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National Council of Teachers of English - A Scale For Evaluation of High School Student Essays
National Council of Teachers of English - A Scale For Evaluation of High School Student Essays
TRIP Committee:
W.T. Fagan, Chairman
University of Alberta, Edmonton
Charles R. Cooper
State University of New York
at Buffalo
Julie M. Jensen
The University of Texas at Austin
'
elk Bernard O'Donnell
Director, ERIC/RCS
ry\ Roy C O'Donnell
The University of Georgia
Liaison to NCTE Committee
on Research
Description of Instrument:
The scale was developed from a random sample of 561 essays from a
arrange the six essays in the order established for the scale.
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Section I: BACKGROUNDS 5
BACKGROUNDS
The material presented here is the result of a study begun in 1957 of
the writing ability of California high school seniors. It is 'part of a larger
project of the State Articulation Conference Joint Subcommittee on
Composition, which includes in its scope the task of defining acceptable
standards of student composition at several academic levels. It is the
responsibility of the Joint Subcommittee, through the exchange of infor-
mation and ideas, to encourage and facilitate the establishment of com-
parable and clearly defined standards of achievement and competence in
English composition throughout the public educational institutions of
ti'e state.
The practical objective of this study has been to develop a scale,
based upon clearly defined criteria of good 'writing, which can be of
value to the high school English teacher. And since the development of
proper habits of expression in writing should be the concern of every
school official and teacher, it is hoped that this scale will find general
acceptance and use. It should be made clear, however, that the Joint
Subcommittee does not consider itself authorized to compete with or to
operate iM conflict with the duly established agencies for determining
policies or requirements. Nor is the scale presented here to be construed
as anything more than a sincere attempt to describe and define the levels
of proficiency in student writing evaluated on the basis of established
criteria and developed into a scale of graded essays.
The committee responsible for this work consisted of Dr. N. Field
Winn, Chico State College, chairman; Mr. Pat Nail, Woodside High
School; Mr. Rodney Fitch, Coalinga Junior College; Mr. Phil S. Grant,
University of California; and Mr. John Halverson, also of the University.
This study group was appointed in 1956 by the Articulation Conference
Joint Subcommittee on English Composition, of which Dean Hector Lee
of Chico State College was chairman.
Successful completion of the project was made possiVe by the steady
encouragement, guidance, and specific aid in many whys given by the
officers of the Joint Sui..zornmittee: Dr. Grace Bird, Associate Director
of the Office of Relations with Schools for the University of California;
'.,efessor James Lynch of the Department of English, University of Cali-
fornia at Berkeley, and secretary of the Joint Subcommittee; Mr. Alfred
Livingston, then Director of Coalinga Junior College and vice-chairman of
the Jo:r.t Sub, ninittee; and Dean Lee, chairritItt.
PROCEDURES
During the spring of 1957 the Subcommittee on Composition, working
under the direction of the State Articulation Conference, invited every
California public high school teacher of senior classes in English to
participate in a study of competence in student composition.' instruc-
tions to teachers stipulated that expository essays be written in the class-
room without aids in response to any of ten questions carefully chosen to
allow expression of a wide variety of interests. The Subcommittee felt
that expository writing best illustrated the practical problems of composi-
tion. Employing their usual standards, teachers were then to select and
send to the Subcommittee a "best," a "most dearly average," and a
"worst" paper for every one hundred or fraction of one hundred seniors
given thf, assignment.
in response to this request the Subcommittee received 1788 essays
representing 207 schools, or about 39 per cent of the public high schools
in the state. Contributing schools were of all sizes and were widely
distributed geographically. Of course it is impossible to determine how
many papers the high school teachers read in their efforts to select appro-
priate samples, but obviously the essays received by the Subcommittee
represent only a very small portion of tilos,. initially screened at the high
school level.
