
To: c_matthews97877@fanshaweonline.ca
Cyan,
I understand that you haven’t been feeling well, however we still have a project due. If you would be
able to send over the work you have completed because it does affect all of our grades. Hope you feel
better!
Thank you,
Laura