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Oet Grammar Writing Letter Structure
Oet Grammar Writing Letter Structure
Oet Grammar Writing Letter Structure
There are a variety of ways to write introductions and with practice you can develop
a formula that works for you. For the purpose of this document, the opening
salutation and subject will be included as part of the introduction.
Salutation: If the name of the person is included in the case notes then it should be
used. This can be followed by either a comma or full colon.
If the name of person is not mentioned then you can begin with Sir/Madam
o Dear Sir/Madam,
Subject: The subject is a place where information such as the name & age of the
patient can be included. This can save you words in the body of the letter, but be
careful not include too much information here, and definitely no phrases or
sentences. Both Re & RE are acceptable.
Handy Tip 1
You can save on word length by added some detail after Re, such as the patient
name and age. However, take care not to write too much here, and always use note
form i.e nouns only (no articles, verbs, adjectives)
Basically, the introductory sentence of the letter can contain the following:
It will usually be only 1 or 2 sentences long and detailed information about the
patient's history and condition should go in the main body of the letter.
Example 2
Appositives: This is a noun or a noun phrase that is placed after another noun to
explain or identify it, and a comma is required to separate these nouns. It has a very
important use in the introductory sentence of referral letters as in the example
below.
Example 3
Age: There are specific rules regarding how to refer to a patient's age. The first is
that it must be hyphenated when used before a noun such as man/woman, and the
second is that an article is required. For more details refer to Year Vs Years in the
Grammar and Vocabulary Clinic.
Incorrect Correct
I am writing to refer this • I am writing to refer this patient,
patient, a 63 years old man a 63-year-old man who lives
who lives alone. alone.
I am writing to refer this • I am writing to refer this patient
patient, 63 years old man who is 63 years old and lives
who lives alone. alone.
Handy Tip 2
Mastery of the patterns above will ensure that you start your letter on a positive
note.
Sample Introductions
Introduction Analysis
Dear Ms. Attard, Does not include patient name as
this is clearly stated in the subject
Re: Ms. Robyn Harwood line
DOB: 04/02/1948 Uses relative clause and
appositive sentence structures
I am writing to request daily home visits which demonstrate ability to use
by the Blue Nurses to provide care and complex sentences
support for this patient, a 61-year-old States purpose of writing clearly
widow who lives on her own.
Dear Sir/Madam, Includes shorter for a patient
name as full name stated in the
Re: Mr. Henry O’Keefe subject line
Uses appositive and relative
I am writing to request aged care clause sentence structure which
assistance for Mr. O’Keefe, an demonstrates ability to use
83-year-old man who is recovering from complex sentences
a malignant melanoma in his left States both purpose of writing and
shoulder. chief complaint
Common Errors
Incorrect Correct
Dear Ms. Jones, Dear Ms. Jones,
Thank you for admitting Mrs. Saunders, Thank you for admitting Mrs. Saunders,
an 80-year-old dementia patient,requires an 80-year-old dementia patient who
respite care for a period of two months. requires respite care for a period of two
Explanation: Relative pronoun required. months.
Dear Mrs. Smith, Dear Mrs. Smith,
Study Strategy
When writing introductions, find a style which you like and use it for all tasks.
However, take care to understand the basic grammar rules and always remember to
include the chief complaint, purpose of writing or your main concern. Practice
writing introductions using the sample case notes provided in your course.
Body Paragraphs
Most referral letters will contain 2 or 3 body paragraphs located between the
introduction and the conclusion. Each of the paragraphs should have a main idea
which the writer needs to convey to the reader. All the sentences with the
paragraphs must relate to this main idea. The length of the paragraphs will vary, but
an approximate guideline to meet the required word length of 180~200 words in
OET is as follows:
Introduction: 25 words
Body paragraph 1: 40 words
Body Paragraph 2: 40 words
Body Paragraph 3: 70 words
Conclusion: 25 words
Paragraph Structure
A good paragraph will contain 3 main elements
1. A Topic Sentence which introduces the reader to the main idea of the
paragraph. In many cases it will identify and/or summarise an area of
concern regarding the patient. Quite often it is written in original words
rather than from words in the case notes.
