IELTS Writing Evaluation

Order details
User ID: 2137901
Order No: #392349
Date of completion: 2021-07-15
Examiner’s name: Kate T.
Practice test name: IELTS Mock Test 2021 June - Practice Test 1
Final bandscore: 6.0

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 Task 1

Questions

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram shows the design of a modern landfill for household waste. Summarize the information by
selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Answer & Correction

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 The architechtureway ofin anwhich excluciveto uptoconstruct datea landfill regardingfor
towaste householdfrom wastehouses is shown in athe diagram. Overall,...(you must have a clear
summary- say how many steps there are and some important things involved)

The amazingconstruction constructionofof thea household watse landfill starts with thea hole
which is made by digging right down to the natural rock and putting a layer of synthetic
substance, right after thata witha layer of clay, to make it solid enough to hold all types of liquid
waste. Moreover theredrainage ispipes and a drainage pipestank are also placed at the bottom
of the hole, to assist the liquids andto otherbe wastescarried without waterof leave the landfill
easily.

then(Put theresthis alsoabove pipeand goingthere underis not glass here at all- do not mention
things which are not in the drainagediagram). tankNext, the hole is filled with rubbish and
quitethen over the layertop of clay.the Therehole is alosocovered ain thinmore layerclay, ofto
glasshide tpit. protectFinally, thegases pipeare carried out of leakingthe oehole anythrough
typethe of damagepipes. This concludes thehow to make a man made landfill for getting rid of
household junk.rubbish (you must include everything)
(186 words)

Evaluation

Task Achievement 3.0

You are under the minimum 150 words, which affects your marks. In addition, in part 1 you
need to give all details. If you forget anything in part 1, your marks plunge. In addition, you
need a clear summary (this should state how many steps/stages there are and some of the
most important things involved in the process)

Coherence and Cohesion 6.0

Linking words are used but also try to use more sequencing words here for higher marks
(e.g. following this, in the subsequent stage, etc)

Lexical Resource 6.0

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 The vocabulary is adequate for the task but there are some mistakes in accuracy of spelling
or word choice

Grammatical Range and Accuracy 6.0

Some complex sentences are used and a variety of tenses, but not always accurately.

Task 1 Overall Score : 5.5

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Task 2

Questions

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research,
business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to
be shared freely.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Answer & Correction

A number of individuals fancybelieve that it is pleasentbest to allowshare as much information

as possible inabout scientific experiments, and commerce and theacademia, educationalwhile
world where others trusts that quite a bit of information is too significant or too valuable to be
discussedshared openly. This essay discusseswill discuss both views and agrees with them
equally.

FirstlyOn the one hand, the main reason for why some individuals beivebelieve that
givingsharing awayinformation informatin is important is beacause of the satisfying results that
willresult comefrom alongdoing so. In other words, shairing important inforamation about the
studies done forin all feildsfields of work will help people who are looking for that particular
information. For example, a person who is looking for higher educational information they will
find it assistablehelps them if thoes higher educational institutions shared thoesthat information
with the public. Therefore, sharing information about many feildfields can be very
acceseblehelpful. forIn case.addition,...(second point on this side?)

IntiallyOn the other hand, other individuals belives are validated as well, since some information
areis toomore significant then others. This is because, a business or work space has to keep
some information secret so that they can keep up with competitors in their business or trade.
with their competitors.For instance, in a recent timeTime magazine, article they foundsaid out
that nasaNasa refused to talk about some scientific reserch in area 59 so that they do not scare
the public. AditionallySo, in some fields of work andsome reserchresearch needs to havebe
theirkept significant and valuable information vague, to protect their lebellabel or name .
orFurhermore,..(Second justpoint generalon public.this side?)

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 In conclusion, this essay, based on the above discussion, firmly supporstsupports both
viwesviews, because as muchimportant as it is important to share some information, but it is
also quite important to keep valuable information vague. (ok but summarize all points made
above here too)
(304 words)

Evaluation

Task Achievement 6.0

You have good ideas here but you need 2 completely different points on each side (not just
one per side). Also, summarize all points at the end.

Coherence and Cohesion 6.0

Paragraphs are used but use more linking devices (moreover, furthermore, on the one hand,
on the other hand)

Lexical Resource 6.0

There is an adequate range of lexis, with a good degree of accuracy. There are some errors
in spelling and/or word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy 6.0

Some complex structures are used, with a variety of tenses, though there are quite a few
mistakes.
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Task 2 Overall Score : 6.0

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 Final score 6.0

Conclusion

You have some good English vocabulary here but do be careful with mistakes. In addition, you
have good ideas in the essay but you need 2 points on each side and ensure you clearly show
where each new point starts. Also use more linking words and summarize everything at the
end. Regarding part 1, you must have at least 150 words and include every single detail, and
use more sequencing words. If you do this, your marks could be higher. Best, Kate

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