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Essay Feedback Report: By: Sir Amanullah Gondal (FSP)
Essay Feedback Report: By: Sir Amanullah Gondal (FSP)
Thesis Statement Thesis statement is relevant Try to keep the thesis short and Satisfactory
but detailed. compact.
Logical Sequence Outline has reasonable logical Always write a proper concluding Poor
order but paragraphs are not sentence when every para ends
connected with each other. so that it is connected to the next
para.
Body Paragraphs 1. Paragraphs are okay with 1. Improve your presentation, 1. Satisfactory
good length.
and handwriting.
Content Quality Content quality is fine but keep reading so that content is Satisfactory
should be improved in next better and your essay looks
essays. mature.
Final Remarks: It is a very good and sincere effort on your part. Structure looks to be okay with
reasonable content and adequate language. Still, there are some issues which must
be resolved. Good luck!
Category Comments Improvements Needed Status
2. Outline formatting
5. Conclusion improvement