2. Supporting sentences which may contain the detail regarding patient
history, descriptions of symptoms, significant aspects from the
treatment record, causes and effects, trends and so on. Quite often this
information can be taken directly from the case notes, and written as full
sentences. However, you will need to paraphrase the information into
your own words. This includes:
o Changing verbs to nouns: complain=complaint
o Changing adjectives to nouns: lethargic=lethargy
o Using synonyms
o For more details on how to paraphrase, follow this link:
Paraphrase
3. Signal words link sentences together so that the information flows
smoothly and is easy to read.
Common signal words which can help you present information clearly and logically
include:
Example 1
Case Notes Paragraphs Analysis
Diagnosis Ms. Harwood was Topic sentence is introduced
Right partial rotator admitted to our with the phrase: Ms. Harwood
cuff tear hospital on the 30th of was admitted to our hospital
Presented to Mater October with a on....
hospital with pain and diagnosis of right Supporting sentences
weakness in the right rotator cuff tear transform case notes into
shoulder, especially following a fall while complete sentences
when lifting arm descending stairs. Signal words express cause
overhead. Therefore, surgery and effect and express
Descending stairs at has been suggested, contrast
home and slipped, however, she prefers o Therefore,
falling onto non-surgical o However
outstretched arm. treatment. She has
Xray and MRI showed received ibuprofen
a partial rotator cuff and cortisone as
tear. prescribed and also
Orthopaedic surgeon daily visits by a
discussed surgery. physiotherapist.
Patient prefers to try
non-surgical
treatment.
Date of admission:
30-10-2008
Date of discharge:
01-11-2008
Treatment
Ibuprofen orally QID
Cortisone injections
Daily physiotherapy
Medical History In terms of her Topic sentence is introduced
Diabetes Mellitus Type medical history, she with the phrase: In terms of
2 suffers from type 2 medical history,
Metformin 500mg diabetes mellitus for Supporting sentences
mane which she is taking transform case notes into
metformine 500mg. complete sentences
Nursing Care Needs However, following Signal words connect ideas
Needs blood glucose her discharge, she will and express contrast
level monitoring 4 need a regular o However,
hourly monitoring on the o due to
May be elevated blood glucose level o also
because of cortisone which may become o As well as this,
Needs assistance with elevated due to
shower and administration of
housework cortisone during
Orthopaedic review on hospitalisation. She
19th November will also require
assistance in
showering and home
help. As well as this,
she needs to review
her condition with an
orthopaedic surgeon
on the 19th of
November.
Social Background Ms. Harwood lives There is no topic sentence, but
Marital status: Widow. alone and has no the main idea of social history
No children. Lives children. Her next of is clear
alone kin is her niece, Megan Supporting sentences expand
Next of kin: Megan Mack who lives in the case notes into complete
Mack (Niece) Sydney. Regrettably, sentences, note the use of
Niece lives with she has no relatives or verbs, articles and
husband in Sydney friends to support her. conjunctions (and)
who works as software Signal word shows empathy
engineer for Google o Regrettably,
Australia. Sister died
recently. No other
relatives.
Example 2
Case Notes Paragraphs Analysis
Birth History The patient was born The topic sentence is begins
Normal vaginal birth via vaginal birth at with the baby's birth.
at term term with a birth Supporting sentences
Birth weight: 3400gm weight of 3400 transform case notes into
Apgar score at 5min: grams. During a complete sentences
9 heatwave at Displays understanding of the
No antenatal or Christmas, the baby long case notes by
postnatal became unsettled, summarising the main idea.
complications due to lack of fluids. Explains conflicting views of
When the mother mother and mother-in-law.
Feeding became sick for a few Signal words express a time
Breast fed for first days, her line, contrast and cause and
three weeks after mother-in-law visited effect.
birth. to help out but has o During a heatwave
advised her to change o When...
Baby became to formula feeds and o However,....
unsettled during to put more powder in o Therefore,....
heatwave at the bottle to improve
Christmas. Mother weight gain.
got sick and had a However, the mother
fever for a few days. believes that breast
Mother-in-law came milk is the best for her
to visit and advised baby and would like
changing baby to to breast feed
formula feeds. full-time but is
Mother-in-law worried that she
advised extra powder doesn’t have enough
in formula feeds to breast milk for the
improve weight gain. baby. Therefore, she
Mother-in-law says has been giving extra
her son (Ray Charles) formula feeds to the
also had feeding baby.
problems and
difficulty gaining
weight as a baby.
Objective
Reflexes normal
Lethargic
No abdominal
tenderness
Heart Rate: 174
Respirations: 56
Temperature: 37.1
Weight: 4200gms
3 wet nappies in last
24 hours. Urine dark.