With very limited funds available, the Subcommittee found it impossible
to examine in detail every one of the 1788 essays submitted and therefore
employed a statistically valid technique of random sampling in deter
mining which papers should receive detailed consideration'
In preparation for tte work o1 the Subcommittee, ten experienced
readers at the University of California, using standard criteria, read and
screened 561 essaysalmost one-third of those submittedand placed
them in groups representing eight levels of competence. The number of
"best," "average," and "worst" papers read was approximately proportion-
ate to the number submitted in each category. It should be noted, how-
ever, that despite instructions to participating te:chers, the Subcommittee
received relatively few "worst" papers. Af.er the papers had been read
and graded from one to eight, the readers selected examples which they
believed typical of each of the eight levels. Eventually a group of thirty-
seven essays was selected to illustrate variations in quality.
'Contlauation schools, adult schools, evening schools, and certain other schools were not
Included in the study.'
'Dr. David D. Blackwell, Professor of Statistic* at the University of California, advised the
Subcommittee on statistical procedures,
8 PROCEDURES
FINDINGS
As indicated in the discussion of procedures which resulted in the
essay scale, the chief work of the Subcommittee was the intensive scrutiny
of a small number of carefully selected samples of student composition.
Such an endeavor obviously does not invite statistical analysis. The Sub-
committee recognizes that qualitative evaluations differ somewhat from
one teacher to another, and that the size and quality of the class determine
to a large extent the meaning of "best," "average," and "worst." Never-
theless, since the total number of papers placed in appropriate levels of
competence was rather extensive, some tentative but significant con-
clusions can be drawn concerning the writing ability of seniors in
California high schools.
The chart below shows how the 561 essays selected by random sam-
pling and considered by the Subcommittee are distributed over the present
six-point scale.
Teacher Evaluations
"Best" "Average' "Worst"
1 6 0 0
2 35 2 0
Scale 3 134 79 1
4 33 83 14
5 16 53 10
6
Total 228
4 21
238
-- 70
95'
The reader is reminded that although there must be a "worst" raper In ever.? set of compost.
tions submitted, teachers did not Identify "best," "average,' and worst essays In equal
proportions.
Relatively few essays have been placed at the top because the sampling
simply, did not reveal many high quality papers. The first essay in the
final six-point scale does not make exaggerated demands for precision.
It would seem, therefore, that the top level on the scale is a rellistic goal,
especially for high school students in college preparatory classes.
The largest number of essays which teachers labeled "best" will be
found tabulated in the chart at the third level of quality. After a study
of university placement examinations in English and a consultation with
examining officials, the Subcommittee determined that essays at this level
would ordinarily meet university requirements for placement of a student
10 FINDINGS
III. Style and Mechanics: Does the essay observe standards of style and
mechanics generally accepted by educated writers?
A. Are the sentences clear, idiomatic, and grammatically correct?
(For c.ample, are they reasonably free of fragments, run-on sen-
tences, comma splices, faulty parallel structure, mixed constructions,
dangling modifiers, and errors of agreement, case, and verb forms?)
B. Is the sentence structure effective?
1. Is there approptiate variety in sentence structure?
2. Are uses of subordination and coordination appropriate?
C. Is conventional punctuation followed?
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D. Is the spelling generally correct?
E. Is the vocabulary accurate, judicious, and sufficiently varied?
SECTION VI
ESSAY 1
CAN IT!
a(
r
dispose of refuse-filled paper sash which motorists carry
completeness. It presents the central idea that although many natural beauty
spots are being clestroyed by careless campers, a concentrated campaign
is making definite progress toward educating the public in outdoor manners.
This idea is developed through such examples as the Izaak Walton League,
The Keep America Beautiful Campaign, and cooperation of the gas stations.
The paper is well rpunded off by the last three sentences, which are conclu-
sive without being repetitious. (Itt) Sentence structure is not always
accurate (the first sentence confuses idioms of comparison; the syntax of
sentence 14 is meaningless), but it is usually correct and effective: sentences
S to t3 show a good and meaningful variety of constructions rhetorically
effective. The only grammatical error of any seriousness is the agreement
error of this in sentence 18.
