A.

Shortening words and phrases

1.Likewise, in all cases, give consideration to the integrity of the person chosen to transmit the package to our client.
*Give consideration to the integrity of the person chosen to transmit the package.

2.I am cognizant of the numerous aspects about the transmission of the package to our client.
*I’m cognizant of the numerous aspects about the transmission of the package.

3.Please, inquire about utilization of the additional stamp for mailing the package.
*Inquire about utilization of the additional stamp for mailing the package.

4.Obtain some information with regard to their plans in making amendments to their system of delivering goods to their
clientele.
*Obtain some information about their plans in making amendments to their system.

5.Enclosed please find a check in the amount of two thousand pesos which I think is insufficient for the mailing of the
package.
*Please find a check in the amount of two thousand pesos which is insufficient for the mailing of the package.

B. Avoiding “shun” or camouflaged words

1.Any of the parties can make a classification of the documents before they will make a revision on these papers.
*Any of the parties can make classified documents before they will revise these papers.

2.My suggestion to both parties is to make them request an extension of the deadline for the registration of the
contract.
*I suggest that both parties are to make request to extend the deadline for the contract to be registered.

3.The officers have an expectation that both parties will come to an agreement with each other, soon.
*The officers expected that both parties will come to an agreement with each other, soon.

4.Definitely, Mr. Cruz will give consideration to the agent’s explanation about the cancellation of the meeting.
*Mr. Cruz will consider what the agent has explained about the meeting being cancelled.

5.Mr. Cruz made a suggestion for the postponement of the meeting.

*Mr. Cruz suggests the postponement of the meeting.

C. Omitting clichés, worn-out, or overused expressions

1.Enclosed herewith are photocopies of our latest washing machine.
*Photocopies of our latest washing machine are included.

2.We take pleasure in having you as one of our guest speakers.

*We’re pleased to have you as one of our guest speakers.

3.He has improved his writing skills by leaps and bounds.

*By leaps and bounds, he’s developed his writing skills.
4.This is to inform you that our general assembly will be at the Heritage Hall.
*Our general assembly will be at the Heritage Hall.

5.Needless to say, all business firms want enthusiastic,- well-read, and creative technical writers.
*All business firms want enthusiastic,- well-read, and creative technical writers.

D. Avoid redundancies and expletives

1.This seminar helped me plan in advance my activities in school and in my work place.
*The seminar helped me plan in my activities in school and in my work place.

2.Her lecture in the seminar should deal mainly with true facts.
*Her lecture should deal with true facts.

3.Do you mean to say, you need more lectures and practice on effective technical writing?
*Do you need more lectures and practice on effective technical writing?

4.Please give that color green bag to Engineer Gomez, our guest speaker.
*Please give that green bag to Engineer Gomez.

5.The seminar focused on the technical reports about Engineer Lopez’s new invention on computer technology.
*The seminar focused on the technical reports about Engineer Lopez’s new invention.