listed some ways to care for a park and made a suggestion about why we should care for parks.
It would have great if you had
included some more reasons why people visit parks and some more reasons why it is important to care for parks.
Hi xx, You have given clear
and detailed reasons why people might visit a park, you have thoroughly considered how to care for a park and you have provided a clear explanation of why parks need to be cared for.
Hi xx, you have given three reasons
why people would visit a park, you’ve made a list and included ways to care for a park. I would have also loved for you to explain why people need to look after a park. What would happen if people didn’t do those things you listed?