* * *'
Essays in the first level of the scale are usually characterized by lively
intelligence: the writer's thought flows easily from one idea to another; it
grasps and expresses relationships among ideas and between abstract ideas
and concrete realities. Sentence structure is usually both fluent and com-
latex, vocabulary is extensive, and spelling is good. Such essays characteris-
tically have excellent content, arc frequently rather long, and have fully
developed paragraphs. These qualities seem natural to a' good mind. A young
person s mind, however, may be somewhat undisciplined; thus the usual
faults of essays in this range are in vocabulary, which, being ambitious, is
sometimes experimental, and in organization and sentence structure, which
may occasionally become a trifle confused, The quality of punctuation
seems to vary considerably among the best papers.
ESSAY II
JUVENILE DELINQUENCY
visited the County Jail and Juvenile Hall. (5) We had all
minors, but after the tour, and especially after lengthy dis-
sue d (10) But all these stemmed from the same sourceparents.
easy task to undertake. (17) We saw how much the city, (10 71646
eiadve- tunate minors overcome their problems and lead new, useful
1? lives. (18) But the boarding homes, the camps, the schools
***
Till?. ESSAY SCALE 21
What has been said of essays in the first level applies generally to those .
ESSAY 111
MY FAVORITE SUBJECT
subjects have interested me. (2) But the subject I like the
history.
iia04;04, (7) The first few weeks of the course were miserable be
4444644"!"" taught this course, (14) This course, since it dealt with
the discovery and deve/opment of our state, proved to be
half a year
just one well-chosen illustration would probably have. gone far to fill in
some of the gaps of thought and to breathe some life into this torpid and
unimaginative paper. The concluding paragraph should be better integrated
with the rest of the essay. (III) The paper is free of grammatical and
mechanical errors, though the sentenceslike the Ideastend to be some-
what over simple and structurally monotonous. In the second paragraph, for
example, every clause uses the /-plus-verb construction: I was, l didn't like,
I hoped, I became, I bad, and I groaned.
***
The most common general characteristic of essays in the third level steins
to be simplicity of both thought and expression. The subject is handled
with competence but without distinction; the paragraphs are often short and
lack full development; there is a tendency to write In generalizations with-
out tying them down to yarticulars. The organization is usually logical
but mechanical, and transitions are sometimes a problem. Sentence structure
and vocabulary arc both usually quite simple, reflecting the quality of the
content. The style is wooden.
As a consequence of this general simplicity, few problems of punctuation,
spelling, and sentence structure arise; hence ft..v mistakes are, made in these
areas.
ESSAY 1 V
RURAL LIFE
cool place until it is picked up. (7) The milk is then taken
continued after until it's time for milking again. (10) After
over social life begins. (12) Life in the evening Is pretty 4°4°4°
pneumonia and the /to has been delayed. (IS) Idle time
... ('4)
is rarely found on a farm.
44
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? >(16) There are many advantages. (17) Some are in see.
THE ESSAY SCALE 2$
)Ins animals grow and turn into prize stock and seeing fields
l'
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green and healthy,
***
Essays in the fourth level tend to show little competence with mechanics;
errors of spelling and punctuation appear frequently as well as serious
lapses of grammar and sentenco structure. These papers are sometimes
over simple, and very typically they show a lack of sustaining power: they
begin well with fully developed ideas and accurate sentences, but when
the thought begins to fail, the paragraphs become shorter, and the organiza-
tion and the sentence structure deteriorate. Jerkiness in the thought se-
quence and a stilted style are common. Such papers not infrequently have
flashes of excellence, amidst generally poor writing._
26 THE ESSAY SCALE
ESSAY V
JUVENILE DELINQUENCY
the streets are full of big stores and factosies, but if they, .i..
thing the teenagers could do' .° People should also en- 14,1844444/
tivitiessome
. .
place they world feel needed. (5) When
doing different things, (7) If they heep doing the same thing \
all the time, then they soon grow tired of it and start
whether it's bad or not all they care about is doing some
care fle4,
thing (9) Teenagers are'very restless people.