Assessment
Mild constipation and
dehydration
Plan Could you please Topic sentence is a request of
Increase breast support and advise support
feeds. Refer to breast the mother regarding Supporting sentences expand
feeding support breastfeeding and case notes into formal
service. Check correct preparation of sentences
formula is correctly formula feeds if Signal words add cohesion
prepared. If required. In addition, o In addition,
continuing formula advice on how to keep o Please note,
feeds, advise to the baby cool in hot
supplement with weather is necessary.
water (boiled and Please note, the
cooled). Advise on patient is due for
keeping baby cool in review on
hot weather. Return 17/01/2010.
for review in 48
hours.
Conclusions
The conclusion or final paragraph in the letter should be fairly standard in structure.
It should be based on the task question which is found at the end of case notes. It
may contain one or two of the following points:
It is useful to be familiar with some standard patterns so that you are able to
conclude your letter confidently, quickly and most importantly, accurately. However,
some degree of originality will impress the assessors. Therefore, where possible try
to ensure that your conclusion is related to your task and not simply a memorised
ending.
Modal Verbs : Some modal verbs & the verb hope are used to convey politeness
and commonly used for polite requests in the conclusion of formal letters. Compare
the patterns below.
Informal Polite More polite
Can you examine Please examine and Could you please
and treat the treat the patient as examine and treat
patient as you feel you feel the patient as you
appropriate appropriate. feel appropriate
I will be pleased if Please examine, I would be grateful if
you can examine, diagnose and treat you could examine,
diagnose and treat the patient as you diagnose and treat
the patient as you feel appropriate. the patient as you
feel appropriate. Please arrange feel appropriate.
Can you arrange someone to help (active)
someone to help this family and I would appreciate it
this family and provide proper if you could
provide proper medical support. examine, diagnose
medical support. and treat the
patient as you feel
appropriate.
(active)
It would be greatly
appreciated if you
could examine,
diagnose and treat
Explanation: These Explanation: These the patient as you
sentences are fine in sentences are acceptable in feel appropriate.
spoken English, but not written English, but can (passive and most
suitable for formal writing. sound quite direct. polite)
Can and will are considered I hope you can
less polite than could and arrange someone to
would. help this family and
provide proper
medical support.
Explanation: These
sentences are the most
suitable for concluding
requests in formal letters.
Sample Conclusions
Case Notes Conclusion Analysis
Writing Task In order to maintain a good Uses information
Mr O’Riley has requested health condition, Mr. from the writing
advice on low fat dietary O’Riley has requested task to formulate
guidelines and healthy advice on low fat dietary conclusion
simple recipes. Write a guidelines and healthy Contains a polite
letter to the Community simple recipes. It would be request
Information Section of the greatly appreciated if you Maintains polite
Heart Foundation, Gregory could send the above tone through the
Terrace, Brisbane on the mentioned information to use of modal verbs
patient's behalf. Use the Mr. O’Riley at his home would and could
relevant case notes to address, 9476 Old Dam Contains
explain Mr O’Riley’s Road, Goondiwindi, QLD, information specific
situation and the 4390. to the task
information he needs.
Include Medical History, Yours sincerely,
Body Mass Index and
lifestyle. Information Lee Wong Charge Nurse
should be sent to his home
address.
Writing Task I hope you will be able to Uses information
Using the information in the arrange someone who can from the writing
case notes, write a letter to help this family and provide task to formulate
The Director, Community proper medical support. conclusion
Child Health Service, 15 Please do not hesitate to Contains a request
Pauline Street, Kuraby, contact me if you require using the polite
requesting follow-up of this any further information expression: I hope
family. about this family. you will be able to..
Contains
Yours sincerely, information specific
to the task
Nurse Offers future
assistance
Charge Nurse
Common Errors
Incorrect Correct
I would very much appreciated I would very much appreciate
your attention regarding further your attention regarding further
management of Mr. Henderson. management of Mr.
Henderson.(active)
Explanation: Incorrect grammar, see Your attention regarding further
above management of Mr. Henderson
would be very much
appreciated.(passive)
If you have any query, please do If you have any queries, please do
not hesitate to contact me. not hesitate to contact me.
Handy Tip
As with introductions, when writing conclusions, find a style and pattern which you
are confident with and use it. However, take care to understand the basic grammar
rules and always remember to respond to the task question. Practice writing
conclusions using the sample case notes provided in your course.