Notes

That’ll show him

It looks like to people
Less tension
I like the sharpness whoever its not two people
Who is the other person>
The movements are tight
No vibrate

If you knew my story

No emotion
Smile more you look like your in pain
The whole body is tight
The arm thing was done twice
Work on the run what are you doing for that?
Movement overall was good

Monologue
This is the end needs help
To long a pause bwtween Oh lord
Pregnant pauses
Those need to be more in sync
The timing was slow
The movements where good
The transition between the butt line and the other needs to be changed a little bit
The tree needs to e more in sync
Thing about more or differently it should be faster it seemed slow and lacking energy
To love was slightly off

Notes

That’ll show him

It still looked like you where talking to two people
The song sounded a yawn
The emotion was slightly off
Be quirkier

If you knew my story

The arms where fixed
The face had more emotion
Smile more
Look around was present
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Pregnant enough pauses
Be faster
Make the whole thing faster
Notice the tree better
The whole thing was to slow
Love was good this time
Gas station could be done different

Notes
Thinking was better
When you say you can't lean back
Smile more
Intimately needs to change

Smile more
Riff needs work
Great movements and the voice was good

Notes
Energy is really cute
Maybe make it more personable
Lennon where are you can be different
Thats when I saw the gun pause

Notes
If you knew my Story
Smile more
Especially at the beginning
Relax more in the posture
Smile more
Really step into the end

That’ll show him

Smile more don’t look down but the side I liked space out its looked more natural but when you
space out make sure that your spacing out
Always smile more dont do vibrato till the end
Don’t break the phrasing is important
Open up more
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