(1?) They should start when the child is very young and
good, then they should take them, & go themselves, to church. .3t
ESS4Y V,
CHIEF CAUSES OF
JUVENILE DELINQUENCY
14
Atv/s1,0 (1) The causes foe the juvenile delinquence are notAthe .4.414,414/W
to do. (4) There are a lot of school activity for one to get
11.14
into. (5) But the ones who are in them are not the one who trier
are the delinquence: (6) Most of the juvenile delinquence
arfril are the boys or girls who are not very popular in school
and are not in school activity. (7) They may attend school
/40 f2ne, but they won't sit in the cheating section or yell to
4/0 support there,school team. (8) They sit off to the side and
(i 1) For attention they go out and paint the town red. (12)
/6ott,
whir e/ By steeling hub cab off cars or get into gang fights. (13) fr2)0(41
This way they can go back to school and tell all about 11,w
(14) l live in a small town and we are not bother very pro
444. 47 much with this problem. (15) You most! n` e thi in y....t_tr r//4/41,40
440.% big cities tike New York or Los Angeles.
you will fine that all the kids in small tom wn will know each /tle
other or just about every body in the hole town. (19) But
41/t/42P
in a big city how many kids will you know. (20) Just the
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ones in your little group. (21) There are to many kids
//' around to get to know them all.jand you don't have time
j/t /other
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currigular activities.
30 THE ESSAY SCALE
dAid (23) Also if we can regress back to the years when our/23401
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parent were kids. (24) we would fine that there parents la/r/e/
*
our grandparentsidid not take the responsiblity Cofjthere 14,4/410
own action.
41.0
(26) That mean the kid could be sent to jail for what
at t1a have doneUnd not the parentg 40-tele4tA,
(27) So let the teenager have his own responsiblity and 09040
OBSERVATIONS
AND
RECOMMENDATIONS
It has already been observed that "average" high school writing does
not represent satisfactory achievement as measured by college entrance
examinations. The question naturally. arises then of what can be done to
improve writing performance. The most important answer, the Subcommit-
tee believes (and probably most teachers and administrators would agree),
lies in improving the classroom situation. No teacher, however accomplished,
can hope/or any great success when he must reach as many as two hundred
students in a semester; he simply does not hi.ve enough time. Therefore,
whenever possible, sn attempt should be made to limit the teaching load.
The Subcommittee feels that one hundred students is probably a maximum
for effective teaching. It is also desirable, whenever possible, that students
be sectioned according to ability, for a wide range of native capabilities in
one classroom can only compound the instructor's difficulties. Finally, the
teacher himself should, self-evidently, have a thorough grasp of his own
subject matter.
These recommendations are obvious and concern administrative problems
all too familiar to those who have continually to face them; not infrequently
the solution to such problems lies outside the strictly academe area. At
the pedagogical level itself, the followin suggestions might well be worth
the teachers consideration.
1. The maintenance of conservative (but not excessively rigid) standards
of style seems very desirable for both theoretical and practical reasons.
A reasonable command of basic linguistic resources is essential for any
effective communication: the student should be familiar with the structural
elements of English and know how to manipulate them. He needs, too, a
familiarity with standards of style expected in formal prose. As a matter of
discipline, he should not be encouraged to depart from such standards. Ile
will, moreover, acquire a greater feeling of security and confidence if he
has clear and specific goals to work towards. It is true, of course, that many
aspects of English usage are in dispute, but these seldom involve matters of
real significance; the student can take them in stride if he has learned what
is is mportant and essential and what is not.
2. Since there is probal.31y n definite relation between accurate thinking
and clear writing, the teacher should, the Stbcommitteeleels, insist on care-
ful thought as a preliminary to composition. The student should be en-
32 OBSERVATIONS AND RECOMMENDATIONS